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◆Tolter Challenge Story Thread◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Fri May 15, 2015 2:12 am

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This thread is dedicated to my Tolter Challenge Writing pieces!
I ask is that you do not post on this thread, please. For each monthly them along
with my standard writing piece, I will do a small little art piece. Also I will normally
try and enter at least one writing piece every week so a total of five writing entries
a month. If this is too many a month please tell me also not every piece will be
entered for points.

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◆My Tolters◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Fri May 15, 2015 2:13 am

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Here's a list of my Tolters, which will be updated regularly when I get more to
add to my herd as well as the number of stories they have written on them [Must be by me].
Dancing River Rocks [0]
I'm Not A Hero I'm A Disaster [0]
Ko [0]
Cinema [0]
Preston [0]
Catcher In The Rye [0]
Under The Stars Is My Home [0]
Cadbury [0]
Crow On The Roof [0]
Arkham City's Bright Lights [0]
Virus [0]
Rythm Keeper Heart Stealer [0]
No name [0]
Honey And The Bee [0]
Captain Honey Buns [0]
King's Ransom [0]
American Beauty American Physco [0]
Luck Of The Irish [0]
Twin Skeletons [0]
Sing Your Heart You [0]
Unnamed [0]

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◆Writing Prompts/Ideas◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Fri May 15, 2015 2:32 am

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For this small place I will be putting down some small ideas I can go back to
when I don't know what to write about. If you have any ideas that you'd like to see me write
about just PM and I'll gladly add them to the list.
■Art Block ■Facing A Fear
■Playing Hide and Seek

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◆May Monthly Challenge Writing◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Fri May 15, 2015 12:24 pm

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Characters: Cinema and Junior
Word Count: 729 words
Theme: Your Tolter's Favorite Holiday
Title: Tangled In Green Plastic Licorice
Status: Completed

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Overnight a fresh blanket of snow had fallen over Paradise Pines for a picture perfect day which was to be exact, Christmas Eve. Inside the barn located nearest to the farm house, a buttermilk buckskin held her head over their stall, ears perked as she waited for the footsteps she searched out for. It was her second year at this ranch since having been sold from her previous home and last year her rider had spent this day last year with her. It was her favorite two days that formed the holiday of Christmas.

While all the other horses rested on this day of relaxation and spoiling she stood wide awake, twisting her neck to sight the boy. He was late. Always was late. Soon footsteps echoed from the entrance as it slid open and Junior stepped in, dressed in lazy day clothes. A button up polo t-shirt, showing off his tattooed arm along with faded blue jeans and his winter boots. He was such a dork and Cinema loved him. As he approached her orange/yellow eyes locked onto a small plastic bag in his left hand.

Stretching out her neck to as far as it could go, she touched her nose to Junior's cheek, her large pink tongue swiping across his cheek, her choice of greeting for everyone. His laugh brought joy to her heart as she stepped back to let him push open the door and slip a lead onto her halter. "You're going to love today I'm sure of it. No riding, no tack just you and I along with some movies and a special little surprise," he spoke bumping the door open further as he exited with the mare.

Giving a tiny little prance she tugged on the long strands of the boy's hair, feet sinking into the undisturbed snow. As she was lead on she took a few to catch on to where they were headed, but when she did she found herself befuddled, where could this be? It was her pasture that she shared with the mare Miss Honeybee that had recently arrived, but the mare wasn't there, instead stood a tall pine tree.

Upon closer inspection as she poked at it with her nose she discovered it was made of an scratchy plastic and with annoyed look she questioned Junior with no words. "It's not real I know," Junior laughed, "But it's only so you won't try and eat it since I know you like trying to eat those prickly needles."

"How dare you accuse me of that!" She snorted, but of course her words were unheard by the boy as he undid the lead, tossing it up to hang on the fence before bending over. In his hands he pulled out from under the tree a box of odd green plastic string with dull colored dots hanging off. Without the balls, the green part reminded Cinema of the sweet, red tasting sticks of licorice Junior sometimes snuck her.

