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[avaria]

I love it!
I'm currently on chapter 14.
How could Leyshine forget about Maylo? I think Leyshine and Maylo would be so cute together, haha.
Anyways, this is really good! I can't wait to read more.

[~Sticks & Stones~]

I love it so far

[Murdoc Niccals]

First off, kinda shouting out to the fact the title is "Wolves of Hunter." Kinda reads weird to anyone who knows Spanish and glances at the title. (Just in my preference, Cazarra works since it becomes a portmanteau of caza (to hunt) and terra (earth) but eh. Just my nitpicks, don't take em to heart.)

Also, humans are the gold standard for bipedalism, and due to the hip structure they are unable to fully walk upright due to hip structure. Animals like chimps who can walk on their hind legs cannot have the same benefits humans have (ie, they have a more hunched posture), and then you have to factor in the tail (however I don't think it would play that big of a role as a counterbalance as it would in a kangaroo). So in my opinion, the wolves probably only would use bipedal motion when they need to use their hands, and go quadrupled when speed is necessary. If their leg structure is similar to that of humans, I also hyppothesize they'd probably need shorter legs to match their arm length, which makes for a balance that would allow for somewhat fast quadrupled motion, which was mentioned.

tl;dr I ruin everything with my sci-fi nitpicking

Live Read Summary:

"barricudai" and then " barricudia" are mentioned. I do not know if this is a mispelling or intentionally different. If it is the latter (I think it is), an explanation would definitely help with clarity. Also, later on it is mentioned they can attack. Now, I highly suggest describing the barracudai as well as spidras when they are introduced. The former is taken from a fish, and therefore the suggestion it can attack a land-based tribe causes some confusion to me. Are they fish? Are they amphibious? Why are they so feared? You probably want to keep the reader interested, but giving small bits of information (eg, mutterings of a previous war would give context to WHY there is a fear) will help that along while still having some mystery.

Seconding on describing what the Spidras and Barracudai are. I assumed both were aquatic and then the spidras are described somewhat insectoid and terrestrial, if they can dig well in the ground.

Also, describing the wound the Oceanus received would def. be a plus. Especially the reaction to it for the MCs. He was described to be attacked, the extent of which was left unknown. It appears that he fainted from blood loss or exhaustion, maybe both. Clarity is in need.

"OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOoooooOOOOOOooooooooooo" You really don't need to have a wolf howl when you describe it afterwards.

Spell checks as well as grammatical errors need to be corrected. "Lathora drug the word out." In this case it would be dragged. I understand this is a dialectic thing, but for the sake of clarity and to avoid confusion with the other meaning of the word, dragged is better.
I noticed a few missing commas or periods during the end of dialogue.
"Quar and Zinar the Terra pack's Alpha pair stood tall on the stone..." in this 'the Terra Pack's Alpha pair' would be contained within commas.
There's random caps on some nouns in the middle of sentences.
"disgustingly emancipated" I think you mean emaciated here. Unless wolf-slavery is a thing?

General Crit:
I think you should add more description. You have a lot of dialogue, which is good, but a little description goes a long way sometimes.

Def. getting an asexual vibe from Maylo and loving it.