Between Enemy Lines

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Re: Between Enemy Lines ◊ Octember's Writ

Postby Octember » Wed Feb 01, 2012 4:42 pm

How long can you run
Before the guilt tears you back
Everything you should have done
But you didn’t

Everything you left behind
Tortures you inside your mind
Everything you tried to save
All you want is to be brave

Nothing left that you can do
Just hope that they forget you
After causing so much pain
Would they let you in again?

You’re a liability
Hiding from their scrutiny
Just another price to pay
It didn’t have to go this way

Been running for a lifetime
Trying to forget your crimes
And when you finally found a way
They decide to make you pay

That’s why you ran away again
Pretend you never needed them
It’s better if they hate you
You’ll pretend you hate them too
But you don’t

How long can you run
Before the guilt tears you back

Turn around
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Betta132 » Wed Feb 01, 2012 4:48 pm

Soo - these are random thoughts? Boy you have morbid thoughts. These are good though! On the first one, is "She" supposed to be Mother Nature/Mother Earth?
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Octember » Fri Feb 03, 2012 3:20 pm

C: Just random poem-ish things. XD Yes they are kind of morbid.
It could be Mother Earth I guess, but it wasn't originally. Thank you for commenting. C:
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Octember » Sun Feb 19, 2012 7:56 pm

Every step you take
Gives you more heartache
Your eyes filled with pain
But you won't complain

You've done nothing
But you're the one suffering
Sitting in the cold
With a heart made of gold
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Octember » Mon Feb 20, 2012 6:03 pm

You shrugged your shoulders
You didn't care
About the man that used to live here

You shrugged your shoulders
You took his day
And then you took his life away

You shrugged your shoulders
He hit his head
And thanks to you that man is dead
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Octember » Sat Apr 21, 2012 12:37 pm

Common differences
His detail to perfection
Your social rejection
They should have seen it
Coming

Military precision
His violent increase
Your fear of police
No one can ever be
Permanent

Creative destruction
His deceptive honesty
Your need for atrocity
Were you really just
Going along?

Blameless culprits
His arrogant humility
Your grinning hostility
It’s all come down to
This

Expressive silence
His fall from grace
Your bloodied face
They all deserved
To die

Sweet aftermath
His false scorning
Your glad mourning
All you ever aspired
To be
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Octember » Wed Jun 20, 2012 7:56 pm

She is gone
It numbs him

Dulled colours
Sounds
Motions

She is leached from everything
The clouds parallel the blue
A cruel balance
He hates it

He barely hears their voices
Offering their condolences
Pitying him
He hates them more

Time is a millstone round his neck
He carries past in his head
Present and future are posthumous
He hates them too

Keep moving forward?
He doesn’t know the meaning
He clutches at straws
He never could let go

His internal screams tear him apart
A familiar concept
Her face is a tantalising memory
He never could forget

Help?
The word is foreign
It doesn’t fit in his mouth
He never could ask them

Days, weeks, months,
He is numb
Years
He is numb

His life has become posthumous
She is gone
It numbs him

And no matter what
He could never
Let
Her
Go
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Octember » Sun Jul 08, 2012 1:15 pm

She slides a ring on each finger

Flowers on her little fingers
To keep her sympathetic

Butterflies on her ring fingers
To keep her faithful

Suns on her middle fingers
To keep her hopeful

Eyes on her index fingers
To keep her watchful

And plain bands on her thumbs
To remind her where she came from
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

Postby Octember » Sun Sep 09, 2012 7:30 pm

Her grave is shallow and unmarked
When the grass grows back no one will know
She was here

So he'll tend it every day
And when new grass pushes through
He'll tear them out with his bare hands
On his knees crying
She was here

Memories should heal
They torture him
He ruminates
She was here

And maybe time could heal him
But if it does, he'll be in agony
Because he cannot allow himself to forget
She was here

Now he's on his knees again
Screaming
She was here
She
Was
Here
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Re: Between Enemy Lines

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