by ʞ ɔ ǝ ɹ ʍ d ı ʞ s » Thu Apr 09, 2015 8:40 am
Oh... My... Word. I just read the last one and it was absolutely fantastic!
I loved the fantasy feel and found myself asking questions and wanting more!
English may not be your first language, but man you sure know how to use it to create amazing stories!
That in itself is pretty darn impressive, let alone the ideas and creativity you brought into that story.
I reeeaaally love the whole ideas- just- just- fantastic.
There were just a couple tenses to fix, but definitely better than last time!
Also, with "Their dynasty would finally come to an end" I was a tad confused about the word choice, as I expected "dynasty" to be a word more like misery or something. A dynasty is the rule of one family over a country. I just wanted to ask if that's the word you meant c:
And "Being caught on a piece of papyrus wasn’t the proper life for old magic like this." That. Was. The coolest sentence. Idk I just had to bring that up. I loooove how you worded that- the idea that the magic is trapped on the scroll hehe it's so awesome.