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~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter Two Up! *

Postby . ME » Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:35 am

Before I start, I just wanna tell you what the story is about, to see if you'll like it or not x3
It takes place on another planet; A planet identical to earth, but they have 'weird' animals, like cats with wings and feathery tails and such. The planet is called Terra. The main characters are two Sulka; A long, tall, slender, fast, cat that has feathery wings, feathers on the end of there tail, very small feathers in the back of there ears and on top of there ears, and small feathers in the back of there paws. One, a male/tom, named Owl Flight ( Owl for short ). The second, a female/she-cat, named Blue Canary ( Blue for short ). Owl Flight's owner, Juliet, best friend, Angel, dies. Angel is Blue Canary's owner. Since nobody else would take Blue Canary, Juliet takes her in. Owl Flight and Blue Canary used to have play-dates when they were kittens, and Owl Flight did not like her because she would always annoy him and called him weird names. But when he sees her as a adult, he starts to really care about her and fall in love. So, basically, that's what the whole story is about. Now to the story!
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Chapter One:
Owl Flight sat curled up with Juliet. He watched as she wiped away her tears with a tissue and hang up the phone. " Owl, Angel died in the hurricane. Blue needs a new owner. " Juliet said. I hope Juliet isn't thinking of adopting that chubby she-cat... Owl thought. But of course, then Juliet said, " Owl, boy, we gotta take her in. Nobody else wants her. ". Owl Flight jumped up and yowled, " Noo! We can't adopt her! She....She.....She is annoying! ". Juliet patted his head and said, " Aww, Look how excited you are! ". Owl sat down. " Sometimes I hate how human's cant understand us.... " He sighed. Juliet happily got up, and said, " Time to go get Blue Canary! ". Owl watched as she walked out the door. He hopped off the bed, and went into the living room, where the fireplace was. He lay down and stretched out next to the fireplace. It warmed his brown, tan, and white fur, and he was just about to fall asleep, when he heard the door open. He quickly trotted out of the living room, and when he saw Juliet holding a cage, he wasn't too happy. Owl looked down, waiting for the chubby, rude, Sulka to come out of that cage. But when he looked up, he didn't see that Sulka. He saw a pretty, lithe, slender, graceful, sky blue Sulka with white paws and black wings and feathers. Tears ran down her face. " B-Blue Canary? Are you okay? " Owl Flight asked. Blue looked up at him, tears still running down her face. Owl felt guilty for calling her rude and annoying. He wiped away her tears with his paws. " It'll be okay. " He whispered in her ear.
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And truth be told, I N E V E R was yours
The F E A R, the F E A R of falling apart
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter One Up! *

Postby caress. » Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:51 am

I like it! C:

~Kara
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I'm wasted, losing time
I'm a foolish, fragile spine
I want all that is not mine
I want him but we're not right

In the darkness I will meet my creators
And they will all agree, that I'm a suffocator

I should go now quietly
For my bones have found a place
To lie down and sleep
Where all my layers can become reeds
All my limbs can become trees
All my children can become me
What a' mess I leave
To follow

In the darkness I will meet my creators
They will all agree, I'm a suffocator
Suffocator
Oh, no

I'm sorry if I smothered you
I sometimes wish I'd stayed inside
My mother
Never' to come out
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter One Up! *

Postby . ME » Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:51 am

Thanks! C:
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I'm . ME, because I AM A STRONG INDEPENDENT pom doge WOMAN WHO AIN'T AFRAID TO SHOW HER PERSONALITY

If you love me let me G O
If you love me let me G O
‘Cause these words are K N I V E S that often leave scars
The F E A R of falling apart
And truth be told, I N E V E R was yours
The F E A R, the F E A R of falling apart
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter One Up! *

Postby caress. » Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:52 am

You're welcome! I can't wait for the next chapter! <3

~Kara
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I'm wasted, losing time
I'm a foolish, fragile spine
I want all that is not mine
I want him but we're not right

In the darkness I will meet my creators
And they will all agree, that I'm a suffocator

I should go now quietly
For my bones have found a place
To lie down and sleep
Where all my layers can become reeds
All my limbs can become trees
All my children can become me
What a' mess I leave
To follow

In the darkness I will meet my creators
They will all agree, I'm a suffocator
Suffocator
Oh, no

I'm sorry if I smothered you
I sometimes wish I'd stayed inside
My mother
Never' to come out
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter One Up! *

Postby . ME » Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:55 am

It'll be up soon :3
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If you love me let me G O
If you love me let me G O
‘Cause these words are K N I V E S that often leave scars
The F E A R of falling apart
And truth be told, I N E V E R was yours
The F E A R, the F E A R of falling apart
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter One Up! *

Postby caress. » Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:58 am

Okay! I'll keep my eye out! C:
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I'm wasted, losing time
I'm a foolish, fragile spine
I want all that is not mine
I want him but we're not right

In the darkness I will meet my creators
And they will all agree, that I'm a suffocator

I should go now quietly
For my bones have found a place
To lie down and sleep
Where all my layers can become reeds
All my limbs can become trees
All my children can become me
What a' mess I leave
To follow

In the darkness I will meet my creators
They will all agree, I'm a suffocator
Suffocator
Oh, no

I'm sorry if I smothered you
I sometimes wish I'd stayed inside
My mother
Never' to come out
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter One Up! *

Postby . ME » Mon Feb 27, 2012 7:34 am

Well, here it is, its in Blue Canary's point of view.

