by Darleo » Sun Jul 31, 2011 4:45 pm
Wow, love your writing style and ideas, reminds me of a better version of something I tried to write once.
Just want to point out that you're meant to start a new line when a new person speaks so that two people aren't speaking on the same line.
E.g.
"Well, yeah. I've been since I was 2 months old." said Becca.
"WHAT?" said Sophie.
Instead of:
"Well, yeah. I've been since I was 2 months old." said Becca. "WHAT?" said Sophie.
Hope it's okay for me to say that, and please don't stop writing, I love it.