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| Prancing Pony | WIP DONT POST ;0

Postby MAGICSTICK! » Sat Feb 20, 2016 1:23 am

Prancing Pony
Theme song ;; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aK3TROzVRiE



(back of the book)
Sugarcube is a white Shetland pony, with a big future.
Sugarcube is sent all over England from place to place, through losing and gaining new friends, through sadness and happiness, this pony will never give up hope in his heart that one day he will find a loving and permanent companion.
(This is horrible, please someone PM me to re-do this xD ^)

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Prologue

The white Shetland pony opened his eyes, lots of people were bustling around him, grooming him, checking his hooves, and putting a uncomfortable fancy saddle on the shetland's small back, a man dressed in black tight Jodhpurs clinged to his legs, a black riding jacket neatly put on, each button correctly in place, and in his left hand was a black leather riding crop, the Shetland uneasily moved a little, but then stood still as his master talked whilst mounting him ''Sugarcube, if you mess this up, it'll be the last mistake you'll ever make.''
The man nudged Sugarcubes sides firmly with his long black boots, the man made Sugarcube go around the course seven times as a warm up, a loud speaker then crackled as it spoke ''Number 051 please come to the collecting area,'' Sugarcubes master turned and made Sugarcube trot into the collecting area.
Sugarcube saw the large jumping arena, staff was doing the finally touches to the jumps and making sure everything was secure, Sugarcubes master had entered him into the 'Legend League Jumping Competition' for a pony, this was extremely hard, thus his master worked him unfairly every single day until exhaustion of the pony, the speaker spoke again to the people on the benches that was watching from above ''Here comes Carlson Richwood on Prancing Pony!'' the crowd cheered and whistled, as Sugarcubes master rode him into the arena, everyone quieted and watched in silence, Sugarcubes master broke into a trot and the into a steady and smooth canter towards a jump called 'Cross-rail' a easy jump for this highly trained pony, he jumped over the fence with ease, Sugarcube was then made to go around in a neat 'C' shape, next was a more difficult jump called 'Wall' it was a fence ontop of a 'brick' wall, it was actually made out of light material which could be knocked easily, Sugarcube made him break into, again, a steady but fast canter, Sugarcube leaped of the Wall, his back hooves only 4 inches away from knocking it down, Sugarcube did over five jumps without knocking one down, it was then it, the final jump, 'The Tripe Bar' a high fence with three poles making it seem impossible to jump by a pony, but Sugarcubes master said ''Run faster you stupid horse!'' Sugarcube was turning and then started to run straight to the 'The Triple Bar' fence, his master pushed and pushed until he was near to a gallop, Sugarcube wished he could shout to him Stop! We're not going to make it! You're going to fast! he tried to slow down but his master whipped him fiercely with the crop, Sugarcube was forced to run faster, until finally Sugarcube leaped, everything seemed to be in slow-motion to the pony, Sugarcube was right, they were going to fast, SLAM right into the ground as the poles went flying into the ground as Sugarcubes back-legs flayed into the air, Sugarcube rolled on the sandy ground, he went still, his master was laying on the ground a few inches beside him, the crowd gasped in horror, lots of people in white t-shirts with a convertible bed ran over to the pony and man, Sugarcube blocked out all the sounds, his eyes closing, he finally shut his eyes and went into a dreamless, deep, black, sleep.

(He isn't dead XD
Last edited by MAGICSTICK! on Mon Feb 22, 2016 11:11 pm, edited 5 times in total.
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Re: | Prancing Pony | WIP DONT POST ;0

Postby MAGICSTICK! » Sat Feb 20, 2016 1:57 am

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hmm, not much here. well hi there, i'm
MAGICSTICK or my upcoming youtube channel,
TheWoodenSword. i'm a hetero, demi-girl :P
(i'm not a full on demi-girl, i just like calling myself
king-dude) anyways, i'm a sort of tomboy, so don't expect
a proper posh lady from me. i love playing minecraft so
if you ever want to do a video or play on a server with me,
just give me a PM ;) thanks. this is a wip.
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Re: | Prancing Pony | WIP DONT POST ;0

Postby MAGICSTICK! » Sat Feb 20, 2016 2:01 am

res (don't post, but PM!)

How's it going so far? critique needed!
hmm, not much here. well hi there, i'm
MAGICSTICK or my upcoming youtube channel,
TheWoodenSword. i'm a hetero, demi-girl :P
(i'm not a full on demi-girl, i just like calling myself
king-dude) anyways, i'm a sort of tomboy, so don't expect
a proper posh lady from me. i love playing minecraft so
if you ever want to do a video or play on a server with me,
just give me a PM ;) thanks. this is a wip.
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