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What Do Ya Think? Some Poems I wrote For School XD

Postby Muhahahahahahahaha » Mon Jan 02, 2012 6:04 pm

Well I wrote these poems for school a couple of weeks ago and my teacher loved them as did everyone else who saw them. I was told that some of them (especially the time ones) are a bit morbid... But nothing like blood dripping of tearing off limbs or any gore. Anyways, there are eight total, four about time and four about fire. Tell me what you think!! XD

Time

Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock

Tick, tock, tick, tock,
Every hour on the clock,
Tick, tock, tick, tock,
Never will it ever stop,
Tick, tock, tick, tock,
It passes all us by,
Tick, tock, tick, tock,
‘Til it’s our time to die.

Bells Ring

Bells ring,
Through this old house,
They sing,
Stiring every last mouse,
Every hour,
Leaving none unaware,
Of its power,
Nothing can compare.

Follow the Leader

The whole day on a dull, worn plate,
With little needles spinning around,
They continue the movement forever,
Round, and round, and around they go,
Why won’t they ever stop,
Why doesn’t everything just stop,
Everything needs to slow down,
And stop following those needles.

Sense-ing Time

You can see it in many places,
You can hear it all around,
You always ask about it,
And you know it constantly,
Yet you never can touch it,
And it's impossible to smell,
Just try to taste it and you'll see it won't work,
Time is all around us and it rules our world.

Fire

Fire’s Love

Caressing all it touches,
In a tiny orange flame,
Holding it so close,
It will never feel the same,
Dancing bright and proud,
Turning all to fear,
Devouring so quickly,
There’s no time to shed a tear.

Warmth

Pretty little lights,
Flickering in the shadows,
Holding its secrets all so close,
Lighting up the world,
Yet turning most to fear,
Warm to the touch,
And hot is the flame.

Rapture

Hiding in the shadows,
Staring at the light,
Little creatures hiding,
Quivering in fright,
All so unaware,
Of its miracles and delight.

Fear

Taking things away,
That are never given back,
Wounding all so badly,
Little by little,
Bit by bit,
Taking it all into the light,
Don't try to take it back,
Know of its power,
Know it is fright,
As it grows in the night.


Ya, they're all kinda short, but oh well! XD Like I said, tell me what you think! Also tell me what I can do to make them better in your opinion! XD
Heart is going to blow up.
Throat completely choked up.
Tears won’t hold up.
Stomach about to throw up.
Feelings always come up.
Mind won’t shut up.
Mouth won’t speak up.
Always such a screw up.
Nothing ever adds up.
Wish it would speed up.
Now is time to give up.
By the neck is hung up.
Life was passed up.
Reality is made up.
Image
My tears flow
My heart aches
My fear grows
My hands shake
My pain shows
My head spins
And I know that it’s happening again
They always come
They always go
They always watch
They always know
They always pretend
They always follow
And they never actually care
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