by Cadin Araceli » Sun Sep 08, 2013 12:25 pm
To Jump or Not to Jump
As I will always say, if you need to have an explanation included for your poem to make sense, you need to find a way to make it obsolete. Either by adding more into your poem so you explain it within reading it, or by changing the poem slightly so that the direct meaning you have isn't as important.
Beyond that, I would say to remember that capitalization is important, and to make sure you do a read though for those kinds of things.
Along with that, I would love to have more detail as to what is doing on in your characters head. It's not easy to make a move like that, and so having more detail as to he thoughts and possibly flash back would be grand. It would add to the poem, both figuratively and literally, which I think would really work for how you write.
Also, beware the trap of I. It's a wonderful word and great to use! But, not every sentence.
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