{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } A Thread For Writers

[skrundle]

I have noticed that several of you often get this mixed up: the apostophe ( ' ) in the words "It's and "Its."
The words "It's" is not a possesive pronoun, though commonly mistaken. Possesive pronouns are words such as "John's" and "The President's." it shows ownership of a noun, and sometimes verbs ( Verbs as in "John's jumping" or "John's running" ).
The word "It's" should only be used in circumstances when you are trying to make a conjuction, or combining the words "It" and "Is." Combine the two and you get "It's."
The word "Its" can be used possesively, as in "The car and its motor." It would not work, though, in the sentence "Its alright."
You all see where I'm going with this, right? xD

[O.G.]

Woohoo, thank you. ^^
Comment there. Or here. Either's fine.

No problem. I enjoyed the read. =)
Oh, and it's probably obvious to you, but I posted on your threat instead of here. xD.

ah, okay. thanks. hm, I tried to integrate it a little more. I got a different critique saying that I should try and mention the shower earlier so that the entire interview doesn't seem as random as it is. anyways, I edited it a little, so hopefully it's a little better...?
oh, woops. I meant for none of them to be italicized. XD thanks for pointing that out. I didn't notice that.
thanks for the critique! c:

Hm..I personally didn't think it seemed random, but I guess everyone has their own opinion. If you do intend on keeping that little paragraph, I suggest that you somehow incorperate the fact that her brother was murdered while she was in the shower just briefly. That way It might not seem so..random. I don't know. Maybe I should have looked at your edited version before I wrote this. Oh well. I'll just do that right now. xD.
Oh, and, no problem. =)

EDIT: Yep, yep, yep. The new version is much better. xD. The fouth paragraph doesn't seem so random anyomre. So, I think your covered. Hopefully another person will drop by and maybe help you out with something I missed if there is anything else.

[Cherry]

Were you talking about me, Symmetry? If you were, I just want to point out that my autocorrect changes my writing sometimes.
Anytime I want to say its, it changes to it's.
Same for were.
Well, I'm off to write.
Unfortunately my glasses are killing me.

[Roonil Wazlib]

Hello! I'm writing a story (for fun) about a werewolf- not the Twilight kind. It's sort of like Beauty and the Beast...without the love story. Anyways, I'd like some critique for the introduction :3 Thanks!
© Me, do not steal!

Everyone was still scared to call it by its real name, even though it had happened years ago. People just called it “The Place.” Everyone knew what had happened, and no one talked about it. It was a topic that brought up the ghosts of the past.
Years ago, The Place had been a dark and dangerous forest. The brambles that blocked the path were too tightly woven together that the strongest woodsman couldn’t get more than three feet into in. No one knew what was within it, and no one wanted to know. Deep inside, there was a ferocious beast locked inside the ruins of a castle. The creatures of the forest avoided its fortress.
Every full moon, the villagers heard its dreadful howl pierce the silent night air. They would hug their children tight and say it was only the wolves. No one went outside on a full moon. Who could blame them? They didn’t know what it was. One summer, a rich gentleman decided to come and build a cottage for himself in the village. He was also going to choose one lucky child from the orphanage to adopt.

I already sort of have a plot planned out, but not exactly. It takes place in the middle ages, in a small village.

[Cosmic~Wallaby]

I went back to the beginning and wrote a very short intro to my Wasteland novel, because I felt there was no easy way to explain what happened exactly from the characters point of view, considering how they weren't alive when it began. Could somebody please look over this for me and give me some critique? Thanks.

They were warned. Every human, all of them. Some tried to stop it early. They rode bikes. They planted a few more trees. It was nowhere near enough. By the time it began, it was far too late. The sea swallowed entire cities in less than a few weeks. Valleys flooded, thousands drowned, whilst on the other side of the world, millions died of dehydration in great droughts that never ended. The plants began to die at horrific rates, and disease spread like wildfire. First countries turned on each other, then cities. Wars began over food, water, till finally, desperate, hungry and still so foolish, the human race disappeared entirely, dragging down with it millions of creatures.
Few survived. Only the most intelligent, adaptable and mutated creatures were able to live, and as time passes even they struggle. The world is poisonous. Hope is nothing but a sweet memory, and as it continues, less and less can survive in this...

