Eyes of FireIt has a really good start, but I feel like I am missing part of the story. Was it the challenger or the challengie that died? How does this brave warrior feel about this wake of death he brings? Why is he like that? ect. ect.
The rhyming is effortless and wonderfully done, and the language seems accurate for the piece.
Still, I would love to see what you happen if you gave us more detail.
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- As you can guess, my name is Cadin!
I am very friendly, feel free to PM or trade with me!
I might not be on 24/7, but I am still very active!
✎ I will be on very spottily.
I am going through a lot of personal stuff.
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