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→ your obedient servant

Postby roman » Thu Jan 26, 2017 5:13 pm

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→ just great ( number one )

Postby roman » Fri Jan 27, 2017 6:01 am


WORD COUNT // six hundred and twenty-one


    I was never one for tricky situations. this one was no different.

    as the crowd swirled around me, my anxiety was content with knotting itself up and gripping my stomach. no matter how my hope tried to untangle the jumble of fear, it just kept growing.

    don't get me wrong, I'm usually a pretty calm person. this event was just the single most important decision in everyone's lives. no matter whether you were vampire, demon, human. you had to attend the christening. no big deal, right?

    I sighed and ran my fingers through my mop of brown hair. I was the oldest to attend the christening this year, and that in itself was a big problem. most teachers were content with accepting little ones as apprentices, since they were still growing and willing to soak up information like a sponge that could never be full enough. I, on the other hand, was just turning eighteen. even I'm not sure how that happened.

    people say I came staggering out of the forest that lines beona. unsure of my name, station, age, and past. just based on my appearance, they guessed I was fifteen or so, but it's always hard to judge with a vampire, and I've never been able to work it out for myself. an orphanage was kind enough to take me in, and here I was three years later, joining my "family" at the christening.

    vendors lined the cold cobblestone streets, flinging advertisements at the crowd. "a pretty necklace for the lady?" one shouted to no one in particular. "tomes, get your magic tomes here folks!" another yelled.

    I looked down when I felt a tug at my sleeve. it was katya, one of the orphans in my district. she looked up at me expectantly, and I just stared back down at her, unable to force my lips into a smile. "let's go get something to drink. please, victoria?" she begged. I sighed again, glanced at the crowd, and nodded; aching to get a break from the never-ending ocean of people. she giggled and dragged me away. no objections here.

    we ended up examining four vendors before katya found one that suited her picky tastes. the man taking orders smiled, but I could tell he was greedily eyeing the money I had taken from my satchel. he fidgeted impatiently while the little girl struggled to pick a drink. finally, she stepped up to the counter, and said, "I'll have the raspberry tea please, but not cold. hot, but not too hot. okay?" I barely suppressed a giggle. that was katya for you, always wanting things a very specific way. the vendor hesitated. he was clearly trying to decide whether the money was worth all the trouble. he nodded to himself when the decision was made. "it will be two extra for the trouble I have to go through with heating it."

    I rolled my eyes, but acquiesced. I didn't want katya to be complaining to whole way to the arena. I would never hear the end of it if I denied his convenient demand. I laid the money I had already pulled out on the counter, then dug around in my bag for some more. finally, I managed to fish out two extra. the vendor scraped up the currency, and trotted away triumphantly into his tent to make the tea. I crossed my arms impatiently. waiting for things to heat up wasn't exactly my favorite thing to do.

    I pulled my attention away from the excited human girl, and surveyed the nearby vendors. my stomach growled, and I decided that if katya was calm enough to keep a drink down, I could too. I hastily picked our next destination.
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→ just great ( number two )

Postby roman » Fri Jan 27, 2017 6:39 am


WORD COUNT // eight hundred and thirty-six


    finally, the vendor made an appearance with a steaming cup, filled to the brim with a dark liquid. he handed it carefully to katya, nodded an insincere thanks to me, then went back to yelling at people on the streets. how that attracted customers was a mystery to me.

    katya hesitated before taking her first sip. she gazed at the cup, then at me, and back at the mug. "is something wrong?" I asked, pushing her along through the crowd. she returned her gaze to me, and I raised an eyebrow at the radiant smile plastered to her face. she pushed the porcelain container upwards, and said, "here, you can have a sip. it's only good manners." I winced at the thought of drinking it. human drinks were horrid, as was their food. katya always forgot that I wasn't human, which could be viewed as both good and bad.

