{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } A Thread For Writers

[eden .]

LOL I edited in reaction to your edit.
/derp

omg well I'm glad that all went over well. .-.
/phew

what did you think about Nisha and Asher being related?
was that like
"wth is going on here"
or like
was it fine?

that was another plot thing I wasn't sure about. >>

I liked it. Cause she wasn't like born a vampire or anything so she was technically a supernatural/human person before she got turned, so I think it works :3

Also omg. Ch, you can't even believe how mad I am at you right now. Too mad. So mad that you right so well. SO WELL. I want to write like that. Someday I will ;U Someday..

oh, thank GOD
technically none of the vampires are born; they're raised by Dark Majick users [which are basically the necromancer sect in the witch coven ... more details on that later].

/DERPS AROUND
omg stop.
your writing is fine
.-.
alsdkjf;alkd
I'm not that great.
there are better writers on this thread than I!

[Dragon at heart]

Username:Dragon at heart
What we will call you: Dragon
Will you critique other's work?: Yes when I get the chance I will critique others work
Links to your story if you have any:nope not on here yet
Anything you want us to know?:I'm trying to write some books but am failing at the moment. My friend says I'm good at poetry. And I love to write. Wish I could go on a computer so I could write. I takes SOOO long to write long stuff on an iPod -_-

[eden .]

Username:Dragon at heart
What we will call you: Dragon
Will you critique other's work?: Yes when I get the chance I will critique others work
Links to your story if you have any:nope not on here yet
Anything you want us to know?:I'm trying to write some books but am failing at the moment. My friend says I'm good at poetry. And I love to write. Wish I could go on a computer so I could write. I takes SOOO long to write long stuff on an iPod -_-

accepted. welcome ~

[CyberneticVampire]

Could some one give me some crits on this please. And please note that this is from a role play.
Matryoshka yelped as the shadow king picked him up but his jacket collor and tossing him into a shelf inside the shop. He flinched as he tried to get up, blood flowed from his arms and head. Rage bubbled in his chest he shot up and slashed his Dagger at the king again, the shadow king screached in pain. "Your toast now!" Matryoshka said as he dug his Dagger into his chest. The king slowly faded away into nothingness, "you haven't seen the last of me boy!" it cried before it vanished. Matryoshka stood up and flinched his wounds stung, a black eagle like bird swooped down and sunk it's talons into his shoulder, "Ahhrrhh!" he cried blood flowed from his shoulders. The bird tossed him into the air and jammed it's beak into his stomach, he screamed as pain shot through him. He fell onto the ground, a loud thud echoed around the town. He laid there not moving.

[FourCrosses]

Matryoshka yelped as the shadow king picked him up by his jacket collar and tossed him onto a shelf inside the shop. He flinched as he tried to get up. Blood flowed from his arms and head. Rage bubbled in his chest he shot up and slashed his dagger at the king again, it screeched in pain. "You're toast now!" Matryoshka said as he dug his dagger into his chest. The king slowly faded away into nothingness, "You haven't seen the last of me boy!" it cried before it vanished. Matryoshka stood up and flinched - his wounds stung- but a black eagle-like bird swooped down and sunk it's talons into his shoulder. "Ahhrrhh!" he cried, blood flowed from his shoulders. The bird tossed him into the air and jammed it's beak into his stomach, he screamed as pain shot through him. He fell onto the ground, a loud thud echoed around the town. He lay there not moving.

Pretty good writing, but you should try to add more commas/dashes and split up your sentences. Nice work.

[mamba]

I just posted a super quick prologue. Crit please!

Revamped!

[Cosmic~Wallaby]

Urgh. Writing a good Sherlock fanfic is virtually impossible. Why did I choose too!?
I swear these red herrings are going to be the end of me.

[FourCrosses]

Who'd be interested in the latest chapter of my story?

(This is not my CS story Chasing the Sun- it's one I'm privately writing with hopes to make it into a book)

[Sila]

I just posted a super quick prologue. Crit please!

Revamped!

I like it! Extremely interested in what happens to her and what they did!

[Rolly-chan]

Guys, I found the link!
Completely forgot it was Jim Butcher, the Dresden Files author =)

Here it is! It's inspiring - at least to me. And he's got good advice up there.