Where am I? *A POEM*

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Where am I? *A POEM*

Postby animewatcher » Sun Nov 14, 2010 8:32 am

This is a poem I wrote for school. The teacher said and I quote, 'Really cool =)' :? but I want more then one opinion. Here is the poem:

Where am I?
This isn't right.
Are those walls green?
Are those trees white?
Where is the sky?
Where are the clouds?
Where are the stars?
There is no sun,
but it's bright.
There is no moon,
but the sky is black.
Where am I?
Where is the ground?
Down there.
Am I floating?
No, I'm flying.
The wind runs through my hair
as the ground rushes by.
Up ahead, the sky is lit.
What is that?
I can't see.
It's too bright.
I'm consumed by it.
Now where am I?
The walls are white.
The trees are green.
There is the sun.
There are the clouds.
What time is it?
I'm back. . . . .
Or am I?
Am I back or am I away?
I don't suffer from insanity... I enjoy it a lot really
If two foots are feet and two gooses geese, then aren't two footballs feetbals and two mooses meese?
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Re: Where am I? *A POEM*

Postby Feathertail(Megan) » Sun Nov 14, 2010 8:47 am

ok what do you wont
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Re: Where am I? *A POEM*

Postby animewatcher » Sun Nov 14, 2010 8:51 am

Huh?
I don't suffer from insanity... I enjoy it a lot really
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Re: Where am I? *A POEM*

Postby animewatcher » Sun Nov 14, 2010 9:08 am

Bump...
I don't suffer from insanity... I enjoy it a lot really
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Re: Where am I? *A POEM*

Postby mortal instruments » Sat Feb 25, 2012 6:27 pm

i think its very good! i love writing (and reading!) poems like this. i think you should write more :)
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