The Roleplay Academy's Class A (Novice)

[Wolfie-Kat]

(Is Alice going to post? Or are we going to continue?)

[Wolf'sflame]

(We are, and I am glad you asked: I sent her a PM a while back so we will skip her turn. Since Commie hasn't finished, Commi will be skipped, so I will post a Critique very soon)

[fluffy mcderp]

(I am grounded, i can´t keep posting in the rp school sorry

[Wolf'sflame]

(Alrighty then)

[Wolf'sflame]

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Critique

Wolfie-kat

Very good length and description, you have also fixed up the fragmentation. We need a bit more description thought, if you are doing that; then great!

Whimsical Jukeboxx

Very good description, but you need to give your character thought and feelings. It's good to show how they think and feel about the situation, that is what you are mainly missing.

Crying of the Soul

Amazing as always, you have put in some nice thoughts, although we do need some feelings. Other than that, I see nothing wrong with this post. Great job!

[Wolfie-Kat]

(I will be gone until the 10th!)

[Wolf'sflame]

(Thank you for telling me)

[Wolfie-Kat]

(back, but you still need to post for me to post:3)

[Cry of the Soul]

(Are we still doing this?)

[Wolf'sflame]

(Yes, sorry about messing up there; I've been very busy throughout this summer and school has started. I'll post right now)