{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } A Thread For Writers

[thumper ;;]

Username:

ЄpicǪueen

What we will call you:

I don't know. You can call me....Queenie

Will you critique other's work?:

Sure!

Links to your story if you have any:
Yes.

Anything you want us to know?:
None that I know.

[team free kick sass]

-wants to accept badly-
XD

[Pangolin]

I just got my glasses, and I can now see! : D

[Silverhart]

I read your pirate story. Cherry-girl and I really liked it! I don't know if you're looking some serious critique or not. I have some suggestions, but I overall I think it's really good. You have some nice descriptions, and I like the bit about her mother being a dancer. I thought that was a really great detail to add, and there were some other great little details and descriptions. I noticed you switched between past tense and present tense a lot, so I'd suggest going through the story and making everything the same tense. My other suggestion would be to just think about structuring your sentences differently so it's not all 'he said this, she did that'. Make your sentences more interesting. It's not always easy, but just keep it in mind when you write, and try to think of other ways to write a sentence. I think it's great though, the story is really good so far.

[eden .]

Username:

ЄpicǪueen

What we will call you:

I don't know. You can call me....Queenie

Will you critique other's work?:

Sure!

Links to your story if you have any:
Yes.

Anything you want us to know?:
None that I know.

accepted~

[Cherry]

Thanks Silver. I'll have to do that.
I write a present tense story normally, so sometimes I still have that thinking.

[skrundle]

*Stalking thread*
Haha, this is so off-topic, but I wanted to share it.
After reading the first part of Obscure's new story A Dog Called Tess, I had an epiphany. I wasn't using enought detailed words! (If you read it, you'd know what I mean xD) So, when I was out sick, I spent the day reading a Webster's dictionary.
*Like a boss*

[Umbrellas]

Username: TwistedQueen
What we will call you: Queen, please ^^
Will you critique other's work?: Yes, I would be happy to.
Links to your story if you have any: Not so far.
Anything you want us to know?: Just that I love writing and I'm quite excited to meet everyone! So yay! ^^

[eden .]

Username: TwistedQueen
What we will call you: Queen, please ^^
Will you critique other's work?: Yes, I would be happy to.
Links to your story if you have any: Not so far.
Anything you want us to know?: Just that I love writing and I'm quite excited to meet everyone! So yay! ^^

accepted~

[Cherry]

Tomorrow I'm starting the One Year Adventure Novel curriculum.
We're going to watch the DVD's at my friends house (it costs 200 dollars!) and there's going to be another girl there.
I have an idea for a story, but if she reads it (and she probably will) I'll be a little embarrassed. Grr why?