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What do you think of Ryan?

He's a jerk
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I HATE HIM! HE KIDNAPPED ARI!!
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He's cool... Ish..
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He rocks
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*sighs dreamily*
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Postby WolvesOfFire » Mon Jul 06, 2015 6:52 am

I don't have a title, so if you have an idea, don't hesitate to pm me or post it here! Enjoy the story^^


Summary: A few years ago, elves came to earth, 'relocating' all the humans to Planet A2. Aribelle 'Ari' is an eighteen year old member of the Elf Warriors, and immediately rushed to help when a human boy is discovered. At first, she hates him- hates all humans- but soon she finds her life twisted upside down with confusion, adventure, and possible forbidden romance.

Chapter 1:
    Ari walked briskly down the halls of Skyflight Mansion, ignoring the states or whistles she got. Skyflight Mansion was home to King Adrian, ruler of the elves. He was fine as far as kings went, but she couldn't help comparing him to the last king.

    "Aribelle!" A stocky man dashed up to her, papers fluttering wildly in one hand. Ari stopped short and sighed.

    "Yes, Commander?"

    No one knew what his name truly was as he refused to speak it. Everyone just called him either Commander or Captain.

    "Training's long begun! You should've been there ten minutes ago!"

    Ari rolled her eyes. "When will you understand, I don't need training." She sidestepped him and continued walking. Commander shook his head, sighing. Ari walked out the door into the night air, spreading her arms and taking a deep breath. She loved fighting and she loved being part of the Elf Warriors, but she needed breathing room.

    A branch snapped and she squinted into the darkness. A forest surrounded Skyflight Mansion, the tall trees making it impossible to see further than a few feet.

    Im being paranoid, Ari told herself, bright green eyes scanning the tree line. All the humans are on Planet A2. And a wild animal wouldn't dare come close.

    Planet A2 was where she'd been born. It was a nice enough planet, just terrible compared to earth. So they'd made a switch- abducting the humans and bringing them to A2, and taking earth for themselves.

    That shadow behind a talk oak seemed suspicious. Ari took a step closer, the loud noise echoing through the dark. The shadow took off, racing into the trees. A humanoid shadow. Ari's pulse quickened and she took off after it, speaking into the mic on her wrist.

    "Aribelle speaking! I befit someone running north-west into the forest! I think I've got him, but being backup!"

    Her hand went to the hilt of her sword as she jumped deftly over a fallen log and ducked to avoid a heavy branch crawling with bugs.

    A chopping noise split the cool air and Ari gave a sigh of relief. The copter hovered over the escaping mystery shadow and the bottom hatch opened up. From the belly of the aircraft dropped a handful of elves, moon glinting on the steel blades.

    They formed a circle around the escapee and he skidded to a stop, turning in a circle. One of the soldiers pulled a flashlight out of his pocket and clicked inter beam. Ari narrowed her eyes in hate. A human.

    He was a bit taller than her, with black hair and multicolored eyes- one blue and one brown. He was obviously muscled, but he was lean and wiry, built more for speed and agility.

    Ari took a step forward. "How did you get off Planet A2?" She snapped, unsheathing her sword. He grinned, the moon illuminating his smile. Ari back off a step, slightly unnerved. The boy was close enough to her that he could attack her. No one moved for a moment. Then suddenly he jumped at her, wrapping an arm around her neck.

    With one hand he wrenched her weapon away. He loosened his grip, pressing a small blade to her neck.

    "One move and I'll do it," he warned, backing up a step, taking Ari with her. She shuddered, knowing better than to fight. One of the Warriors stepped forward, hesitation written on his face.

    "Drop the weapons or else," said the boy again, voice cold. "I will do it."

    The commander, who Ari hadn't even noticed, nodded slightly. There was a clatter as swords fell from their owner's hands and landed on the soft ground.

    "All right." Commander's voice was shaky. "Now let her go."

    Ari guessed her captor was grinning. "Now why would I do that?" He asked, voice clear. He pulled her back a step. "Don't follow us or else."

    Us? Ari had had enough. She wriggled furiously, ducking out of his grasp. With one arm, he reached out and pulled her back.