Uh, the end is a bit strange looking, it runs straight into the first word, and title, Wasteland. So it basically goes-

Hope is nothing but a sweet memory, and as it continues, less and less can survive in this...
Wasteland. Of all the words Nuclear could think of to describe the scenery, the best he had settled on was wasteland

[ShadowsCryInTheNight]

Hi! I was wondering and hoping that a few people could read and comment/critique on two of my stories? Thanks!
˩ɛιℓαиι~Ɯακιиɢ Ɖяɛαм<<Preferably needing critique on this one
|Ѵαℓɛ σғ Ƨнα∂σωƨ|<<Not much here, but I'd like some opinions on it before I get too deep.

[Smamm]

Does anyone think that a story told in the point of view of a schizophrenic would be interesting? I'm not talking where the person knows they have it, but more or less where they are unaware. I was thinking maybe even the reader may not know either, and instead they would have to infer it; or it would be revealed at the end of the novel.

Here's a bunch of gibberish; brainstorming...

The main character would have their own world, and then our world. They would cross over often, and I was thinking the characters hallucinations and delusions would be more on the morbid end of things (demonic, horrific, and etc). I thought it may be cool to give this imaginary world some ties to popular beliefs. Those that believe in demons and all that tend to believe in hell. Maybe this other world could be a part of that, for example. I was thinking maybe there is a realistic part to the characters world, and that some things may be fake, while other things may be real. Maybe he/she see's demons, and they attack from time to time; but other times the things they see aren't real.

Does that sound interesting at all? Or just... weird? xD

I'd prefer if no one take this idea and go make a story or anything based off it... It would sort of ruin things for me...

[abandoned.]

Does anyone think that a story told in the point of view of a schizophrenic would be interesting? I'm not talking where the person knows they have it, but more or less where they are unaware. I was thinking maybe even the reader may not know either, and instead they would have to infer it; or it would be revealed at the end of the novel.

Here's a bunch of gibberish; brainstorming...

The main character would have their own world, and then our world. They would cross over often, and I was thinking the characters hallucinations and delusions would be more on the morbid end of things (demonic, horrific, and etc). I thought it may be cool to give this imaginary world some ties to popular beliefs. Those that believe in demons and all that tend to believe in hell. Maybe this other world could be a part of that, for example. I was thinking maybe there is a realistic part to the characters world, and that some things may be fake, while other things may be real. Maybe he/she see's demons, and they attack from time to time; but other times the things they see aren't real.

Does that sound interesting at all? Or just... weird? xD

I'd prefer if no one take this idea and go make a story or anything based off it... It would sort of ruin things for me...

sounds interesting, smammeh. you should definitely make a story/book out of this...
once you finish Lost :T

[Cherry]

My Mom told me one of my friends (who is extremely paranoid about someone stealing her story idea) sent her Dad an e-mail with some of her story in it.
And she said to him [in the e-mail] Don't show anyone it, don't talk about it, don't let anyone read it.

I don't care if someone steals my story (though I'd mind my if they took my MC, though.) because its a fanfic.
I thought she was a little over the top about it.
She tells me I can't tell anyone about it and freaks when I accidentally rub her writing. (It's in pencil, but still!)

[Smamm]

Does anyone think that a story told in the point of view of a schizophrenic would be interesting? I'm not talking where the person knows they have it, but more or less where they are unaware. I was thinking maybe even the reader may not know either, and instead they would have to infer it; or it would be revealed at the end of the novel.

Here's a bunch of gibberish; brainstorming...

The main character would have their own world, and then our world. They would cross over often, and I was thinking the characters hallucinations and delusions would be more on the morbid end of things (demonic, horrific, and etc). I thought it may be cool to give this imaginary world some ties to popular beliefs. Those that believe in demons and all that tend to believe in hell. Maybe this other world could be a part of that, for example. I was thinking maybe there is a realistic part to the characters world, and that some things may be fake, while other things may be real. Maybe he/she see's demons, and they attack from time to time; but other times the things they see aren't real.

Does that sound interesting at all? Or just... weird? xD

I'd prefer if no one take this idea and go make a story or anything based off it... It would sort of ruin things for me...

sounds interesting, smammeh. you should definitely make a story/book out of this...
once you finish Lost :T

Thanks! ^^ Yes, yes... I need to get working on that... I just have no time right now. ;n;