Fanged wrote:I need some advice, please.
Sometimes, when writing, I write too many thoughts, as in the character calculating how the other person will react and that. Any idea how to avoid that?
Advice: Don't. A page of gobbley-gook is worth ten times as much as one concise paragraph. Don't ever tell yourself to do less. Go off on every tangent and idea you have. Explore every path because you can always cut it and back track. But if you try to find that one idea or sentence again you'll never find. So always write as much as you want. You can fix it in editing.
-Simple Sparrow-, I think you need to write more, not less, no matter what your teacher says. There is nothing you can gain from writing less. Imagine if J.K. Rowling had decided to write less!
Maybe your stories have a few too many details, or too many things happening at once that make it jumbled, or it just needs better organization, but those can be fixed in editing. And the only way you're going to get better is if you write and edit more. Even if it is just rambling. Just write all your ideas down and edit out the unimportant parts, and fix up the rambling bits. And Fanfed, since you say your story is too thought-heavy consider having stuff happening while the person is thinking. Even if it's just getting a glass of water. It might help the action better. Instead of writing out the actual thought as in, "Wow that was really funny, Joe thought." you might try having them act out their thoughts: "Joe laughed at Tommy's joke." Or instead of "He felt hungry", you could write "His stomach growled". I'm sure your writing is a lot better then that, but I think you get my point. It's easy to forget using actions instead of words when you're writing a big complicated sequence.
