Story of Forgiveness~(Comments and Crits wanted)

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Story of Forgiveness~(Comments and Crits wanted)

Postby Яαωя » Fri Sep 16, 2011 5:15 pm

~I will write more later, but comments and crits would be awesome~

I never really understand the word “love.” What was it? Well, as days and nights passed, I soon learned it was more than what I thought. Hard studies of overhearing it in other people’s conversations increased of what I knew about this subject. Sleepless nights of wrecking my mind, were continuous. On a clear autumn and breezy day, October 7th to be exact, my friend Isabel walked up to me as her facial expression was shocked.
I felt my heart skip a beat. “What’s wrong?” I asked hoping it was nothing too serious. “I…I think someone likes me” I heard her stammer. I calmed a little. “Well who is it?” I asked. “Who do you think it is, Lisa?” Isabel responded softly. Shrugging a little, I stepped back a little scared of what she had said. “Who?” she demanded in a harsher tone. I felt myself stand there paralyzed, before making my way out of class.
I guess I was on my own, trying to keep everything hidden. Pacing back and forth, my legs quivering. In the corner of my eye, there was movement. “Who are you?” I asked in an angry tone. He leapt out of the shadows revealing his face. It was my crush! I blushed a little then I could feel my fists tighten their grip. “Were you watching me?” I asked simply. Darren nodded slowly, making sure I wouldn’t be too mad. I shook my head as if I was saying no, and that was the last of it.
If I could’ve changed that moment, it would have been done in a heartbeat, but that is impossible. I remembered this as a bitter and cold moment, but as everyone knows this is unfixable. The day after that happened; Darren met me at my locker as if he wanted to talk. I finished gathering my materials for the next period and set them on the desk. Stepping out of the room, I walked hesitantly to him. “Well, what was it?” I asked my gaze into his.
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