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What should I call my story? HELP! PLEASE!

Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:03 pm

Hello people in Chicken Smoothie (CS) I decided to write a story, based on realistic Horse and Humans. One problem I need a name for it!

About my Story
•It is about a Girl called Melanie Parker (or Mel) who has been living at a Famous farm, in Australia. Her parents are dead and she lives with her Grandpa, They work with the Famous horses their and work for a Guy called Pete Hardy (or Mr. Hardy, or Pete to some people) He has been very nice to them, praising Melanie for working for his most prized mare, 'Whirlwind'. But Suddenly as she comes from the house they live in one day, She see's the mare laying, dead; in the paddock, no life signs at all. Her body lay normally and no bites were on her, It was as if she had just passed her time. The Vets came and dicovered that someone had perposely or accidently put 'Yew' A poisonous plant to horses in her Paddock, forcing her to eat it. Starving her beforehand so she would... The Owner of the Farm accused Melanie's Grandfather for doing this horrible thing to his most prized mare. The Police were called immediately, but suddenly Mel's Grandpa dropped, having a terrible stroke! The Ambulance came and took him to the hospital but Peter Hardy caught Mel by the Arm and gave her a stern and deadly look, Saying: "If anyone finds out about this, I will make sure that Your grandfather goes in the Most horrible Care-home!" In a outrage Mel grabs the nearest thing she could: A Hoofpick, She attacked Mr. Hardy with it in blinded hatred! Mr. Hardy accused Melanie now and she ended up being arrested and put in a Centre, while her Grandfather was given the best care possible for now. (I start my story of her In the Court...)


That is just a slight plot to the story, please feel free to ask me for any more information!

Heres what i have written so far:

It had been more then a month from what happened, they blamed me for it… Killing the Farms most prized horses, I sent a cold iron glare at the wooden floor as I sat on a wooden chair; in the Court room. Why did I even have to be here, I was innocent, and only Grandpa and myself knew it, and well.. One other, the Murderer…
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:07 pm

PLEASE HELP!
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:09 pm

PLEASE HELP!
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:13 pm

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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:16 pm

PLEASE HELP!

Next part i just added

It had been more then a month from what happened, they blamed me for it… Killing the Farms most prized horses, I sent a cold iron glare at the wooden floor as I sat on a wooden chair; in the Court room. Why did I even have to be here, I was innocent and only Grandpa and I knew it, and well… One other, the Murderer… I didn’t even notice the first call of my name, I just remained there untouched and thinking, suddenly I was given a rather hard tap on the shoulder and yelled at. “Get in there now!” A mans demanded, I leaped up to be given a rough and unkind look by many who were waiting in the next room, I sighed, remaining looking at the ground while I walked quickly to the front ‘Accusion’ Chair. A few rows of chairs back, I noticed my one supporter: Tommy Hardglan, I gave him a small smile and he did the same back. I sighed once again, a heavy and exhausted sigh. How would I get out of this, already the room was filled with the people who were Accusing me! At the front, practically next to me was Mr. Hardy, the real Murderer of his ‘Precious’ Horse.
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:22 pm

Can't anyone think of a name for this Story? :( It is hard though XD ...

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It had been more then a month from what happened, they blamed me for it… Killing the Farms most prized horses, I sent a cold iron glare at the wooden floor as I sat on a wooden chair; in the Court room. Why did I even have to be here, I was innocent and only Grandpa and I knew it, and well… One other, the Murderer… I didn’t even notice the first call of my name, I just remained there untouched and thinking, suddenly I was given a rather hard tap on the shoulder and yelled at. “Get in there now!” A mans demanded, I leaped up to be given a rough and unkind look by many who were waiting in the next room, I sighed, remaining looking at the ground while I walked quickly to the front ‘Accusion’ Chair. A few rows of chairs back, I noticed my one supporter: Tommy Hardglan, I gave him a small smile and he did the same back. I sighed once again, a heavy and exhausted sigh. How would I get out of this, already the room was filled with the people who were Accusing me! At the front, practically next to me was Mr. Hardy, the real Murderer of his ‘Precious’ Horse.
The Judged thumped down his hammer and everyone, and everything went quiet. I took in a deep breathe and closed my eyes, fluttering back to the horrid day of what Mr. Hardy did to Whirlwind and how Grandpa had the Stroke.. ‘If only he was here…’ I thought to myself quietly.
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:24 pm