"You're going to be helping me put these," he said holding up the contraption, "on the tree!" He mused showing the mare to take them in her mouth and move around the tree in a circle, putting up the first strand around the bottom before stepping back to let her take over. "It'll look just like the big tree in the ranch house!"

"Alright I got this it's easy!" She told herself nabbing the lights and doing what Junior had showed. After completing a full circle around the artificial tree she dropped the end and held her head up high, unsure of why Junior was giggling like a filly that had caught sight of a handsome little colt.

Soon the light bulb above her head went off as she noticed the tree had no lights on it, but instead they were tanged around her neck and body. "Oops I got too carried away."

"Hold on," Junior said quickly reaching for the bit of lights that rested on her flank, switch the battery run lights on, illuminating the mare in an array of colors. "Instead of the yearly Christmas tree for you and me how about the yearly Cinema tree?" He chuckled snapping a picture.

Her second Christmas at Paradise Pines had given the ranch a new tradition, at least for Junior and Cinema and that was Cinema wrapped in tangled Christmas lights.

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◆Anniversary's Been Forgotten...Oops!◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Sat May 16, 2015 4:54 am

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Characters: Mickey and Miss Honeybee
Word Count: TBA
Theme: None, just a first anniversary story for two of my tolters.
Title: Flowers For The Forgetful
Status: In Progress

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Today was a special day for Mickey. It was May 21st, the one year anniversary of her becoming mates with Miss Honeybee, and she wanted to make it special. The whole day was already planned out for the two of them. It would all start off with Mickey surprising Honey with a bouquet of flowers, freshly picked from her pasture.

After giving her mate the flowers they would go on an adventure to the lake only miles away. Nuzzling her mother's neck she trotted off, red eyes scanning the dew covered grass for the most perfect of flowers. There were many to choose from. Yellows, oranges, and quite a few more, but none were right. Nose to the ground she inspected the flowers and the slightest flaw would deem it unfit of becoming a gift.

Some time later she had gathered several red and white flowers with a single blue one in the middle. Proud of her present, Mickey made her way out of the pasture and on her way to find Honeybee.

On silent feet she entered the barn where Honey resided and would be sleeping. Passing by other stalls she paid no attention to their residents until she reached the stall at the very end. Inside her stunning buckskin mate slept, head perched on her hay holder. Setting the flowers down carefully she did a small little smile.

As quiet as a mouse Mickey slipped her head into the stall and nuzzled the mare's mane. "Wakey-wakey sugarcube," she cooed softly watching her stir.

Mickey retracted her head and watched with excitement as she grasped the flowers in her mouth. It was the start of their very special day
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◆Left Out In The Rain◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Tue May 19, 2015 4:54 am

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Characters: Chrissie, Crowley, Sebastien, and Zachary
Word Count: TBA
Theme: Chrissie is being bullied by Crowley and his gang
Title: Let The Rain Wash Away The Blood
Status: In Progress

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Chrissie's got bullies. Just about everyone knew the blind buckskin was an easy target for Crowley and his 'gang' of jerks. No one really thought much about it since they normally only got as mean as nipping the horse's flanks and Chrissie never seemed bothered by it, at least when there were bystanders. There would always be a first for everything though and today things were going to get worse than normal. Angry storm clouds hung over Paradise Pines, rumbling with growls that told everyone they were ready to crack open and let the heavens cry. While most horses were lead inside to the safety of their stalls, Crowley and Zachary threw a fit until the humans had given up, cursing at them and heading in for their own shelter.

There was always Chrissie though. He was always forgotten out in the pasture, not that he minded. The buckskin leopard appaloosa liked being out in the rain. To be brutally honest, Chrissie was the no body of Paradise Pines, no one really cared to look at him, spoil him rotten, or even bother to check if he was in the pasture or stables. He was the forgotten horse. No, he wasn't neglected, just ignored and left to be alone. Even the other horses chose to ignore him most of the time. Slowly the rain began to fall down, dripping onto his back as he grazed. The forgotten horse just ate without a care for as long as he could.

