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Little Pieces Of Random (Conductive critisism welcome!)

Postby Scarlett Redd » Sat Oct 29, 2011 5:33 am

Some little bits of random:

Stories, poems... yada yaa. :)

My Trick-or-Treater's story:


Alsatian-Lover wrote:Image


Candy's two sisters, Halloween & Pumpkin, all walked along the street.

Candy ended up carrying all the loot & her sisters were play-fighting in the middle of the road. Suddenly a car came from nowhere...

"Stop!" called Candy to her sisters, but they couldn't hear her. She dashed in front of the car and braced herself... The car knocked her over, and a person saw and jumped out towards them.

"Oh no..." she cried "How could I not have seen her?"

Then Candy felt her body healing again.

She jumped up and licked the person's face, before swirling with rage turned to her sisters "That's it!" she barked "I could've been killed!" she was really angry now "You two can fend for yourselves now. I'm outta here." and she brushed against the person again.

That person was me. I showed her a black & orange collar, I'd been planning to buy a pet from the pound for a long time. I gently fastened it around her neck and brought her back to my house.

From there she put her life of begging behind her & she's been going Trick-or-treating for a few nights.


A short script for Dog-Thing (a dog with three tails and odd eyes, made of towel, that I made [my Grandma helped. :) ] )

Alsatian-Lover wrote:*Dog-Thing enters*

Muzz says: “Hello Dog-Thing.” *smiles*

Dog thing says: “Bark bark woof bark!” *jumps up and licks face

Kittn says: “Down, Dog-Thing, down!” *pulls Dog-Thing away from Muzz’s face*


A play-script for the BBC E-pet message boards ((I was a legend on there. :) )) [It is descriptive lots because you weren't allowed to add and kind of images.]


Script:

*Camera goes into school playground before school*

Ruby walks in, wearing a (hot pink) rhinestone studded collar, distressed-looking denim jacket (blue), designer trainers (hot pink) and a bow in her fur (hot pink). (Is chewing gum)
“Hello,” she says “Who would like to accompany me to class today???”
“MEEEEEEEE!!!!!!” Yells Max, immediately.
“Ok. Oh look, its poor old Lucy, with no friends. Aww.”
“ GRRRRR!!” Growls Lucy. Tom walks over.
“Don’t take it personally, Lu. She does that on purpose, just to annoy you.” Pauses “Oh, look Max is coming this way!
“Ha ha ha!!! You have no money to but nice clothes or toys!!! All you have are your rubbish collars.” Max pauses to sneer at Tom “And you are no better! When I... What??? Who’s that?”
*Camera turns around to face a beautiful Pomeranian*
“Hi! I’m Fluffy. I’ve just moved from Australia” Fluffy is wearing a gold collar, a gold puff-sleeved jacket and 2 gold bows in her fur.
“Hii... hiiii.....” Stutters Max
“Hi! I’m Lucy, want to be friends?” Replies Lucy
“’Course!” Says Fluffy and the bell rings, so they walk into school.
AFTER SCHOOL

(at clothes shop)
“Fluffy, are you sure you will buy me an outfit? You don’t have to!”
“Nah, that’s ok! That’s what B.F.F.s are for!!!” Giggles Fluffy “Hmmm... I think yellow will really suit you!”
*Pulls out yellow bows and a prom dress from the clothes rails*
*Gasp!* “That will be far too expensive!!!” Gasps Lucy
“No, it’ll be fine!” Says Fluffy, coolly.
“ No!!! I can’t let you but it for me! Let me pick something...”
*Picks out new yellow collar, 2 yellow bows and a yellow t-shirt with puff sleeves and a little pocket on the side*
“PERFECT!” Exclaims Fluffy “Come on, let’s go and ‘wow ‘Ruby!”

The End!!!
Last edited by Scarlett Redd on Mon Oct 31, 2011 1:36 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Little Pieces Of Random (Conductive critisism welcome!)

Postby Scarlett Redd » Sat Oct 29, 2011 5:33 am

How we got my sister's rabbit Jingles:


Alsatian-lover wrote:
Starlight to the Rescue

Six years ago, my sister and I got two dwarf rabbits from the High Street pet shop.

Alicia’s rabbit, Sooty, was black from the tips of her ears to the end of her tail. My rabbit, Snowie, was an Old English rabbit – white with black ears, a black “butterfly” on her nose, and black markings (one in the shape of a pawprint). Just eight weeks old, they were so tiny you could fit them in both hands.

The rabbits were very happy and we played with them lots. They loved being out in their run in the sunshine and all our friends enjoyed petting them.

The day before Alicia’s eighth birthday, disaster struck. When Mum went to feed the rabbits, Sooty seemed unwell. She didn’t even perk up when Mum rustled the treat packet. Mum took her indoors and tried to give Sooty a drink, but she was floppy and unresponsive. Mum and Dad cuddled her and wrapped her in a towel for warmth. Later, when they went to check, Sooty had passed away.

Next day, Alicia was too busy with birthday presents to think about bunnies. When she learnt that Sooty had died, she was distraught. Even Snowie seemed miserable. One week later, in the car, we headed for Starlight Rabbit Rescue in Dagenham, to meet a new companion for Snowie – Jingles, an abandoned baby Netherlands Dwarf. Ten months later, Snowie is a perky bunny, playing with her new best friend; Jingles loves her home and is full of mischief.


(Written a year ago, Jingles is now 2 and Snowie 7.)

The Voice-mail message on my phone:

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I am a possum, I live in a tree,
Thank you for trying to contact me.
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Re: Little Pieces Of Random (Conductive critisism welcome!)

Postby Scarlett Redd » Mon Oct 31, 2011 1:19 am

Alsatian-Lover wrote:The story of how I got my angel dog and so many more...

(April 01, 2011)

Here I am, glued to my PC as usual, browsing profiles on Howrse, when I see this horse, and at the bottom it ways 'Adopt Virtual pets at Chicken Smoothie!'
So I click this link and it brings me here. I waited till my dad got home & asked if I could join. I'd already investigated and said it was free, so he said it was ok.

I clicked on 'Adopt' and adopted my first ever puppies - the three who I've kept are Cookie, (my angel and first ever adopted, named pet.) Brownie (Cutie!) and Muffkin. (Named by my sister, yes, not Muffin, but Muffkin.)

Cookie
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Brownie
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Re: Little Pieces Of Random (Conductive critisism welcome!)

Postby Scarlett Redd » Tue Jan 03, 2012 5:55 am

My own twist on the song 'Punk Rocker'

Oh I wish I was a snow leopard with flowers in my fur,
~~Line WIP~~
I was born too late in a world that doesn't care,
Oh I wish I was a snow leopard with flowers in my fur.
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