PLEASE?!
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:28 pm

and my next part XD

It had been more then a month from what happened, they blamed me for it… Killing the Farms most prized horses, I sent a cold iron glare at the wooden floor as I sat on a wooden chair; in the Court room. Why did I even have to be here, I was innocent and only Grandpa and I knew it, and well… One other, the Murderer… I didn’t even notice the first call of my name, I just remained there untouched and thinking, suddenly I was given a rather hard tap on the shoulder and yelled at. “Get in there now!” A mans demanded, I leaped up to be given a rough and unkind look by many who were waiting in the next room, I sighed, remaining looking at the ground while I walked quickly to the front ‘Accusion’ Chair. A few rows of chairs back, I noticed my one supporter: Tommy Hardglan, I gave him a small smile and he did the same back. I sighed once again, a heavy and exhausted sigh. How would I get out of this, already the room was filled with the people who were Accusing me! At the front, practically next to me was Mr. Hardy, the real Murderer of his ‘Precious’ Horse.
The Judged thumped down his hammer and everyone, and everything went quiet. I took in a deep breathe and closed my eyes, fluttering back to the horrid day of what Mr. Hardy did to Whirlwind and how Grandpa had the Stroke.. ‘If only he was here…’ I thought to myself quietly.
“Miss Melanie Parker, Do you, have any supporting Threads to say about the Accusion that Mr. Hardy layed on you?” The Judge asked in a booming voice. My eyes snapped open in a few seconds and I blinked, the judge was obviously annoyed at what I was doing: “Well hurry up! Do you support your Case!?” He asks again. I just shake my head, Wanting to get up and strangle Mr. Hardy, who was smiling slyly!
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:34 pm

and another peice:

It had been more then a month from what happened, they blamed me for it… Killing the Farms most prized horses, I sent a cold iron glare at the wooden floor as I sat on a wooden chair; in the Court room. Why did I even have to be here, I was innocent and only Grandpa and I knew it, and well… One other, the Murderer… I didn’t even notice the first call of my name, I just remained there untouched and thinking, suddenly I was given a rather hard tap on the shoulder and yelled at. “Get in there now!” A mans demanded, I leaped up to be given a rough and unkind look by many who were waiting in the next room, I sighed, remaining looking at the ground while I walked quickly to the front ‘Accusion’ Chair. A few rows of chairs back, I noticed my one supporter: Tommy Hardglan, I gave him a small smile and he did the same back. I sighed once again, a heavy and exhausted sigh. How would I get out of this, already the room was filled with the people who were Accusing me! At the front, practically next to me was Mr. Hardy, the real Murderer of his ‘Precious’ Horse.
The Judged thumped down his hammer and everyone, and everything went quiet. I took in a deep breathe and closed my eyes, fluttering back to the horrid day of what Mr. Hardy did to Whirlwind and how Grandpa had the Stroke.. ‘If only he was here…’ I thought to myself quietly.
“Miss Melanie Parker, Do you, have any supporting Threads to say about the Accusion that Mr. Hardy layed on you?” The Judge asked in a booming voice. My eyes snapped open in a few seconds and I blinked, the judge was obviously annoyed at what I was doing: “Well hurry up! Do you support your Case!?” He asks again. I just shake my head, Wanting to get up and strangle Mr. Hardy, who was smiling slyly! I hoped to hear the Familiar voice of Tommy Hardglan, but I was disappointed; He never spoke… The Court case was finally over, But as everyone streamed out into the fresh air of the country, I was stuck here, waiting for my ‘Adoptive Carer’ To Pick me up, All I expected was a house though… Finally she Came, she looked nothing of what I thought she would, with a Kind and warming Smile, Nothing fake and flawless about her! She welcomed me as if I was her own daughter, but; I still didn’t trust her, even if she said I could tell her about anything, even the thing that happened the Day Whirlwind was ‘Murdered…’ I Shook my head and just waited to arrive at her house. I was gaping until the front gait, it was like a dream! She rescued any animal! Even horses and ponies! I was gaping and gasping in disbelief, wonder and admiration as She opened the front door and told me my room was up stairs! I quickly took my stuff and leaped up the stairs, looking in every place, if She was living here, she expected me to NOT snoop around; well, she would just have to watch me more!
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Postby ♥horselovesgirl♥ » Tue Apr 24, 2012 11:46 pm

