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The Downtown Haunting (New!) No Posting!

Postby itsdemonnxoxo » Sun Jan 08, 2012 11:10 am

Chapter 1
Moving In


Around in, 1837 a huge mansion was build in a forest in the downtown of, Clarksville.A small family of 4 has beening looking around in this little town.They were driving past the forest and notice a, 'for sale' poster outside of a long dark, driveway.They all agree to go check it out.The Mcall's drive down the road and come along the, mansion.It had very little age to it.They descide to go to a real estate agent to talk about the house.
They, finally find the nearest agent in town.Many, hours later they come out with the key to the manison.They, weren't poor or rich.They were in the middle.They went back to there old home and on the way the town's people were giving them dirty looks.The, Mcall's ignore their neighbors and resume their drive.They pack and load the car and then started there way to the new house.There making there way down the road to there new house and a deer dashes out infront of the car from there drive-way.Jacob Mcall there farther slams on the breaks and slides the car.Their racing hearts were pounding out of there chest!They could have died.
He looks in the back seat to check on his daughter, Amber. "Are you ok?" he asked never looking away from the stearing wheel.Amber is still shocked and she replys, "Yes, I am alright.Is the car ok?" she asked nervously.Mrs. Mcall opens the door and walks calmly to the front.She gives them a thumps up and nods her head.Mr. Mcall begans to start breathing again.
Their German Sheperd, Major sits there barking at nothing.Amber strokes him hoping he would quite.Elizbeth came back to ther car and closed the door."Its ok to go again." she grinned awaiting to unpack in there new home.Major quite barking and Jacob drove the car back to the road.Amber was looking out the road and she seen a weird figure.She wiped her eyes and didn't seen anything there.They pull the car into the drive-way and began down the road.Major perks his ears and growl.Amber looks down at, Major as he growls at nothing.
Jacob looks back and has a confused face, "He is just picking up an animals smell or something?" he told Amber.Amber shook her head knowing something here was already wrong.The car stops infront of the mansion.Amber opens the door first and Major comes out to her side.He stands there just looking at the house.Amber pats him on the head and she tapps on her dads side of the window.She smiled and opens his door, "Can you open the trunk?" she asked him waiting.He smiled and opened it for her.Amber grabbed her stuff and waited at the door.Elizbeth opened the door for, Amber.Amber walks up the stairs and opened the second door to the right.She looks around in the room and nods.This is the room for her.
Major comes in with her and he circles the room sniffing.Amber turns on the light switch and it doesn't come on.She frowns and lowers her head in sadness.Major cokes his head to the side and whines.She puts her stuff down and walks to the window.A huge back yard full of woods.She lifted her shoulder and went back to her stuff.She seen a shadow like figure standing right there infront of her.Major growled and made his way towards the figure.Amber screams and runs threw the fugure with a cold chill covering her body.The hairs on her neck began to stick up.Major dashes after run running down the stairs awaiting for her.Mr. and Mrs. Mcall drop there stuff and run to, Amber. "What's the matter?" they both ask Amber. "Some..Some..thing is in m..m..my room!" she cried darting into her, dad's chest.She patted her on the back."Major e...e..even sa..saw it.." she mummbled to them.They both look at each other and then began to walk up the stairs.
They enter the room and see, Amber's stuff throwed everywhere. "It wasn't like that when I dropped it." she whispered.Major walked in front and went to the corner of the bedroom and began to growl.His growling was starting to scare, the Mcall's. "Major..?Come here boy.." Amber whisled.Major turned his head towards Amber and growled.Stalking his way towards them he sat down in front of Amber.The hair on his neck was standing up and was starting to go down.Amber stroke Major's head.When Amber was stroking the hair once raised again..Major slowly got up and stood his ground.He jumped up in the middle of the air and was being shook around.
Jacob took off towards Major and grabbed his stomack. "Please quit!" he yelled at what ever was attacking there dog.The spirit dropped Major and now he wasn't moving.Amber broke out into tears and darted off to Major. "MAJOR!" she cried, "MAJOR!!" she felt a cold chill touch her shoulder.It was a young girl with a tore up black dress and blood was rushing down her arms.Amber felt the blood and screamed.Elizabeth looked at the figure and fainted.Jacob's eyes grew bigger.Major moved his head towards the child.He growled and clawed at the floor.

W.I.P!

I am going to be making a cover of the book in a moment..Feel free to help me!


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