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[Betta132]

Cool! More! Poor Sparky

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[. ME]

I dont mean to sound rude but....You use " when talking, not *
And you spelling needs to improve. And need more use of caps and details. For example( This is a random story part I came up with in my head ):

Alice walked through the dark forest. She tripped over a tree root and her hands got cut up and bloody. She scooted over to the tree and covered her face with her hands, sobbing, " Oh, Jack! Where are you? I need you....I need your help... ". As if by magic, She heard foot steps. She looked up, her face now bloody because of her hands. A teen, about the same age as her, came. Jack. She jumped up and gave him a great bear hug. " I missed you, Jack...With all my heart! " She whispered.

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You took that way the wrong way, Chill out. I dont make perfect writing either, but your spelling easy words wrong. Like shriek! You put shreek instead of I. Writing doesnt look good with bad spelling and ' and * as spelling. It does need to improve. Dont yell at me when Im saying what I think. I have freedom of speech, or in this case, typing. I didn't say it wasnt meant to be the greatest story in the world. I never said my writing was perfect. But atleast I can spell words correct and use the correct punctuation and use details. And use caps at beginning of a sentence and in names.