and some more, please guys, i need a name! ...

It had been more then a month from what happened, they blamed me for it… Killing the Farms most prized horses, I sent a cold iron glare at the wooden floor as I sat on a wooden chair; in the Court room. Why did I even have to be here, I was innocent and only Grandpa and I knew it, and well… One other, the Murderer… I didn’t even notice the first call of my name, I just remained there untouched and thinking, suddenly I was given a rather hard tap on the shoulder and yelled at. “Get in there now!” A mans demanded, I leaped up to be given a rough and unkind look by many who were waiting in the next room, I sighed, remaining looking at the ground while I walked quickly to the front ‘Accusion’ Chair. A few rows of chairs back, I noticed my one supporter: Tommy Hardglan, I gave him a small smile and he did the same back. I sighed once again, a heavy and exhausted sigh. How would I get out of this, already the room was filled with the people who were Accusing me! At the front, practically next to me was Mr. Hardy, the real Murderer of his ‘Precious’ Horse.
The Judged thumped down his hammer and everyone, and everything went quiet. I took in a deep breathe and closed my eyes, fluttering back to the horrid day of what Mr. Hardy did to Whirlwind and how Grandpa had the Stroke.. ‘If only he was here…’ I thought to myself quietly.
“Miss Melanie Parker, Do you, have any supporting Threads to say about the Accusion that Mr. Hardy layed on you?” The Judge asked in a booming voice. My eyes snapped open in a few seconds and I blinked, the judge was obviously annoyed at what I was doing: “Well hurry up! Do you support your Case!?” He asks again. I just shake my head, Wanting to get up and strangle Mr. Hardy, who was smiling slyly! I hoped to hear the Familiar voice of Tommy Hardglan, but I was disappointed; He never spoke… The Court case was finally over, But as everyone streamed out into the fresh air of the country, I was stuck here, waiting for my ‘Adoptive Carer’ To Pick me up, All I expected was a house though…

Finally she Came, she looked nothing of what I thought she would, with a Kind and warming Smile, Nothing fake and flawless about her! She welcomed me as if I was her own daughter, but; I still didn’t trust her, even if she said I could tell her about anything, even the thing that happened the Day Whirlwind was ‘Murdered…’ I Shook my head and just waited to arrive at her house. I was gaping until the front gait, it was like a dream! She rescued any animal! Even horses and ponies! I was gaping and gasping in disbelief, wonder and admiration as She opened the front door and told me my room was up stairs! I quickly took my stuff and leaped up the stairs, looking in every place, if She was living here, she expected me to NOT snoop around; well, she would just have to watch me more! I settled in pretty quickly and my Carer came in the room to introduce herself, She said her name was Miss. Jennifer Lake, but that I should just call her Jenny. Well! At least I didn’t have to call her mom! I only nodded, but I had a bad feeling about this, what if she was with Mr. Hardy! I gasped and scribbled her name down quickly, so I could remember it, Who knows; how long I was going to stay here.

A few days after I was at the farm, I discovered I wasn’t the only one who was here, There was two others, a girl about my age and a boy, a few years older. Jenny invited them over, but the girl; who’s name is Jasmine Becker said she was too busy to meet ‘The new girl’ as she called me. Really, I didn’t care, But at least I got to meet the boy! His name was Chase Anderson, he knew about what happened, but didn’t exactly ‘trust’ me. He told me to just watch my step around here and even called me a City girl when I started watching a show based in the City! So what! I knew I wouldn’t be able to be friends with such rude people!
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