here i edited the one you made
Lilyheart was born on a cold chilly night in leaf-bare.
Her mother graystorm and his father skyheart
welcomed her. Lilyheart was also born with a
brother named Rainkit. He is a dark grey tabby
tom-cat just like her. But little did she know that
he would grow up to be leader. They were, and still
are, very close together. By the time they were
apprentices graystorm decided to be a permit queen
and help out expecting she-cats. lilykit and rainkit didn't
mind this, though their father hated it. they
often fought about how she should be a
warrior again. when lilyheart and rainstar,
or lilypaw and rainpaw, were ten moons old their
father died of a murder from a rouge. the clan
was devastated. graystorm was really sorrowful
and depressed even six moons after. though lilypaw
and rainstar got their warrior names.
one late night their mother died from blood lost
after a battle. everyone was sorrowful. later one
rainfall, lilyheart’s brother, was granted to be the
deputy. he was very happy, she was very excited
for him and knew he would be a great leader one day.
then twenty seven moons later the current leader died,
granting rainfall his leader name.