~Secret War~

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Time of Dying - Three Days Grace (Monsterkit with his family)
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Please Don't Leave Me - Pink (Monsterkit searching for Moonkit)
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~Secret War~

Postby rennix velire » Sun Jul 31, 2011 8:28 am

There was a war occurring in the clans. Nobody knew about the preparations and extra training spreading through the clans likes a forest fire. Nobody knew that their clan was being targeted by another. Except for AirClan. AirClan, you could say, was a villain clan. You could also say they were a hero clan. These days, you're either one or the other. Hero or villain. Or, of course, just an ordinary feline, like NatureClan. But even they were villains in their own way. StarClan knows why. AirClan knew everything, so it seemed. They knew who was targeting who, what other clans were doing about it. They even knew of the hidden tribe, the Tribe of Abandoned Cats. They even knew some of the cats that had come from there to a different clan. Some would say they are wise. Most would say they are sneaky. But nothing could be said about AirClan. They were undecided. Not good, nor evil. It was as if they kept the balance between sides even, so that one did not rule over the other. That was the one thing that BlazeClan, FrostClan, and NatureClan, had in common. Probably the only thing. They didn't know what a gift it was to have AirClan until they destroyed it. And everyone regretted it.

This is my fan-fic, a crossover between X-Men and Warriors! So, instead of saying mutants, humans and people, it's mutants, felines and cats. That was sort of my intro, plot explained.

I want to add a song to each chapter, so when people read it they can look up the song and play it as they read it. It makes everything much more fun. So once I've made a chapter, I'll put up a poll for which song best fits the chapter. Please take it.

I have posted the prologue. I probably won't post up the first chapter for quite a while. Please comment and tell me what you liked and disliked! Your opinion matters to me!
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby rennix velire » Sun Aug 21, 2011 2:03 pm

Prologue

The nameless kit slowly crept up to the Thunderpath, following the scent of his lost brother. I don't know how they can't smell Moonkit. He smells as fresh as if he were standing beside me. These cats must be stupid. He felt a pelt brush against his, and heard a comforting purr, but when he turned his head he saw nobody. Moonkit's scent grew stronger. The kit, who was barely old enough to walk, looked across the path that reeked of monsters. He saw nothing. He had no clue how he had gotten where he was alive, but the whole time he traveled across NatureClan's territory, he had felt as if StarClan itself was guiding him.

He must've crossed it! Oh, I shouldn't have ever said those things to him... "Moonkit?" he called. There was no answer, just the soft breeze of the wind. He didn't even notice the starry silver spotted tom sitting beside him. With no hesitation, the kit darted across the Thunderpath. That's when he noticed the huge monster. Far away, but not far enough for his tiny paws to take him to safety in time. He stared at it with huge dark brown eyes until he was hit.

Pain shot through the kit, the overwhelming weight of the monster crushing his face and head until he had felt that for sure, he was either dead or decapitated as his short life flashed before his eyes. But when the roaring faded to the distance, and he was still yowling in pain, that is when he realized he was still alive. The pain died slightly, but the nameless kit couldn't feel his left eye. Moonkit's scent poured over him, soothing him.

That was when the kit realized Moonkit was with him all along. He tried to speak, but blood poured into his mouth, and he began choking on his blood. That's when the kit caught a new scent: Flamestar, the kits' father. The pale orange tom ran over to him, not seeming to notice Moonkit crouched protectively over his littermate's motionless body. He frantically licked the blood off his son's hideous face. "My kit, my kit, my kit," he sobbed. "Please don't die. You're all I have left." The kit knew exactly what he was talking about. Flamestar was his only living relative, and most feared him. He was not only Flamestar's only relative, but his only friend.

Another starry cat appeared beside Moonkit. She was a beautiful silver spotted she-cat, exactly like Moonkit, but her eyes were dark brown like her other son. Flamestar saw her. "Crater. You walk among StarClan now?" At the mention of his mother's name, feeling the pelts of his family slowly heating his, the kit found a new strength inside him. Slowly, cautiously, as his mother told Flamestar she wanted to name him Monsterkit to honor his bravery, his right eye opened.

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What was not explained:
- Flamestar was going to find Moonkit by himself when he heard Monsterkit yowling in pain. He instantly ran over of course.
- Moonkit and Monsterkit's mother, Crater, was a rogue. When Flamestar fell in love with her, everybody was even more suspicious of him.
- Nobody liked Flamestar because he tried so hard to be a great leader, he acted cruel and often unfair.
- Moonkit made it past the Thunderpath and was found by a vicious badger. The badger killed him. He was too scared to call for help.
- Crater died giving birth to her kits.
- Moonkit wandered away because he heard StarClan calling him. They called him because unfortunately, it was his fate to die so this would happen to Monsterkit.
- Monsterkit wasn't all that brave (StarClan gave him the bravery to approach the Thunderpath). But after being scarred , it sparked something in him that made him a fearless cat. He was made deputy because he could defend and protect his clan fearlessly. That explains why it was his fate to be ran over.
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby Angellove95 » Sun Aug 21, 2011 8:25 pm

Erm... I only have one problem this story seems more of a warrior cat story than a warrior cat and x men story. Gah. I'm sorry I'm not saying its bad its just that my tastes are different than yours. I just don't really like stories that are based on animals. They make me feel like I'm a 3year old watching dora.
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby rennix velire » Mon Aug 22, 2011 6:33 am

Lol yeah. The prologue is in NatureClan, so those cats I guess are like the human clan. c:
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby rennix velire » Mon Aug 22, 2011 7:23 am

Bumping!
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby Angellove95 » Mon Aug 22, 2011 8:00 am

lol sorry
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby rennix velire » Mon Aug 22, 2011 8:11 am

c: Meh, it's fine.
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby Angellove95 » Mon Aug 22, 2011 8:32 am

cool
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby oakdenugg » Mon Aug 22, 2011 10:31 am

Mark! :3 Good so far! <3
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Re: ~Secret War~

Postby rennix velire » Mon Aug 22, 2011 10:34 am

Thank you! :D
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