{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } LOCK! NEW THREAD

[avaria]

oop, randomly popping in again. anyways i come in search of a bit of critiquing.
if you wouldn't mind taking two seconds of your time to read my little short story
and let me know what you think, i'd love you forever. thanks! here's the link ♥

Oh my, I love it!
The descriptions were amazing, and the ending has a really good impact.
Honestly, I don't think there is any room for improvement, it's perfect.

[Rockito]

Wow I already got 12 pages down of my fanfiction I honestly don't know what page to stop at because I actually like writing this fanfiction and usually I just stop writing stories after maybe the first,second, or third page ;u; The pages are short though but you guys can still read it if you want uvu




I just know they will be confusing or whatever *big deep sigh*

[Starfalling]

Can someone give me some citique on this please? :
viewtopic.php?f=57&t=2428878&p=76654842#p76654842

[SilverBlade]

The other day, someone told me: "If you really love something, you will find time to do it; even for 5 minutes in the middle of the night." And I just couldn't help but think: "Then why can't I find time for writing?" I wanted to be a writer since I was little. I cannot picture myself doing anything else. It's my only talent and my only passion. But I don't write lately. At all. It seems like Iost my inspiration and my muse. Yes, I am supposed to be studing a lot this year, but I seem to find time for everything else. Does this mean that I don't love writing as much as I thought? That I am not ment to be a writer? Does this mean that I will have to find another dream, because I clearly do not fight for this one?

[Mercury.Muses]

Don't down yourself Silver! You just need to get in the mood of writing. Forcing yourself and ideas only hurts your writing and worrying that you don't like writing much anymore hurts it too. To get back in the mood, maybe read some more or search for a good idea plot that pokes you in the side. Or try writing with a friend, because you will and probably do have time for writing, you just need the inspiration for it! I have plenty of time to write, but if you're like me, I wait until I have a deep writing burst and I let it flow all at once until the next week at the most. I don't like to write during a block because then it turns out bad xD

[Rolly-chan]

The other day, someone told me: "If you really love something, you will find time to do it; even for 5 minutes in the middle of the night." And I just couldn't help but think: "Then why can't I find time for writing?" I wanted to be a writer since I was little. I cannot picture myself doing anything else. It's my only talent and my only passion. But I don't write lately. At all. It seems like Iost my inspiration and my muse. Yes, I am supposed to be studing a lot this year, but I seem to find time for everything else. Does this mean that I don't love writing as much as I thought? That I am not ment to be a writer? Does this mean that I will have to find another dream, because I clearly do not fight for this one?

Finding the reason why you're not writing although you love it is like trying to find the reason diseases exist. There are way too many possibilities and proving them is impossible. You might be afraid of not being good enough, you might be afraid of letting people down, you might feel like you don't have enough talent, you might be or feel whatever else. There are many things that could stand between you and writing. Depression and anxiety are two very big causes for the inability to do the things you love, too.

The cruel truth is that yes, if you don't make time to write, you'll probably never be an accomplished writer. Working writers write. They don't make excuses.
Have you ever heard of an athlete winning something when they only train, like, three weeks a year? I haven't. Same with writing. If you don't write regularly, if you don't take the time for it often, you likely won't succeed.
Good news is the only writers who lose are the ones that give up. So, don't give up if writing means something to you. Work on your resolve, write even when you don't want to, don't make up excuses, don't procrastinate. Work on all that. That's what you can do.
It's hard, but nothing worth fighting for comes easy.

[TheSongOfTheStars]

DON'T EVER THINK THAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Its just because you need a break from writing maybe. I have had that happen to me many times! Maybe you are thining of something else. School may just need to be priority right now. The exact same thing happened to me. I did a Shakespeare play and I couldn't even think about writing because I was so busy trying to remember my lines. Another correction is you have many talents. You may not see them, But writing is NOT the ONLY one. You may excel in it only because you haven't taken the time to find out any of your other skills. Maybe you can sing or draw or have a ting with animals. Heck maybe its baby sitting or sweeping. I like to do dishes to help me unwind.

[Neoshiori]

Some how when I read over my story it's seem like it going fast is there way to make story longer o.o?

[iWonder]

When I loose my muse and inspiration I sleep, read, play outside, listen to music, learn new things. To help inspire me to do it. Sometimes it takes weeks or months for me to figure it out.
Those are the times I get depressed and am not pleasant to be around, don't give up. Maybe a long break is what you need. And then when it is all over- you will surface with a new idea. I love drawing and playing the piano but I don't always do them, but I still progress.

It is okay to take a break.

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Editing. Read it out loud and maybe record yourself, or read it to a younger sibling. Hearing somebody else read it or hearing yourself might help.

Go through and see if there are things that need to be explained better or places where detail should be added. It takes time but is totally worth it when you look back and see how large your story is now compared to earlier.

[avaria]

Some how when I read over my story it's seem like it going fast is there way to make story longer o.o?

Try adding in more descriptions, I find that your stories go slower if you actually give the readers a real feel of what the protagonist is going through, or where they are.
Machenza's advice is spot-on, reading it out loud really helps.