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Re: If Bluefur had kept her kits} W.I.P

Postby attjje » Thu Dec 24, 2015 10:03 pm

Bump!
What do you think? What should the rogues names be?
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Re: If Bluefur had kept her kits} W.I.P

Postby attjje » Tue Dec 29, 2015 4:27 pm

Bump?
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Re: If Bluefur had kept her kits} W.I.P} Feedback Appreciate

Postby attjje » Fri Jan 08, 2016 2:04 pm

New edit
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Re: If Bluefur had kept her kits} W.I.P} Feedback Appreciate

Postby attjje » Sat Mar 05, 2016 11:05 am

Edited it, removed mistakes.
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Re: If Bluefur had kept her kits} W.I.P} Feedback Appreciate

Postby attjje » Sat Apr 23, 2016 10:29 am

Edited a bit
Added 'although the breath was rattled, gasped out as if it was painful to just inhale. Oh, but it was, it was intolerable, like you would never dream, every breath feeling as though it was slicing open it’s side and drawing blood, closing as the being exhaled but a re-opened wound at every breath.'
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