It was when the loud squeak of his paddock gate sounded that he looked up, blindly searching for what was going on, the torrential downfall of the pouring rain deafening as whoever or whatever came closer. As lightning struck down far off and illuminated the sky, yellow eyes could be seen through the rain to anyone that was not Chrissie.
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◆Exhaustion At It's Worst◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Sat May 23, 2015 4:37 am

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Word Count: 1,373
Theme: Not Sure
Title: Summer Time Beat Down
Status: Complete[/b]

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The air was heavy in the air with heat smothering Paradise Pines and all that resided in the land of the ranch. With such force, the sun beat down onto the backs of horses, cats, dogs, humans, and everything else there. Shade was the only relief with the air conditioning systems down. In the pastures, under the scattered trees if there were some, sweat drenched horses stood. The heat was getting to everyone so something had to be done.
Two buckskins wandered along the dusty, hot pathway. They had a plan to make the heat not so much of a parade crasher. “Come on Chrissie,” Sebastien huffed head-butting the blind buckskin’s flank to get him moving faster.
“I’m moving as fast as I can Mr. Antsy Pants! If you can’t tell I’m kind of already beat up still,” he nickered kicking a hind hoof back to land on the other’s body softly. He was a violent Tolter at all, which is why he had gotten to his poor health state as it was, but that was to be a different story for another day, maybe not such a hot one.
With an over dramatic and playful whine he pushed his blind companion onwards. Their destination, the west side barn, farthest barn from the farm house. It was really just a storage barn at the moment until more horses came to live. They were meeting Batman and Cadbury over there as well. Though having to force his beat-up friend over, Sebastien was sure they would be last.
Both their manes stuck to their sweat drenched necks and flies swarmed around them without refusing to quit. With such a large fly problem horses out in the pastures had been equipped with fly protection head gear, making them look ridiculous. Especially big ‘ol Crowley that had to be forced to wear a rosy pink head cover since they didn’t have any others that properly fit over his big empty head.
A chuckle to himself he continued on, never letting Chrissie stop until the barn had been reached. And like predicted Cadbury and Batman stood, playing a game of Long Hay. Batman’s made up game of going to a stack of hay and taking one piece. Whoever had the shortest won and the longest piece lost. He taught it to horses with an injury keeping them inside and foals for when it was too bad outside to go play in the field. “Sorry we took so long. Old Sore Butt right here,” tugging on Chrissie’s mane, “was slower than a tortoise going forward on a track that brought him backwards.” He cracked a loud laugh dodging another soft kick he was given.
“We figured, I mean we all know you two are the slowest ones around here,” Batman snorted tossing his head up before groaning, even in the shelter of a roofed barn, the heat was unbearable.
“Enough with the joking guys we need to do something about the heat here, it’s horrible,” Cadbury whinnied shaking dust from her coat.
They were all exhausted; Batman leaned against a post, Cadbury sat down, Sebastien stood with his head hung low, and finally Chrissie just laid on the floor with his sides heaving. “But what should be do Cadbury? It has to be a few different things or one huge thing that’ll work for everyone, the humans, the dogs, cranky old Donatello, everyone,” Chrissie huffed, lifting his head with ears swiveled in the mare’s direction.
“A beach party at the lake? I mean it’s a private lake and only our Ranch and a few beach front homes known about it?” Batman suggested. He always did have a love of beaches on hot days.
He shook his head and nuzzled Chrissie gently. “With the amount of animals we have here? No way we could do that. Sorry Battie Man,” he sighed.
More ideas were listed out, but none could really work for everyone or the horses couldn’t exactly do it themselves. Cadbury had suggested fresh lemonade for everyone, ice cream, and movies. While now Batman had suggested his beach party idea and a pizza part [he couldn’t get his mind off parties]. Chrissie had tried to be a bit unique with his own ideas yet again they didn’t really work, only one really had good potential. He’d suggested story time out in the fields under a huge tent [there wasn’t enough room], fruit salad for everyone, and his one good idea they’d probably use would be bobbing for apples. Birdwatching and a hose fight is what Sebastien had suggested.
