~A howl on the Wind~There seems to be a base for the chapters, like a short summary of what happens. But that's it. The chapters are more like paragraphs and there is no really plot, just a string of events. I would suggest going back and expanding on whats happening. Give more detail, give more action, give well...more. If you could expand each chapter to say...5-6 paragraphs (or more), you would have a much fully and much more capturing story. The reader wants to see the struggle and the change from human to wolf and what happens with the rest of the family. Give more to her turning. Give more to her becoming leader. Give more to her past and her pups. And the battle, and hunting the first time, and everything. This gives you the plot. This give you the character development and a full story. It also seems incomplete, and this might be because everything it so short, but it could also be because there is no story arc. There is no conflict-resolution. If you go back and add more, be sure that you include and center the story around one conflict and moving to the resolution. That could be anything from her battling to maintain leadership, or the other wolf packs, or trying to get back to human, or what ever else you can think of. That is up to you. Just make it strong and constant. You wouldn't have to change any of the events, just have to eventually tie it into either the character development that relates to the conflict, or the conflict itself.
I also suggest you look back and read over to fix up the grammatical errors.
Overall, you have a base for a strong, interesting, and compelling story. But just a base. You need more. And I think you can write it out. I'm excited to see what you do with it.
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