{ INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

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What grabs your attention on a book cover?

I usually look for people on book covers - I like the personal note of them.
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I like simple covers, with colors or an easy background.
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I love book covers that have one object on them.
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I could really care less.
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Something different - out of the ordinary.
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I love books that look shiny!
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So long as the inside description is good, I really couldn't care about the cover.
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#Idkwhatsgoingonhere
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby crescent + cheep » Sat Sep 08, 2012 12:37 pm

Artesian wrote:And speaking of intros, what do y'all think of this one?

Click!

My senses were instantly on full alert. Click was never a good sound to hear when you're infiltrating a mad-scientist's lair. Click was the sound preceding swinging blades, disappearing floorboards or giant mousetraps setting in preparation for your unwary foot. I swallowed and drew my gun cautiously, scanning about me for the slightest hint of something odd.

Well, odd for a mad-scientist's lair. I've seen a few, you know, and they tend to fall into two categories: disorganized messes, and obsessive neatness. The disorganized messes usually have more accidental traps (rickety shelving units, paper avalanches, beakers of 'lemonade') than intentional ones. The obsessively neat lairs are simplistic to the point of creepiness. Some mad-scientists organize screws, and file everything in cabinets. They tend to have traps which, if you can spot the minute signs, are easy to avoid. The messes are far worse.

This one was a mess. It contained far too many things that whispered their pleas to be touched. Shiny bits of oddly gleaming metal. Large red buttons. Bits of wire vibrating in a glass box. Electrical arcs. To me, there are few things more beguiling than switches and buttons and pretty blinky lights.

Other heroes talk about this. They call it the Curious Cat syndrome. (Actually, they don't call it that. Heroes tend not to use grandiloquent words. They say things like, “I need to watch my language, don't touch that! What are you, mad?”) I've got the Curious Cat worse than most. Everyone says I should have been an engineer instead of a hero, but I was never one for regular nine-to-five jobs. Heroes work by the contract, and are paid by the job. Of course, it's almost impossible to get life insurance.


That sounds good (:
Really, makes me want to know more.
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby skrundle » Sat Sep 08, 2012 12:49 pm

Anyone up for critiquing mine?
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby Artesian » Sat Sep 08, 2012 12:54 pm

Fanged: Thanks! ^.^

Symmetry: Sure. :)
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby haadez_ » Sat Sep 08, 2012 1:00 pm

Mousewhisker <3 wrote:
I'm not sure what to write next for This. I was thinking that they should go somewhere, as a hide-out, and they could make it into a torture chamber, and hold people there, slowly killing them, but I don't know.. suggestions?
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby Moonchaser » Sat Sep 08, 2012 1:04 pm

Mousewhisker <3 wrote:
I'm not sure what to write next for This. I was thinking that they should go somewhere, as a hide-out, and they could make it into a torture chamber, and hold people there, slowly killing them, but I don't know.. suggestions?



Torture chamber sounds good...they're always fun. Maybe they get too comfortable there and get a little sloppy and somehow their prey gets away...all of a sudden they have to up and leave, trying not to leave too much evidence behind...or else they could use the hide out to only store the prey, leave them there a few days and come back at their leisure to do what they like, always taking their tools with them when they leave, so if the person is found; there's no way it will be traced back to them. I'd never use my own kill-room as a sanctuary. It should always be treated as it is; a crime scene. Any evidence left behind will be found. It isn't a place to relax. It's a place to work.
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby crescent + cheep » Sat Sep 08, 2012 1:05 pm

*~S y m m e t r y~* wrote:
Anyone up for critiquing mine?

I will, but its one in the morning and I'm not thinking straight ^^
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby obscure. » Sat Sep 08, 2012 9:00 pm

    Thanks for all the feedback regarding my most recent post (: I shall take note of your suggestions and ideas.

    @Cherry-girl11; Thank you, I do too, too much! xD Every story I write has some sort of an animal in it xD

    @Mystra; Ahh, you've given me some ideas how Tess' papers can be obtained xD Perhaps Arianna is asked to tell the class about her dog when she brings in her medals from the agility competitions, and she creates a heartfelt speech about how she found Tess, about her bullying and the death of Onyx, and how both Arianna and Tess helped heal each other. She could tell them about the puppy mills in the area where she knew from the pound Tess had come from because of the details on her collar (the pound isn't very reputable so it does nothing to halt the suffering there). The teachers could be appalled at Tess' history, and start a petition to end the puppy mills in the area. The pound would also get their fair share of trouble too. As I said, I'm not sure, this story is still in the early stages. xD
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby Cherry » Sun Sep 09, 2012 3:12 am

That sounds good. *wishes I could pull a detailed plot from thin air*
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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby SnowStar » Sun Sep 09, 2012 3:20 am

Blarg, due to my computer acting like a butt my first chapter on The Drafted is taking extra long.
In this chapter I was to introduce Caffeine, my oc and kinda the main canine character into the story.

I was thinking about giving her a few brothers to spice it up (even if it's just for a short time), but what do you think? Have her as a lone pup of the litter, or let the litter be larger? Asking this because the one thing I really, really stink at is coming up with designs and names for characters. Help is kinda needed with this, and maybe ideas for spicing up bits of the story as well. =/
So full of hate were our eyes
That none of us could see
Our war would yield countless dead
But never victory
So let us cast arms aside
And like discard our wrath
Thou, in faith, will keep us safe
Whilst we find the path

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Re: { INKLINGS } A Thread For Writers

Postby mamba » Sun Sep 09, 2012 8:31 am

Can I get some crit?
The pain in your eyes,
the creepy little side,
the way you reside,
the blatant pride.

red and bright,
glowing in the night,
filling us with fright,
the darkest kind of light.

satan is in you,
its obvious too,
suffocation turns you blue,
evil take over- woo!

This sh*t is crazy,
not even lazy,
vision's gettin hazy,
you ain't gonna phase me.

demons rest around,
stand up- hit the ground,
give your chest a mighty pound,
let's get rid of this dark mound.
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