“That’s it! I’ve got it!” Cadbury neighed out, getting to her feet. “A water fight! I mean with sprinklers, water guns, bobbing for apples and finally a water balloon fight! I know Junior’s African Grey parrot, Kiki, could find some laying around. Junior normally has two large bins filled with them.”
“But how can we fill them?! We’d end up popping them,” Chrissie argued, Sebastien nudging him to his feet.
The mare shook her head. “Someone will work the spigot and one of the birds like Kiki can help get the balloon on to fill it. Plus we just need a bin or something to put them in until everything’s all set.”
Hesitant Sebastien voiced his own opinion. “I think it would work we just need to spread the news and get some more help with the other stuff. I’ll talk to Mickey about helping gather apples as she knows the best place for them.”
“I can get Kiki to help me with the water balloons,” Cadbury piped in. “I’ll also get Mitch to get the keys to the office barn that has a computer and printer. Kiki can type what I tell her and then we’ll have posters to put places.”
Chrissie nickered softly to grab the group’s attention. “I’ll gather bins and that stuff for the apple game and for holding the balloons.”
“And I’ll…Uh I’ll get some snacks for everyone.”
With that the group split up, Cadbury headed for the ranch home, Batman went off to find Mickey, Chrissie went to search the barns for bins and buckets, and lastly Sebastien went off to find the snacks.
It had only taken a little over an hour for everything to be set up and the group had met up again, standing near the house. Batman had gathered multiple types of snacks. Something for everyone whether they be a dog, a cat, human, horse, or other creature. Standing behind a large bin, Chrissie leaned against Sebastien, the blue bin wide enough for several horses to stick their faces in and try to grab an apple. Along with the big bin a few others were scattered around, so other animals could find a size they liked.
“We’re all set!” Cawed Kiki, her talons letting go of a water balloon right above Cadbury, the mare’s back becoming wet with water now.
“You evil little parrot!” She whinnied, stomping her front hooves down and tossing her head up.
Now silence fell over them. It was time to wait for curious creatures to come and join the fun. Soon a few other horses had come to check what was going on. The buckskin laced mare, Honeybee, and her mate, Desmond’s first daughter and foal, Mickey followed behind Denali. The three had ears pricked up and excited faces. Below them, weaving through their legs was Tank and his pal, Jasper, that first of many Mudis to join Paradise Pines.
“Guys what’s going on here?” Honeybee asked, peering at all the seeming randomly placed items.
“It’s so hot outside today and inside that we’ve decided to throw a water party with some games and snacks!” Batman chuckled picking up a balloon and tossing it at Mickey.
The blue, over stretched latex skin, shattered with the contact upon the mare’s nose. Water splashing over her face. And instead of anger at being pelted with the object she laughed and moved away to grab on herself, tossing it at Batman.
Within a span of a few minutes most of the creatures had ventured out and joined the fun with bobbing for apples, playing in the water, pigging out, and throwing water balloons all about.
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Re: ◆Tolter Challenge Story Thread◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Wed Jun 03, 2015 2:40 am

Batman’s human name is Bailey Camile at the age of 18 going on 19 that’s in his senior year of high school, working on graduating with high enough grades to get a scholarship to the college of his choice where he dreams of working on becoming a professional cartoon artist. A goofball that has many friends, but only surrounds himself with the closest of them all and his true friends. With an addiction to his hobbies he ignores his need to sleep so he can easily continue drawing or uploading the next video to his youtube channel. Bailey has his plans all written out with the hopes he’ll stick close to them. With his career in the works and so focused on school he’s having trouble really keeping up to date with his friends and keeping the friendships strong. He’s spiralling a bit down into the abyss of stress and loneliness, even his normally high spirits, energy, and things he enjoys are dying out. The stress cradles him, nurtures him into a mess of a student, just when what he does really counts towards his future. Then he starts to notice Mitch, the student that’s been in most of his classes since 7th grade. He stands a few inches taller than Bailey with a lighter complexion and a face of fading freckles. He’s always the student with his hand up, ready to answer questions, stand up to people being rude and does what makes him happy, not that pleases others. He’s got a close set of friends
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◆Mare In The Snow◆

