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Re: From Afar

Postby klinea34 » Thu Feb 02, 2012 12:59 pm

My dad and I got in the car to go to the hospital. As we were pulling out of the driveway, i happened to glance tword the house. Right next to the garage, was The Wolf. He was standing very stiff, nose in the air as if there was an awfull scent in the air. Then he looked right at me and i saw panic in his eyes.

My dad and I pulled into the hospital parking lot, and as we parked my dad turned to me and i saw tears in his eyes.
"Are you sure you want to go in there? What if she has a bunch of wires and stuff atached to her, and theres lots of docters and nurses running around her? What if somethings wrong?" By this time he was full on crying,
"I-I cant s-se her like t-that" He laid his head on the stering wheel. As I watched him, I understood. He was terrified of hospitals, and to be honest, I didnt like them much myself.

After I got him calmed down, we went to check in at the hospital. The nurse at the desk to,d us the number of the room my mom was in, and told us that we could go ahead and see her.
We walked into the room, and to my relief, she was sitting up and seemed fine, but she looked tired and pale.

"Mom!" I yelled happily, "Are you ok? What happened?" She gave me a sad look.
"Well," she said, "The docters didn't find anything, but then again I knew they wouldn't." I looked at her, confused.
"What do you mean?" I asked.
She looked at my dad and said, "We have to tell her. She has a right to know."
"Here?" My dad asked, a note of worry in his voice, "Now?" She nodded.
"Tell me what?" I asked.
My mom looked at me, "The Sickness."
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Re: From Afar

Postby klinea34 » Tue Feb 07, 2012 2:54 pm

Alright, i'm bored, so here is next part--

"The Sickness?" I asked, "What is it?"

My mom looked at me, "No one knows for sure" She said, "In fact only a handfull of people even know about it"

I stared at her, confused, "Who?" I asked, "Who knows?"

She thouht for a minute before saying, "Well your father and I, we are in a small group, called PFF (Protection For Families) for the people who know of The Sickness, and fight for a cure, so obviously all of them know, and the police are close to finding it. Oh! And of course! The animals know!"

My thoughts immediately went to The Wolf, "How?" i asked, "how do the animals know?"

"Well," My mom sayed chuckuling, "They are smarter than they look."

I studied her face, there was something about the animals that she was hiding from me. But what? What could they, have to do with all this? What does The Wolf have to do with this? I remembered the look of terror in the wolf's eye when i saw it on the way to the hospital.

Does it know? I wondered, Was it scared of it? My mom opened her mouth to say something, but as soon as she did her eyes got wide and she convulsed violently, she looked up at me and mouthed the words, I love you.

And then suddenly all i could hear, was a long, drawn out, beeeeeeeeeeeeeeep. Out of nowhere, nurses and docters, poured into the room, as a nurse hurried my dad and I, my dad whos face was covered in tears, and me who was in a numb shock, out of the room, i could see the docters souronding my mother, wondering what went wrong.

But I knew, well, sort of, but I knew it was The Sickness that had taken my mother from me, and I knew, that i had to get to the bottom of it. For her.

And i knew, that it all started with, The Wolf.
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Re: From Afar

Postby hakaze » Tue Feb 07, 2012 4:18 pm

I like it and it's good but have you read Shiver by Maggie Steifvater? (I think that's how you spell her last name I really don't know)
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Re: From Afar

Postby klinea34 » Wed Feb 08, 2012 12:13 pm

no i havent...is it a good book?
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Re: From Afar

Postby hakaze » Wed Feb 08, 2012 3:23 pm

Yes it is. A slow start but it is good. Sorry to ask but a lot of the character names are the same in your story.
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Re: From Afar

Postby klinea34 » Thu Feb 09, 2012 9:13 am

oh cool, i'll see if i can find the book and i'll try to be more creative with my names lol
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Re: From Afar

Postby oakdenugg » Fri Feb 10, 2012 2:21 am

Hey Kline! c:

Since you now have your own book, I was wondering if you wanted a banner for it! <3

I could do it for free, ya know, since we're Banana Buddies! :3

If you want an example, I have my own banner I made up on the front page of my book's page. ^^
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Re: From Afar

Postby klinea34 » Fri Feb 10, 2012 9:02 am

i would lubb one!!!!!!
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Re: From Afar

Postby klinea34 » Fri Feb 17, 2012 11:23 am

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Re: From Afar

Postby klinea34 » Mon Feb 27, 2012 3:01 am

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