Autumn's Call wrote:(Heres what's wrong with your forms:• History •
Newborn:Same as now but smaller
Puphood:Same as now but smaller
Juvenile:Kind of right now
All grown up:Yet to come
I'm not asking for appearance. I'm asking for the history. For example, look at my form. Please re-do the history on all of your forms.Pack: Snow's pack
Rank: ---
Wanted rank:He's a loner but one day he wants to be a fighter
It says he's in snow's pack, but then it says he's a loner. Please fix that on Thomas and Tim's forms. ^ ^ ;
Other than that, your forms are fine~ <3)
Snow grinned. "Goody." She said, wagging her tail. She now trusted Jack fully. He seemed like such a sweet dog. After a moment, she asked, "Have you ever sled raced before?"
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Duke scratched his ear, bored. Humans passed him, giving him fearful looks. What? Do they think I have rabies or something? Stupid humans... He hauled himself up and walked to the pack area. It was quite a long walk. When he arrived, all he wanted to do was lay down. "Hi guys. I'm here." He announced. He saw Snow talking to a male, who was obviously new. He hadn't seen him around before. He wanted to stroll over and say hi, but she thought that would be impolite to disrupt their covnversation. So he waited.








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