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[Mercury.Muses]

Setting: cyberpunk/high fantasy. Theme:allegorical serial killer story story
Setting: post-apocalypse. Theme:murder mystery/epic story

Checking out that link watermelon.. xD
etting: cyberpunk/space opera. Theme:sudden gain-of-greatness/serial killer story story

Edit: oh..my..god.. xD
...the US Civil War involved nuns/monks?

[VesVes]

i'm a new member!
➹ Sailor Vesta / Vesta / I don't have any links as of now, but I am developing something. c: / If I post something, sure! As long as it's constructive.
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Sorry if I can't post without being accepted, but I do have a question. I'm writing a story (well, more like a novel series really) and it centers around three kingdoms of big cats at war with each other (actually, more like two--the third is pretty much either killed/taken prisoner). I have three main POV characters. Two I'm establishing arcs for, and I'm getting pretty far. The third? Well, I'm having trouble with her.

The character is question is a wise, old female snow leopard named Alyzanya. She's in the same kingdom as the antagonist, and she's basically watched him grow up from innocent cub to merciless killer dictator. (She's not his mother, merely his mentor figure). I've got two routes in mind, but they've both got problems.

Alyzanya stays in the kingdom, watching Ithatoron (the antagonist)'s transformation with horror, eventually helping the other characters foil his plans, though with much regret.

Pros: We get to see Ithatoron's transformation and descent into darkness from someone in the inside
Cons: Alyzanya herself pretty much does nothing. If I go this route, I might as well switch it to Ithatoron's POV. But I would really prefer not to, especially since Alyzanya was (and still is) a major character, and I just don't want to toss her aside like that

Alyzanya goes out into the "No-Man's Land" (a.k.a. the Chiambe mountains) in search for Ithatoron's exiled sister. Nonuka, Alyzanya's friend, also goes along for the ride.

Pros: Alyzanya actually goes out and does something! And it's a good way to bring in Nonuka and Ithatoron's sister, because Route One would have them sitting around awkwardly, even though no matter what route I take, Ithatoron's sister is going to end up being the queen of her kingdom.
Cons: It's basically the Lion King, minus the romance. Also, what would Alyzanya and Nonuka do besides partake in random adventures and mention that they once dated? And what about Ithatoron's sister--she'd still be sitting around awkwardly. And what would happen once the duo does find her? If the sister agrees, it's almost like a deus ex machina, but if she disagrees, it would be hard to make it different from the Lion King.

So what should I do? Which route should I take, or does anyone have any basic ideas for a third route? Please PM me if you want more details!

Again, sorry if I can't post without being accepted first.

[Silverhart]

i'm a new member!
➹ Sailor Vesta / Vesta / I don't have any links as of now, but I am developing something. c: / If I post something, sure! As long as it's constructive.
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Sorry if I can't post without being accepted, but I do have a question. I'm writing a story (well, more like a novel series really) and it centers around three kingdoms of big cats at war with each other (actually, more like two--the third is pretty much either killed/taken prisoner). I have three main POV characters. Two I'm establishing arcs for, and I'm getting pretty far. The third? Well, I'm having trouble with her.

The character is question is a wise, old female snow leopard named Alyzanya. She's in the same kingdom as the antagonist, and she's basically watched him grow up from innocent cub to merciless killer dictator. (She's not his mother, merely his mentor figure). I've got two routes in mind, but they've both got problems.

Alyzanya stays in the kingdom, watching Ithatoron (the antagonist)'s transformation with horror, eventually helping the other characters foil his plans, though with much regret.

Pros: We get to see Ithatoron's transformation and descent into darkness from someone in the inside
Cons: Alyzanya herself pretty much does nothing. If I go this route, I might as well switch it to Ithatoron's POV. But I would really prefer not to, especially since Alyzanya was (and still is) a major character, and I just don't want to toss her aside like that

Alyzanya goes out into the "No-Man's Land" (a.k.a. the Chiambe mountains) in search for Ithatoron's exiled sister. Nonuka, Alyzanya's friend, also goes along for the ride.

Pros: Alyzanya actually goes out and does something! And it's a good way to bring in Nonuka and Ithatoron's sister, because Route One would have them sitting around awkwardly, even though no matter what route I take, Ithatoron's sister is going to end up being the queen of her kingdom.
Cons: It's basically the Lion King, minus the romance. Also, what would Alyzanya and Nonuka do besides partake in random adventures and mention that they once dated? And what about Ithatoron's sister--she'd still be sitting around awkwardly. And what would happen once the duo does find her? If the sister agrees, it's almost like a deus ex machina, but if she disagrees, it would be hard to make it different from the Lion King.

