~Pawprints on the Shore~ Edited!!

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Hi, CS users! It's me ~LifeBackwards~! I am writing a story about otters, I hope you like it and I am open to creative criticism!

Allegiances
AmazonRomp- Giant River Otters
Tumbleclaw- male (leader)

Barktail- male (officer)

Jadefur- female (guard)

Onyxriver- female (hunter)

Bushpelt- male (guard)

Autumnmist- female (fighter)

Whirlpuddle- male (fighter)

Mates:
Mudbark- male (guard) ~ Asmryenth- female (hunter)

Whelplings:
Fishsplash- female ( Asmryenth's pup)

Grassyip- female (Asmryenth's pup)

Creekripple- female (Asmryenth's pup)

Moonglow- male (Asmryenth's pup)

Elders:
Kelpeye- male (retired guard)

Healer:
Limberstone- female (-healer)

CreekRomp- North River Otters
Minnowtail- female (leader)

Leafwhisper- male (officer)

Poolwhisper- female ( hunter)

Chirppaws- male (hunter)

Troutrumble- male (guard)

Brownpebble- female (guard)

Woodflower- female (fighter)

Mates:
Sapclaws- male (fighter)~ Mapleleaves- female (guard)

Whelplings:
(None)

Elders:
Lichenbark- female (retired fighter)

Healer:
Ivyfisher- male (healer)

Here is the prolouge!!

Prologue
"Come on Asmryenth, just one more push.” said a pretty light-brown otter to a dark-brown otter who was panting hard.
Asmryenth, the dark-brown otter body’s convulsed. She yowled in pain; the smell of blood filled the air. A small whelp slipped out, the light-brown otter quickly bent down and broke the sac. The whelp began wailing immediately, the light-brown otter pushed it toward Asmryenth's belly and it began to suckle. Asmryenth sighed "Thank you Limber stone.” she said softly.
Limber stone smiled "congrats Asmryenth, you have three females and one male” she replied. Asmryenth smiled at her pups lovingly.
“What are you going to name them?”asked Limber stone.
“I know.” Replied a deep voice, Asmryenth looked up to see her mate Mud bark; she nuzzled him as he bent to lick her cheek affectionately. She smiled as she remembered when she was younger and he had confessed his love for her. It had surprised her because Mud bark wasn’t the affectionate type, she had been as happy as she was now.
“What should we name them?”she asked him softly. “For the three females, Grass yip, Fish splash, and Creek ripple. For the male, Moon glow.” he replied to his mate.
"Let's welcome them into the romp.” said Asmryenth exhausted, she nuzzled her mate and lay her head down and drifted asleep with her pups, a smile on her face…..






Part one:

Barks and growls could be heard in a clearing of a rain forest. This part of the rain forest belonged to a romp of giant river otters.
“Come on Fish splash!” squealed a light-brown kit otter. Fish splash, another young kit otter struggled to catch up with the other otter.
“Wait up Moon glow!” she barked, she stopped and tried to catch her breath and waited for him. Moon glow sighed and rolled his eyes but stopped. Fish splash finally caught up to him, she glared at him angrily.
“I’m telling mother you were going to leave me!” she growled angrily. If you looked closely you could tell they were almost the same size and were similar in a way that would make you guess their littermates. But the difference is that Moon glow was more muscular, and broad, whereas Fish splash was sleek-furred, and slender. Moon glow glared at Fish splash and bared his teeth.
“It’s not my fault you’re too small and too slow to catch up to me.” he said harshly. Fish splash snarled and almost attacked her littermate but was interrupted by a bark. She looked up at froze, Asmryenth, their mother, was standing in front of them and she didn’t look very happy. Moon glow lowered his ears.
“So… Tumble claws tell me you guys have been disturbing the whole romp with your pointless arguing.” She hissed angrily. Moon glow and Fish splash crouched, lowering their heads in shame.
“We’re sorry mother.” murmured Moon glow. Wimp. thought Fish splash angrily.
“But mother…..” she was interrupted by her mother’s snarling.
“Silence, Fish splash!” Fish splash flinched and looked down. A loud hiss caused them to jump, Asmryenth whirled around and screeched when she saw the huge, hungry-looking crocodile staring at them. The crocodile lunged, snapping its jaws at Asmryenth. It nearly missed her, Asmryenth snarled and swiped her claws at the crocs sensitive muzzle causing it to hiss in pain. The croc swung his head into Asmryenth’s side making her fly backwards in front of her pups. They squealed and nudged their mother, Asmryenth jumped up and growled threatingly at the croc. The croc laughed and spoke.
“Do you really believe you can defeat me again otter?”It said in a deep voice, the croc smiled eerily. Asmryenth glared at the croc angrily and rage filled her face as she realized who he was.
“Oss! You took my pups but not again, never again!” she screeched flying at Oss, her claws gleaming in the sun.
“Come on Fish splash! We have to get the romp.” Squealed Moon glow, he pushed his sister away from his mother and the croc. Fish splash screamed and fought him.
“No! We can’t leave mother.” She screeched trying to run back to her mother. “She would want us to get the romp Fish.” said Moon glow softly. Fish splash looked desperately at her mother, then she looked at him, finally she hesitantly turned to face her brother. Satisfied, Moon glow ran to the edge of the river by the forest clearing and jumped in the water. Fish splash followed him. They swam to the other side and ran to a clearing covered in bushes and brambles; they moved the brambles aside and slipped into an entrance. They ran swiftly through a tunnel that leads into a large clearing filled with otters.
“Tumble claws! Bark tail!” yowled Moon glow as he barreled into the clearing, followed by Fish splash. A large mottled male-otter turned to look at the pups, he grimaced in anger, and he stalked over to them.
“What do you want and why are you out of camp!?!” Bark tail hissed. Moon glow glared at him, but was interrupted by Fish splash, who let out a wail. “Asmryenth is getting attacked by a croc!” she screeched. Bark tail gasped and turned to the rest of the romp.
“Jade fur, Bush pelt, come with me!” the two otters nodded and ran out of the camp with Bark tail. Fish splash followed them but was stopped by a large otter. Fish splash tried to get past but the otter wouldn’t budge.
“Tumble claws, please let me go!” wailed Fish splash. Tumble claws looked at her sadly, he sighed “I’m sorry Fish splash, but you’re just too young and we can’t afford to lose you.” He said softly to her. Fish splash burst into tears and ran away to the romp nursery. Tumble claws lowered his head sadly; he hoped they would save Asmryenth. He had always loved her, he remembered the day he was made leader after the previous leader Amazon call, was killed in a attack by another romp. He had looked for her after the ceremony, hoping she would become his mate. But was only given heartbreak when she announced her and Mud bark were mates and looked at him with acceptance and affection that Tumble claws wanted her to give him. After all those shades he had forgiven her but still loved her in his heart. A bark was uttered and Tumble claws flinched and looked up to see the patrol carrying Asmryenth’s limp body, he gasped and ran over to them. But was pushed aside by Mud bark as he ran to his mate. He wailed and buried his nose in her fur. A pretty light-brown otter stepped out of her burrow and ran over to them, she squeaked in horror as she looked at Asmryenth’s limp body. She touched her nose to her chest and then slowly pulled away, she looked up as Mud bark waited for her answer. She shook her head sadly, Mud bark made a choke-gasping sound in his throat and threw back his head and wailed in grief. Tumble claws closed his eyes and lowered his head sadly; he pushed his nose into Asmryenth already-cold fur. Good bye my love. He said in his mind.

[Count Dracula]

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