the forgotten (book)((please read and comment.unfinised))

[▷ Dreamcatcher ◁]

((I need help please, please commen/criticize. I would like help on how this is so far. Thanx ))

This book is based on the end of the world from a 14 year old girl's...and her brothers point of view.

INTRO:::::
Its been two weeks since thousands of people have disapeared now, the government tells us it was an abduction. The world seems to slowly be falling apart and All the churches are empty around here.... My name is Nicole. Im an average 14 year old girl with medium, dirty blonde hair and blue eyes. I live with my older brother Zach, he is about 3 years older than me. My parents are on a vacation in Hawaii and wont be back for a week so its just us.

CHAPTER ONE :::::::

The alarm clock sets off and I moan in annoyance that its already time to get up. I turn it off and slowly sit up in bed, stretch, and trudge over to my dresser. still tired, I grab my robe then brush my hair a bit. I take a big breath and slip on my slippers then head downstairs.
Once downstairs, I head to the livingroom where the news was on. Usually, i would change the channel but on the tv i saw something terrible... the president was up on stage, giving his speech to a crowed of people, as soon as he bagan again after people clapping, a loud boom echoed through the room which he stood and suddenly he fell, blood sprayed on the wall behind him. The president had gotten shot. His guards rushed to his side as the ambulance came to take him away and, you could hear women cry as they watched him get carried into the ambulance. Shocked, I called zach and paused the tv. " Zach! Get in here...quick!!! " i called then could hear his bedroom door close, " what now?! " he complained and rubbed his eyes as he came to the couch. " just watch," I pressed play and rewatched the scene. After it had finished, zach shook his head and took the remote from my hand, shutting off the telivision," this is not good," he said as he head into the kitchen.