    "Don't try it, kid," he hissed in her ear. Ari gulped. The commander took a step back. The boy backed up and Ari complied, letting him half drag, half lead her back. She half expected the commander to attack, but she knew he wouldn't risk it. Which left her alone with a possible killer.

    As soon as the soldiers were out of sight, the boy raised his fingers to his lips and whistled. A few seconds passed, then a sleek black horse burst out of the trees in front of them, rearing a greeting. A genuine smile split his face.

    "Hey, girl," he crooned. "That's my pretty girl." Ari raised an eyebrow. He sure acted different around his horse. Still holding her with one hand, he rummaged around in the saddle bags, bringing out a cool of rope. Ari backed away.

    "Cool it, I'm not going to hurt you," said the boy, exasperated. Ari found herself rolling her eyes.

    "Yeah, because you so didn't almost kill me earlier," she snapped sarcastically. A small smile flickered over his face as he grabbed for her hands, taking them before she could wrench them away.
    He knotted her hands in front of her with a good tight knot.

    "Now get on the horse," he commanded. Ari smirked.

    "My hands are tied, dummy."

    He shrugged. "Bliss, down." The horse dropped to her knees and he turned to Ari. "Now can you get on?"

    Glaring daggers, she positioned herself on Bliss' back. The boy swung up in front of her and the gorse clambered to her hooves. He twisted around to look at her.

    "You can hold on to me if you want."

    "In your dreams," snapped Ari. He shrugged and tapped the mare's sides with his heels. Ari looked wistfully back to where the rest of the soldiers were. They'd rescue her. She'd just have to be patient.
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Postby W.oH.oB.o » Mon Jul 06, 2015 12:06 pm

Hi! More questions for you :p

Did the guy escape from A2, or did he just never go?
Did the elves keep all the technology from us, or did they just ignore the technology?
What's A2 like?
Are the humans happy on A2?
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Postby WolvesOfFire » Mon Jul 06, 2015 1:02 pm

Hi again x9

Well, most of those questions will be answered over the next few chapters. Jut stay tuned^^
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Postby W.oH.oB.o » Mon Jul 06, 2015 1:52 pm

I was thinking about the chapter which made me think of more questions. Sorry...

Why did he kidnap Ari?
Are you going to have scenes with a perspective of a person on A2?
Is the King not necessarily a good King at times? Because she sometimes compared him to other Kings
What's Ari's rank in the Elf Warriors?
Are you ever going to reveal Commander/Captain's real name?

Also, am I annoying you? It's okay if I am, just say yes and I'll try to stop asking so many questions.
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Postby WolvesOfFire » Mon Jul 06, 2015 4:34 pm

First of all, you're not bugging me^^ I actually find it very helpful^^

So most of this stuff will be answered through other chapters, and I was considering adding another character from A2. I believe I will include the captain's name at some point^^
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Postby WolvesOfFire » Tue Jul 07, 2015 4:26 am

Chapter 2:
    Fifteen year-old Mandie scrambled over a lump of rock and continued down the beaten path. Life on A2 wasn't bad, considering what the elves could've done. Planet A2 was a lot like Mars. Covered in reddish rocks, with scattered clumps of twisted trees and the occasional river. The entire population wasn't here either, many people had tried to run away and ended their lives on an elf's sword. Mandie shuddered.

    Please let Ryan be ok, she thought. She'd been searching all over, asking everyone she met, but no one had seen her brother. Of course, there was a whole planet to search, it could take....

    No. Don't think about that. Mandie continued walking, then broke into a jog when she saw the next 'settlement.' People had been forced to comstruct ramshackle structures out of raw materials only.

    Its like the Stone Age, all over again, Mandie thought glumly. She pulled out her tablet as she walked and input the password. The black screen changed to a picture of Ryan.

    Mandie almost burst into sobs as she gazed at her brother's messy black hair he would never brush and his piercing eyes- one brown and one blue. Through the almost-three-months humans had been on A2, she'd kept it together.

    We already lost mom, are you going to leave me to? She thought. Ever since their mother had died only six months before the elves' invasion, she and Ryan had had a closer bond- he would've done anything for her and she would've done anything for him.