    I forced myself to smile, and politely refused. "sorry, katya. I don't like tea," I said when she sighed in disappointment. I felt bad for not drinking it, but with the taste on top of my nervous stomach, I wouldn't have been able to keep it down.

    we arrived to my pick of vendors in the next few minutes. katya was silent the whole way after our exchange about her tea. I hoped to heaven above that she wouldn't start crying. not only would it make me feel even worse, I would be humiliated. the vendor dragged my gaze away. "what can I get for you, my dear?" he asked politely. I thought for a moment, then said, "deer and wolf for me please."

    I laid the required payment on the counter, and the man grabbed it and rushed away. he returned just minutes later with a sealed cup. "order up. deer and wolf's blood is a good combination, enjoy." I wrapped my hands around the container, said thank you, and began herding katya through the people again. the group had lessened, but not by much. I took a sip, and I savored the sweet flavor. katya began sipping on hers as well.

    she looked up at me apologetically and said, "I'm sorry about the tea, I forgot you drink..." her voice trailed off and I understood why. in my years at the orphanage, I had found that humans don't like talking about blood, and some are even afraid of it. that was why the vendor had placed a lid on my cup. "it's okay," I said hurriedly. I didn't want to get into another conversation about how different I was from her. she couldn't seem to grasp that I didn't eat and drink like she did.

    we arrived at our appointed area ahead of time. all the other orphans in district seven were accounted for. katya had probably managed to sneak away again. luckily, the headmistress was occupied with other things, and didn't notice our entry. for the millionth time that day, I sighed as I sank down the wall. I pulled my knees up to my chest, leaned my head back against the cold concrete, and closed my eyes. katya sat down beside me, contentedly sipping her raspberry tea. she didn't make an attempt to talk, and I was grateful of it. she knew when I needed some time to my own thoughts.

    the trademasters would arrive when they felt like it, and they never went in any particular order. district seven orphans could be first, or they could be last. some years the trademasters chose to see the children who had families first, some years they didn't. a shuffle of feet outside caught everyone's attention, even mine. my head jerked upright, and the knot of anxiety readily returned to its hold in my gut. the door opened slowly, but only one figure made her way into the room.

    it wasn't the trademaster we were expecting. everyone gasped with both fear and awe. the stranger's attire hinted at her profession. she donned a long rough grey cape, with a black button up as a shirt and white leggings as pants. tall leather boots that had been stained black rose almost to her knees. a magnificent rapier hung at her side. the symbol engraved on the side of the sheath confirmed what I thought she was. a viennen counselor.

    the viennen counsel was the highest magic order in the kingdom. they were comprised of mainly vampires, since it was rare for humans to have magical abilities, and demons and werewolves were turned away for their grievances against the vampire race. they were regarded as simply legend by the people in some parts of forviel. they were warriors and mages, and they advised on many important subjects. they were some of the most mysterious people in the world.

    my blood ran cold as the cloaked figure spoke, but it wasn't her voice that frightened me. it was her words.

    "victoria lee, I have been sent by my lord to retrieve you for an apprenticeship as a counselor."
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→ just great ( number three )

Postby roman » Fri Jan 27, 2017 11:56 am


WORD COUNT // eight hundred and sixty-four


    I tried to speak, but the words got caught in my throat. my heart and my head grappled with accepting what had just been uttered. the viennen council was regarded with superstition. it was shrouded in mystery and secrecy. I didn't know whether it was good to be accepted into their ranks, or an unimaginable curse.

    everybody in the room, including me, held their breath. silence crept through the room like a wolf stalking it's prey. the counselor woman looked at me expectantly, and she had a strange knowing smile on her lips.

    I rose to my feet, sure to use the wall as a support. right then, falling over didn't seem like much of a stretch. everyone exhaled all at once. I pointed at my own chest as if to say, me? you want me? the counselor nodded, but I couldn't see much of her emotion. her face was surrounded by shadow, and all I could see was part of her lips. I wished desperately that she would remove the hood; maybe that would help the fear welling up in my stomach to disperse.

    the children looked at me with a new light, along with the headmistress. like I wasn't the same victoria they knew anymore. even katya furrowed her brows as she gazed at me. the counselor woman turned her gaze from me to the rest of the children, and she surveyed their ranks with cold precision. "gather what belongings you have, miss lee. we leave tomorrow at dawn for the capital," she said, barely above a whisper. I nodded dazedly, and she turned and left. just like that. not like she had delivered life changing news and scared a group of children out of their wits.

