{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } A Thread For Writers

[ShadowsCryInTheNight]

Username: Ƨнα∂σωƨƆяʏƖиƬнɛИιɢнт
What we will call you: Shadows
Will you critique other's work?: I'd love to!
Links to your story if you have any: Leilani: Waking Dream
Anything you want us to know?: I'd love critique on my stories!

[mamba]

LKFJAL;SKJDF;L
no, kidding. I'll be happy to crit. ^^

They checked through all their books, selecting a certain tube from here, and a specific needle from there.

if you're going to use a comma between "certain tube" and "specific needle", then the sentence should be "certain tube from here, a specific needle from there". otherwise, take out the comma.

in general, it's much better than the first time around.
I'm still a bit clueless on the surroundings, and the bed kind of seems to grow out of the ground, but if that confusion and disorientation is what you're going for, then it's fine.

I noticed you used the word "tube" pretty often -- or at least often enough to think that you used it a lot. perhaps some variation would be nice?

Oh wow. 0.0 I didn't even notice.
I thought I fixed that first mistake. Whoops.

I thought with the description saying it looked like a hospital room, the general atmosphere would be established.

[eden .]

Username: Ƨнα∂σωƨƆяʏƖиƬнɛИιɢнт
What we will call you: Shadows or Shadzzie
Will you critique other's work?: I'd love to!
Links to your story if you have any: Leilani: Waking Dream
Anything you want us to know?: I'd love critique on my stories!

accepted

LKFJAL;SKJDF;L
no, kidding. I'll be happy to crit. ^^

They checked through all their books, selecting a certain tube from here, and a specific needle from there.

if you're going to use a comma between "certain tube" and "specific needle", then the sentence should be "certain tube from here, a specific needle from there". otherwise, take out the comma.

in general, it's much better than the first time around.
I'm still a bit clueless on the surroundings, and the bed kind of seems to grow out of the ground, but if that confusion and disorientation is what you're going for, then it's fine.

I noticed you used the word "tube" pretty often -- or at least often enough to think that you used it a lot. perhaps some variation would be nice?

Oh wow. 0.0 I didn't even notice.
I thought I fixed that first mistake. Whoops.

I thought with the description saying it looked like a hospital room, the general atmosphere would be established.

then clearly I missed that
CARRY ON

[abandoned.]

lol choey...i'm going to go read your story now...
no...i'm going to come up with my own first...
*headdesk* i need help though e.e

HOLD ON.

[The Only]

soooooo....hey guys ^^'' i don't post here often...and stuff...but yea....sorry about that? i feel terrible.

meh. i have this urge to write, but no ideas. /shootme

Free-write. really, I do that for ten minutes a day at the very least. I find it really fun to look at what i wrote the next day and draw inspiration from it.

Would anybody be willing to Critique my short Story? Here is the link to it: viewtopic.php?f=57&t=1326861

[abandoned.]

i'm not very good at free-writing xD sorry ^^'' i thought i replied to that
my free write is basically the rping i do here o-o which is always more than 10min...so i dunno if that counts? o-o

edit: oh my god...stories like that creep me out o-o but it was good, The Only ^^

[hell_hound]

I'm going to be taking a break from Chickensmoothie for a while.. I don't know for how long. Anywhere from a few days to a few months. I'm sorry. My story The Red Glove will be postponed till I return. I hope this isn't considered spamming, but I wanted to thank you all for making me smile on this thread of writers and readers x3. Thank you.

[Time.Child]

Username:
.Spoonful.Of.Sugar.
What we will call you:
Spoon / Sugar / Spoonful
Will you critique other's work?:
Indeed :3 Of course, only if they ask for it
Links to your story if you have any:
Currently I don't have any going. But I'd let you all know if i did
Anything you want us to know?:
I love to write stories for others, I recently realized how fun contests are

[eden .]

Username:
.Spoonful.Of.Sugar.
What we will call you:
Spoon / Sugar / Spoonful
Will you critique other's work?:
Indeed :3 Of course, only if they ask for it
Links to your story if you have any:
Currently I don't have any going. But I'd let you all know if i did
Anything you want us to know?:
I love to write stories for others, I recently realized how fun contests are

accepted ~
nyuuuuuuuuuu we'll miss you finch D:

[PaintLily]

Username: PaintLily
What we will call you: Pooky or Paint
Will you critique other's work?: sometimes
Links to your story if you have any: Most of my stories are Aren't shown on the internet or anything but I do have one Here on howrse and i'm making a roleplay like thing for a book that you can check out Here which is also on howrse
Anything you want us to know?: not really