Little Tales (please critique)

[AlexiM01]

thanks:) bump

[AlexiM01]

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[Roonil Wazlib]

Wow, you should write more! I love these!

[AlexiM01]

Thanks so much

4.Infected
Ty coughed and sputtered, tears welling in his red eyes. The glass bottle which once contained an infectious substance was now pulsing through every vein of this man's body. He collapsed onto the ground, a drop of the infectious substance flowing down his lower lip and staining the filthy laboratory floor. The scientist cackled as he watched Ty shiver and twitch uncontrollably. Suddenly, Ty's eyes turned as white as snow and his yellowish teeth sharpened. The scientist smirked Experiment complete. Ty stopped moving for a brief moment.

When he rose to his feet, he grinned maliciously, showing two front teeth as sharp as knives. He licked the infectious substance of his lips before walking toward his master, the scientist. Smirking in delight, the scientist picked up the glass bottle which once contained the substance. "My son...you have now been infected...improved. By the blood of what you have now become. A vampire."

[AlexiM01]

Bumping

[lynettetan1]

cool!)

[AlexiM01]

Bump:)

[AlexiM01]

5. Kat's Garden
Kat purred in delight as she lay on the viridian grass, her whiskers gently moving along with the wind. The sun was partially hidden by an ominous cloud. Kat smiled as she stared at the vast sky. Thoughts of her owner coming back filled her mind up. Kat got back on her paws and walked happily through the thick, overgrown grass. She loved brushing against the grass. It gently scratched her back, making her tingle in sheer joy. Kar mewed softly when she bent over to sniff a purple flower, shadowed by brown, on the grass. Kat pawed it before settling down in the grass. The scents of the flowers her owner grew filled her nostrils as she lay in the grass. Kat smiled when she looked up and caught sight of the dandelions dancing in the breeze. After taking in the beautiful sight, Kat poked around the crimson rose and magenta bougainvillea bushes, avoiding the thorns. Kat loved this garden more than her own life and almost as much as her owner. Every afternoon hr owner used to pet her as they lay in the grass and watched the bees and butterflies. The birds were smart enough to avoid Kat's territory. Kat watched the colourful flower petals and magnificent leaves dance in the morning breeze, smiling warmly. Suddenly, Kat heard the screeching halt of A car. Padding over to the front of the house, Kat purred in delight. Her owner opened the car door, placed his suitcase down and ran toward Kat, arms wide. KAt purred and mewed as he gently stroked her. The first thing he did was not put his suitcase in the house. The first thing the owner did was lie in the garden, stroking Kat, watching the bees and butterflies.

[lynettetan1]

awesome! I like the different points of view. One question though, are they going to meet or something?)

[AlexiM01]

Hmmm...maybe...I'll think about it thanks for the suggestion