    I sank back into my spot slowly. every eye was on me, and I knew it. I wanted nothing more than to run away. maybe a life in the forest would be better than what ever fate awaited me in the capital. after all, who knew how long I had survived in there before I emerged at beona's gates? maybe I had survived in there for centuries.

    I inhaled sharply, and everyone winced. "what's the big deal?" I spat, a little more harsh than intended. one by one, they looked away, and all of the sudden, I wished they hadn't. I had never felt so alone. they all seemed too afraid to look me in the eye. I covered my face with my hands, trying to hide the tears that threatened to fall.

    the rest of the day went by in a blur. all of the children in district seven where chosen for the jobs they had hoped for. katya was to be a diplomat, and as amusing as I had found that in the past, I was only focused on one thing. a question that counteracted all the self-soothing I tried. what exactly have I been chosen for?

    as far as I knew, I held no special magical abilities. I was your average vampire. about as average as you could possibly get. I could master any skill, but I didn't excel at anything and I wasn't particularly bad at anything. I could run far, but not overly so. I could jump high, but not extraordinarily. I didn't know how to fence, and other than the few fights I had gotten into with the other kids, I didn't know how to fight. so what made them choose me? and what made them choose at all? to be chosen a viennen counselor apprentice was a big deal. they didn't take the subject of a new counselor lightly. they made sure that the candidate had all the necessary skills that come along with their station. but I had none of the skills I thought they looked for.

    some of the girls gave me subdued congratulations, and others just avoided me. I was so preoccupied with my own thoughts that I didn't notice much of anything else. night came and went. I gathered my satchel, a few vials of herbs, my dagger, and a small doll katya had made me, and exited the building well before anyone would wake up. I hated leaving without saying goodbye, but I didn't want to face their confused glances any longer.

    the counselor woman from the day before stood on the steps, and looked about as surprised as I was. she had surely expected me to want to sleep for a little longer, and I had expected her to get caught up in some counselor business and be late herself. my blood ran cold at the sight of her without her hood. a long, ugly scar ran down her cheek bone. her raven black hair was pinned up in a neat bun. her features were angled like a cat's, and her ears ended in a sharp point.

    I immediately recognized what ethnicity she belonged to. a race said to be long gone but told about in fairy tales. a race said to be superior in every way to a human. a race able to wield magic as easily as speak, and a race I envied for their abilities.

    she was elven.
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Re: → your obedient servant

Postby Ranger of the North » Fri Jan 27, 2017 7:32 pm

Oooo this is really interesting! Poor Victoria. She's cool. :D
Ohh an elf, huh?
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Postby calliopë » Fri Jan 27, 2017 10:41 pm

      i really, really adore your writing. it makes my heart
      ache in that good way.
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Postby roman » Sat Jan 28, 2017 3:16 am

    @torë ⠀aghhh omg thank you so much !!
    I've loved your writing since the first time I laid eyes on it, so hearing from you is really amazing to me <3

    @ranger ⠀//screech
    thank you so much <3

    it means so much that you guys took the time to comment (ノ◕ヮ◕)ノ*:・゚✧
    honestly I'm so at a loss for words that I can't think of anything original to say smh (,:
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Re: → your obedient servant

Postby whizzer » Sat Jan 28, 2017 10:34 am

i didn't realize you updated until now


this is such good writing aksdjb
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→ new poll!

Postby roman » Sun Jan 29, 2017 5:14 am

    @jefferson ⠀thank you !! eek I'm so glad you are enjoying it <3

    I should have another chapter up by today or tomorrow? I missed a ton of school over a vacation so now I'm drowning in make-up work. sorry for the wait everybody ^^'
    by the way, I also made a poll uwu
    I'd love to hear everyone's opinion. feel free to message me ideas or ways you think I can improve!
    please don't be rude about it though. if you think my writing sucks, don't harass me about how awful it is. if you don't like it, just don't read it. I'm open for constructive criticism.
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