Losing To Yourself

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Losing To Yourself

Postby Sevon » Fri Jan 04, 2013 10:29 am

I have a weak core

I always feel the need for more

girls look and think they're fat

I could almost wish for that

**** you, mirror, you don't lie

you make both genders want to cry

a creation of ourselves

brings out all our inner hell

why did humans make this thing?

it makes us hurt, makes us grieve

it hurts me and it hurts you

it hurts all the others too

we cant run from ourselves

trapping ourselves in our own hell

accepting is wrong, though not hurts us too

oh, we all wish we could just get through

but when is perfect? when is enough?

soon addicted, we will become far too tough

tough against the outer world

the world we once greatly beheld

because many others think this way

and judge sometimes by our looks still today

we can never be free

jailed by who else but you and me?

don’t know where i was going with this, but meh. here's just another little ramble. yes, this is the original version. only edited one line. will be revising soon and making a final version shortly.

let me know what you think via post please. :)
Last edited by Sevon on Thu Jul 25, 2013 10:07 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Losing To Yourself

Postby G1 Sunstreaker » Fri Jan 04, 2013 10:30 am

Looks cool. I like the way you wrote it--simple, but effective, and not too long or short. :]
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Re: Losing To Yourself

Postby Sevon » Fri Jan 04, 2013 10:31 am

thanks :3
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Re: Losing To Yourself

Postby Sevon » Sat Jan 05, 2013 9:32 am

*bump*
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Re: Losing To Yourself

Postby randompersonH2O » Sun Jan 27, 2013 2:28 am

I like it! It was really easy to relate to.
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Re: Losing To Yourself

Postby Sevon » Thu Jul 25, 2013 10:09 am

haha thanks ^^


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