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Scarlet Vampire (preview) *** Rate and Read here!

Postby AquaFrosting334 » Mon Jan 02, 2012 7:20 am

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I heard the sound of the wind brushing through my hair as I stood in the middle of the valley quietly watching the stars. Suddenly I heard a brush of the leaves behind me. I turned around and saw a shadow come out from behind a tree. I stood up to the sight of the stranger. Suddenly I knew who it was. "I thought I told you to leave". I said aloud. He grinned and took a step towards me. I glared at him with envy. He grabbed my shoulders. "I wouldn't do that." I whispered.
He fell to the ground. I stared at what was left of him. His white shirt was stained red with his very own blood. I grinned. "I warned you." I laughed. I was no normal teenager. I wasn't an ordinary 15 year old that goes to school, hangs with other girls, that has a cell phone. No. That was all wrong. I myself.. was a vampire.

Chapter One:

I returned home at sunrise, and threw myself onto the nearest chair. My mom walked out of the kitchen and her eyebrows shot up. "Your past your curfew." she said sternly. I bit my lip and looked away. "I uh.. was studying at the library.." I began. "Don't let it happen again" she said and walked back into the kitchen. I moved onto the couch and dug my head into the nearest pillow. Here's the thing. My family doesn't exactly know I'm a vampire. It all started in my freshman year at Day view High.. I was walking through the woods at night to get home when I fell unconscious. My parents went on a rage looking for me everywhere, and when the police found me unconscious they took me to the hospital. The doctors were surprised to find that there was nothing wrong with me. When I got home that night things started changing. I couldn't fall asleep, and there were two single holes on my neck like.. something bit me? It was a vampire. That's when.. I started growing fangs. I've been telling my parents it's over sized teeth for years. Luckily. They believe me.




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Postby AquaFrosting334 » Mon Jan 02, 2012 8:05 am

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Postby Annabeth101 » Mon Jan 02, 2012 9:56 am

I would give it about a 6? A pointer I would give you would be to pay attention where you put your punctuation. In some of the places, the punctuation doesn't make any sense. Other than that, I like the plot.
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