    Maybe this time, Mandie thought as she blinked away tears. Maybe this time I'll find him.
    •••••••••••••••••••••••••
    When they'd been moving for only ten minutes, Ari couldn't stand the silence.

    "So who are you?" She asked, keeping her voice cold. He twisted around a bit, multicolored eyes penetrating hers.

    "Ryan. And you?"

    Ari tossed her head. "None of your business."

    "My name wasn't any of your business either," he reminded her. Ari sighed.

    "Fine. I'm Aribelle, but I go by Ari." She replied. He nodded and turned his back to her. He barely touched the reins as Bliss picked her way carefully through the trees. The black mare seemed to know where she was going.

    "So how did you get off A2?" She asked.

    "Why should I tell you that?" He asked, staring up ahead as though something interested him.

    "Well, I'm tied up so I can't exactly go and turn you in," Ari reasoned.

    "I guess so. I never went to A2 in the first place." Ignoring the look of shock on Ari's face, he continued. "You checked every house and every cave, and everywhere someone could possibly be, but I guess you didn't consider where I was."

    Ari nodded, another question firming on her lips. "Where are you taking me?"

    He didn't look at her. "Somewhere no one will ever find us."

    Ari recoiled. "The Elf Warriors will come for me. Commander will come for me."

    Ryan flashed his smirk. "There's no point in searching if they can't find you. By the way, Elf Warriors is a dumb name. Who came up with it?"

    "I don't know." Ari shrugged. She couldn't shake his earlier comment. Was it true that he was taking her someplace so secret even the elves couldn't find her?

    "By the way, what's the deal with the old school weapons? There's gotta be at least a couple hundred guns lying around."

    "We wanted a fresh start. Elves don't like things easy."

    "Then what's Roth the helicopter?" He asked.

    "That was built by Commander." Ari responded.

    "I know the 'commander's' real name," said Ryan, gazing off into the distance.

    "Very funny. How would you figure that out?" Snapped Ari, pulling at the rope around her wrists.

    "Simple. I snuck into the office room in Skyflight mansion and found a file all about him. I was trying to find a list of people sent to A2."

    Ari didn't ask why he'd tried to find that. "So what's his real name?"

    "Bruno."

    Ari suppressed an insane desire to giggle. "I'd keep my name a secret too," she said, lifting her hands to examine the rope. Ryan hardly ever looked her way, giving her plenty of time to work at her bonds.

    Probably 'cause he knows how to tie a good knot, she thought. So far, she'd done nothing but scrape her wrists. A faint trickle of blood oozed down her arm and she winced.

    "I recommend not trying to escape," said Ryan. Ari kept her head high.

    "No matter what I'll fight you," she snapped. "Why'd you kidnap me anyways? Kill me and dump me somewhere?"

    "Nah. More like I needed leverage in case the elves came after me." He responded, reaching down to stroke Bliss' neck.

    "You can't stop them. They're more powerful than you think," snapped Ari. She examined her wrists. Not a single strand of rope had come undone."

    "I have my ways." And he left it at that.
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Postby W.oH.oB.o » Tue Jul 07, 2015 4:32 am

You forgot to do [/list] at the end.

Didn't the elves have some place to live? Couldn't the humans take over the elves places, especially since ti didn't seem the elves cared.
Does Ryan remember his sister?
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Postby WolvesOfFire » Tue Jul 07, 2015 4:35 am

((Fixed))

The way I see it, if some elves kidnapped me and put me on their old planet, I'd hate them so much I wouldn't even want to touch anything they built. And yes, he remembers his sister. That's why he was looking for a list, he wanted to know if his sister had died, escaped like him, or if she was still on A2 c:
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Postby W.oH.oB.o » Tue Jul 07, 2015 4:48 am

Oh, makes sense. Did you have Bruno's name planned from the beginning, or did you just make it up?
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Postby WolvesOfFire » Tue Jul 07, 2015 5:07 am

From the beginning^^ I needed a somewhat normal name that would still give him an excuse to go by 'Commander'
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