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[Iselka]

I need input on this short story.

There is hope when time is here. But the time has come for us to regain ourselves to stand up and fight for our people and our beliefs. We are strong yes, but the time has come for this government to find out we're not their slaves. This is the year 3023 and we will take this planet back and unite the three races (Ra'am'n, Elfiin, and Human) once and for all.

[luxray;]

I need input on this short story.

There is hope when time is here. But the time has come for us to regain ourselves to stand up and fight for our people and our beliefs. We are strong yes, but the time has come for this government to find out we're not their slaves. This is the year 3023 and we will take this planet back and unite the three races (Ra'am'n, Elfiin, and Human) once and for all.

I like it, but wouldn't critique it, since one of the race names is very close to ramen xD

[Iselka]

I actually forgot the real name so I used that.

[scoopyfrog]

A quick question for you guys; Is it difficult for you to come up with names for characters?
I always have such a hard time because I know a lot of people, and do my best not to use their names...

It's never been hard for me to invent names for things, even when I was a child. In the book I'm working on now I invented names such as Melkwyn, Sanai, Amdiron, Sameese, Enda, and Iphael. I also used names I got from generators, like Kairener, Cyllessil, and Glawel. I also used normal names, however, like Peter, Rose, Eden, and Dane. Names can come from anywhere--sometimes I have to get to know a character better before I know their name, and sometimes I know their name before I even know what they look like.

[Greenleaf]

A quick question for you guys; Is it difficult for you to come up with names for characters?
I always have such a hard time because I know a lot of people, and do my best not to use their names...

It depends at times. Sometimes I just take the general idea of the story I'm writing and translate it into a name; for example, a story that I sadly abandoned some time ago was called "Grasping Freedom" and the main character's name was Lysandra, or 'freedom' in Greek or something.

Sometimes I base my names off various fandoms, roleplays, or my own imagination. One of my best loved character's name is based off my own CS initials, 'CLG'. x3

[Rolly-chan]

I need input on this short story.

There is hope when time is here. But the time has come for us to regain ourselves to stand up and fight for our people and our beliefs. We are strong yes, but the time has come for this government to find out we're not their slaves. This is the year 3023 and we will take this planet back and unite the three races (Ra'am'n, Elfiin, and Human) once and for all.

Not really sure what kind of input you want, but here's a little on this quoted story introduction:

I think it would be more appealing if you named your protagonist(s) instead of the all-encompassing "we". "We" could be so many people, and frankly, if it's about masses, readers won't care. They care about individual fates, about individual tragedies. Yeah, it's sad when hundreds or thousands die or are homeless or suffer from diseases. But those problems are so far away, so abstract, that almost anyone would be like "yeah, sad. So, what's for dinner?" They'd brush it off.
But once you get the problems in your readers' faces, by showing them - hey, look here, this is Fatima, a young, four-year-old girl. She only gets a meagre meal once a day because her father died and her mother is poor and sick and can't pay for all her needs because Nigeria's healthcare is undermined by corruption. Fatima's older brother Samuel is her primary caregiver because her mother is working all day. So is he, but he can take little Fatima with him and look after her while he farms tobacco. He is aware that they can't go on like this forever, and he would do anything to provide a better future for Fatima, like being able to go to school. If you rub that under your readers' noses, it will catch their attention a million times better.
Those individual stories are what gets under the readers' skins.

Other than that, there's a good conflict (uniting the as-of-yet divided races), the setting is clear (in the future) and the type of story partly as well (dystopian, could be a bit of fantasy/sci-fi). So overall a great basis for a story ^^

[a sky full of stars]

A quick question for you guys; Is it difficult for you to come up with names for characters?
I always have such a hard time because I know a lot of people, and do my best not to use their names...

Yes definetly, but I've been lucky this time and my protagonist and her accomplices all have first names, my main character even has a full name which is big for me XD

[Solar Flare]

A quick question for you guys; Is it difficult for you to come up with names for characters?
I always have such a hard time because I know a lot of people, and do my best not to use their names...

http://www.behindthename.com/

I *almost* never have trouble with names with this site. I love it, and use it all the time. It's a fantastic resource. You can look names up by country, by origin, by meaning, by use. It's brilliant!

Oh. My. Gosh. I am definitely going to use this! Thank you! :3

Does anyone else just get random inspirations for writing? Like BAM there it is?

I think that that is the only way I've come up with stories. Aside from a fan fiction. As for encouragement to write, I've had many friends who wrote in notebooks all the time, which inspired me to write more often. :3

[Crystal Gems]

Alright, so I decided to post the short stories I write for inspiration onto a thread on CS. I'd like people to look over my first story, The Suburban Battlefield.

Inspiration Short Stories

[Solar Flare]

Alright, so I decided to post the short stories I write for inspiration onto a thread on CS. I'd like people to look over my first story, The Suburban Battlefield.

Inspiration Short Stories

Great writing! Though I do have a question; Was the title (Suspense) supposed to inflict that emotion on the reader? Or is it to inspire suspense? I'm not sure I really understand the title, and perhaps I'm over-thinking it... And why did you write about the death of a baby? What inspired you to write that? I'm just curious, is all- I'm not accusing you of anything. Just, simply curious. Still, the writing was good! :3