Postby Captain Chomp » Tue Aug 18, 2015 4:16 pm

Chapter One;

The mare in the snow wasn't much other than a small tale told to the foals even if it had only started two years prior. She was a simple myth that Batman had made up to tell foals, whose mothers couldn't handle them. When Pentatonix had only been a wee yearling he'd listened to the first telling of this tale, then and there he'd been hooked on and left to go on an adventure of whim. Even if this mare was only a foal's tale, he had to search. So Pentatonix had drawn up a plan with himself and well only himself. As now it whirled, frozen flakes dancing down from the heavens, he knew in the paddock, by his mother's side that he would stay at the edge and sneak away without a care in the world.

Night had fallen down upon Paradise Pines at a rapid pace, leaving Pentatonix to lean against the furthest side of the fence, orange eyes peering into the darkness of the forest behind, squinting to catch a glimpse of the mare in the snow. With clouds blocking the moon from their view, the colt was sure his mother would be sleeping this white night for her dance partner had not shown. From through the snow he watched until his mother, Desmond lowered her head and he knew she was asleep. Doing a small, childish hop he cantered away, back to the fence he turned and charged, ready to leap. "Oh, How The Might Fall In Love what do you think you're doing young man!" Desmond screeched, racing towards her son, who was without a doubt trying to escape. "Don't you dare leap that fence. Not in this weather!"

Ducking his head, feet sliding in the snow, sending it flying in front of him Pentatonix collapsed in a black, snow covered heap. "But momma I was just gonna try and find that mare in Batman's story," he nickered shaking his mane out. On fully white legs now did the colt stand, head down. "Sorry."

"You better be sorry. I would've had a heart attack if I had awaken and you have not been here," Desmond said her voice quiet as she nuzzled her foal.

Now two years later the young stallion now had his own pasture minus the fact that he shared it with his brother Dylan and their only nephew, Coin. He had become a handsome horse just like his father was. He'd grown tired of always watching from the fence in winter time to find the snowy mare from the foal's tale. It was still a dream he had of finding her, and now he could roam beyond his enclosure to search. This winter was the harshest of his life, snow so hard it took minutes of endless pawing to free some frozen grass and water froze in minutes if not heated. He'd explained to his big brother about what he was doing and like always the slow, dimwitted stallion that was his brother, shrugged and went back to eating, which was no wonder he was a horse used for little kids. He was so fat and lazy he was perfect.

And so there the black stallion went, sailing over the fence that kept him and the woods and his dream apart.
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◆Open Arms After The Show◆ WIP

Postby Captain Chomp » Wed Aug 19, 2015 9:33 am

Tawny hung her head over the white railing, halter clinking against the wood to create a dull thump. Her eyes shining, a rich and dazzling shine of the richest of browns. Their focus? A stallion, black as midnight and markings stark white as the freshly fallen snow on a December morning. His legs moving, flowing with the grace of hundred dances all of which would never match his skill. Her head swayed in a delicate way as if the gentlest of touches would have her wither away into nothing but dust. Such a fragile mare had no place in such a crowded event where the dances of a man and a horse wowed the onlookers. Soon his stage time was over, awarded in cheers and claps as he exited the arena. Forever fee guided by a heartbeat, pumpkin orange eyes falling onto the angel he called his own.

As the stallion passed Tawny, she fell in step next to him, leaving a gap so she would not disrupt the rider in his saddle. Turning her head
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