Alone In The Dark...

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Alone In The Dark...

Postby porksugar » Fri Apr 20, 2012 10:45 am

Darkness surrounds,and you wanna fall down
No one is there for you,you're alone
Alone in the dark,you feel so afraid
Like your life has been taken away
Heart is broken,time to give in...



ALONE IN THE DARK... ♥
Last edited by porksugar on Fri Apr 20, 2012 1:20 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Alone In The Dark...

Postby Annie! » Fri Apr 20, 2012 11:13 am

OMG! I love it! Very nice scripture. I hope you're planning on writing another!
Sometimes life gets bad and you need a friend to be there for you. And then you realize you have none.
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Re: Alone In The Dark...

Postby elie53 » Fri Apr 20, 2012 11:13 am

I like it ^_^ It's really good :D

Oh! I just noticed that you put "your alone"... I think it should be "you're" :3
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Re: Alone In The Dark...

Postby porksugar » Fri Apr 20, 2012 1:24 pm

Thank you! And I might right another one!

And,thanks for that!I changed it! :mrgreen:
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