what the crap!!!! part 1

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Postby cure » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:32 pm

    red eyeorbs sparkled innthe dark, a bad man looked forwrad at the happy two and snalred "hell! (im sorry if i cant say that ToT)" the villain closed his eyes and opened them

    "that car was meant for the mysterious man whom is alwyas foiling my epic plans..."

    he clecnh his fist "but that supid one got in the way!"

    he said pointing at y/n tch whatever he said opening his phone "call helicopter...!!! we must get them out of teh air...."

    (pov change! ^u^)

    "thank you for saving me....." i say, still flying through the air "what's your name."

    flies flew directly into my eyesandmouth at hyper speed "you're welcome..." though the mystery man frowned

    "my name is..... is...."


    suddently, a helicopter came out of the shadows!!!


    "w-w-w-w-w-hat the craaaaaaaaap!?" we both said in unison!


    to be continued........
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    thank you so much fomr all of the love this story is very important to me!!! i am glad you all like it so much and it touch your haert too.....
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby shadeyenova » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:34 pm

    this has to be one of the best novellas i've read yet. the characters are so easy to relate to, it's simple enough that the readers can really tie themself into the plot and understand what it is the characters are thinking even if their thoughts aren't explicitly voiced. there's nothing too unrealistic about it, instead it almost captures a universal romantic fantasy to be swept off one's own feet in a common situational occurrence that happens practically everywhere. Of course it doesn't happen to everybody and the risk is extremely high, but there is relief in the plot when y/n gets saved, followed up by an intriguing sense of satisfaction as the scene fulfills exactly what the readers are looking for. The synchronization between the characters, the diction in the dialogue between them, as well as the shift in perspective; this work has very thought out detail that is not just a fanservice, but a beautiful and incredibly creative plotline fit for those who are looking to read a good story.
    Wonderful job op, I look forward to the next part.
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby retro » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:35 pm

mark :oops:
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby emo boy » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:35 pm

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edit: stargleam...this writng is so good..i didnt udnerstand it the first time but your writing is so deep i feel so connected X3
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby cure » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:38 pm

    i-im sorry.... i love everyone eher who has read and loves my story.. btut what the crap!!!! has to go on hiatus... i don't know how long but my mom is taking away my computer!!!!

    goodbye, minasan....
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby Chickpea » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:38 pm

Thank you for taking us on this journey
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby retro » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:39 pm

NOOO :cry:
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby grape.soda » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:39 pm

after reading this beautiful, heart-touching story, i will leave this experience a better person. thank you for writing this masterpiece.
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby emo boy » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:40 pm

How could you go on hiatus. Do you understand how much this story means to me? I'm heartbroken and disgusted at your behavior.
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Re: what the crap!!!! part 1

Postby emo boy » Thu Oct 14, 2021 3:42 pm

sorry i dont know what came over me please come back safe op....i miss you stargleam
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