rose.bloom wrote:Can anyone help me with some English homework?
Got points marked off for not being in present tense (requirement), but am not sure how to fix the line to make it present tense.
Her mine is a cup overflowing with frantic cries to be noticed.
She crossed out "is" and wrote stay in present tense.
Help?
try something closer to
"The cup of her mind overflows with desperate cries for attention"
It might be a problem with passive tense (?) where the object of the sentence is described rather than acting. (whoops that didn't make sense) I'm not entirely sure if that's what your teacher meant, but its something I frequently got marked off for.
Other explanation: passive versus active tense is the difference between "Our troops defeated the enemy" (active) and "The enemy was defeated by our troops" (passive)
Usually it can be fixed by a bit of reordering of the sentence. Try reading it out loud or "explaining" the meaning of your sentence out loud to fix it. Normally, explaining the meaning of a phrase/sentence will help your argument/meaning become clearer.
Hope that made sense and somewhat helps.
Side note: I am not an English prof or an author, but I love writing and usually have fairly accurate grammar. But don't take my word as law as I am quite fallible.