So what should I do? Which route should I take, or does anyone have any basic ideas for a third route? Please PM me if you want more details!

Again, sorry if I can't post without being accepted first.

It's automatic acceptance. ^^ It should say that on the front page. Anywho, welcome!

I see your dilemma there. I personally prefer characters to be more active in stories. In fact, if she's a main character, active is almost always the best choice. Otherwise the story can become very boring. Don't be dissuaded just because a single plot point resembles another story. If you comb through enough stories, you'll find that all plots are basically the same, they're just repeated, and repackaged over and over again (The Lion King is based on Hamlet after all). As long as you're not purposefully copying a plot from another story it should be alright. Just make sure you make it your own plot, with your own little twists, and nuances. Anyway, from what it sounds like it doesn't seem very Lion King like. The point of view isn't from the King/Queen learning responsibility, it's from the other character's journey, and what they discover.

Really, you just need to pick what's best for the story. You could probably even combine the two: start off in the kingdom watching everything, and then have her leave. Or even dedicate a few chapters to your antagonists POV. To me, it seems like you're more interested in the second 'journey' option, and I think that may be more interesting to write. Anyway, you said the sister becomes queen no matter what route you take. Do you have another plan to introduce her? If not, the journey story seems like the best option to take.

[watermelon.]

Yes you are auto accepted ^^

Oh my gosh I just realized what POV means! Woah..

That story sounds great! It's really late so I doubt I could help because I'm just not thinking properly.

[keyitt]

Yeah it took me a while to recognize what POV meant .

[Mercury.Muses]

Same! Also... WRITING BURST! These are rare. Any suggestions on this beauty I just typed up? It's based off of my wolf X photographer idea... Though I might change her name to Emma, and this is the prologue.
IDEA-
Photographer & Wild wolf pack - A woman from France heads to Canada to do photoshoots at a zoo, when she gets news of a wild wolf pack. The choice is hers, go back to France and apply for a job, or stay and hunt down the wild wolf pack.

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Lilly sat on the porch, swinging softly on an old wooden bench. Dressed in a somewhat too big, thick green sweater and faded jeans with high, soft tan boots on. She snuggled up her warm coffee to her chest and green coloured sleeve ends. Tipping the cup slightly, she let the warm liquid roll down her throat as a sigh released from her lungs. Contently, Lilly was fine, but her mind was anything than relaxed. She looked out towards a field of white snow, eyes darting to her camera, pine trees glistening with the white crystal dust. Should she...get..a...picture...? Mmm... Mocha caramel... after the coffee... Shutting her blue eyes, Lilly's pale pink lips pulled into a slight smile. Such a peaceful morning. After what seemed like an eternal life time and back, the woman opened her eyes again, slowing herself down and standing, setting the white coffee cup down on a round, wooden table. Her pale fingertips slid from the sleeves as she walked around the table, letting them slide loosely along the rim. Her brunette coloured hair fell over her shoulders as she crouched down and sat down in a weaved chair. "Hmm?" She said, putting on a pair of glasses and pulling them down to look at a newspaper than sat in front of the french woman. "Gin said the wild wolves were seen not too long ago.. By a little old woman on her porch." She whispered, softly in an accent. She whipped her head around, back towards those blank hills, and swore she'd seen a wolf standing there. Now you see, Lilly had been looking for this wolf pack, and missed her plane home. A whiff of the news hit her on her last day in Canada, she'd hesitated on snagging the offer of her friend Gin's cabin up in the woods. But how could she pass up a chance to see wild wolves and get pictures of them? The wolves at the zoo were far less interesting, so tamed, so dull, so sad.

[VesVes]

@Silverhart: Yeah, I think I agree. I think I'll start with the kingdom and then have her go on the journey, then figure out the nuances. But thanks for the help! It was really appreciated. C:

@everyone else: It took me a while to figure out what POV meant as well. But once I did, I started using the term everywhere. XD

As for the wolf story, it looks interesting! I'll give it a read.

[avaria]

@Vesta
welcome! c:

[Meroei]

Saddest death you've ever read, guys?

Sorry if I'm a little late to answer this.....
Has anybody read My Sister's Keeper? I'm not gonna say the death, since it's a GIGANTIC spoiler, but if you've read the book than you know what I mean.

When I first figured out what POV meant, I felt so stupid

[TheSongOfTheStars]

Grr... I babysat for 7hrs yesterday then I went to chrch for 5 hrs to do some kind of game stuff. What really ticks me off is that my mom lets me go babysit but I can't stay at home alone.
Saddest deaths? Always the sweet animal freind. If its a movie its sad if they make dramatic enough and all the other chacators are sad