Chapter Two:
Blue looked at him. Not even an old friend can heal my torn heart She thought. " Come on, follow me. I wanna show you something cool. " Owl Flight said. Blue nodded, and followed him to the fireplace. " Those buckets are filled with all sorts of stuff. If you throw them in the fire, the fire will show weird pictures, or even change colors! " Owl explained. " Really? " Blue asked. He nodded, and pushed a bucket of sand towards himself. He scooped some sand up in his paw, and threw it into the fire. Blue watched as the fire turned from red to green. " That....That's amazing! " She said. She pulled a bucket full of soot towards her, grabbed a pawful, and threw it in the fire. " Soot makes images. Look in the middle of the fire! Its a...Hmm...Wait, Its a bear! " Owl said. Blue looked, and she saw it, right in the middle of the fire. " Cool! ". Then the image disappeared. " You wanna know whats really fun? " Owl asked. Blue looked at him, and narrowed her eyes. " What? " She asked. " This! " Owl Flight said as he flung the bucket of soot at Blue, making it get all stuck in her fur, and very dark. " Oh, Its ON! " She said. She pushed the bucket of sand onto Owl, making his fur a sandy color. He then grabbed a bucket full of dry mud, and threw it on her, making her fur even darker. Blue grabbed a bucket of dirt and threw it onto him. As they continued to throw random stuff at each other, Juliet walked in, and she was not very happy. " Oh look! You've got the carpet all dirty! I'll have to go clean this and you two up! " She said. Blue now felt very guilty. Owl turned to Blue. " She's not really angry. Watch. " He said. He rubbed against her legs, and started to purr. " Oh, Fine, I forgive you...But I still need to clean you and the rug. And at least you made Blue happy. " Juliet said. " I just wish we could help. We made the mess after all. " Blue said. " Yeah....Your right. " Owl sighed. " Wait, I know how to help! " Blue said. She lay down, and rolled around the carpet, her fur picking up every little spot. When Juliet came back, the rug was spotless, and Blue and Owl....Where covered in soot, mud, dirt, sand, and whole bunch of other stuff. " Thanks. But you guys need a bath! " Juliet laughed. She picked up the two and brought them to the bath, turning on the water and putting them in. " I hate water. Makes my fur heavy and all....wet! " Blue mumbled. " Me too. Hey, maybe after this I could show you something...Cool? " Owl asked. Blue just nodded as Juliet started to scrub both of them with soap. One was pink, and on it labeled the words, ' Dove Feathers '. Blue was getting scrubbed with this one. The other was a bright yellow, and on it labeled the words, ' Sunshine Rays '. Owl was getting scrubbed with this one. Blue shut her eyes as Juliet squeezed water and got all the soap out of her fur, and then did the same with Owl. The water had turned a black-brown-grey color. The water was drained out of the tub, and they two felines where dried with towels. " Now let me show you that cool thing.... " Owl said as he walked to the window. Blue followed.
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I'm . ME, because I AM A STRONG INDEPENDENT pom doge WOMAN WHO AIN'T AFRAID TO SHOW HER PERSONALITY

If you love me let me G O
If you love me let me G O
‘Cause these words are K N I V E S that often leave scars
The F E A R of falling apart
And truth be told, I N E V E R was yours
The F E A R, the F E A R of falling apart
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter Two Up! *

Postby caress. » Mon Feb 27, 2012 8:37 am

OoO I like it! -claps- Very nice! C:

~Kara
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I'm wasted, losing time
I'm a foolish, fragile spine
I want all that is not mine
I want him but we're not right

In the darkness I will meet my creators
And they will all agree, that I'm a suffocator

I should go now quietly
For my bones have found a place
To lie down and sleep
Where all my layers can become reeds
All my limbs can become trees
All my children can become me
What a' mess I leave
To follow

In the darkness I will meet my creators
They will all agree, I'm a suffocator
Suffocator
Oh, no

I'm sorry if I smothered you
I sometimes wish I'd stayed inside
My mother
Never' to come out
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter Two Up! *

Postby . ME » Mon Feb 27, 2012 8:58 am

Thank you! :3
Hi! c:
I'm . ME, because I AM A STRONG INDEPENDENT pom doge WOMAN WHO AIN'T AFRAID TO SHOW HER PERSONALITY

If you love me let me G O
If you love me let me G O
‘Cause these words are K N I V E S that often leave scars
The F E A R of falling apart
And truth be told, I N E V E R was yours
The F E A R, the F E A R of falling apart
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Re: ~How I Feel~ * Please comment! Chapter Two Up! *

Postby caress. » Mon Feb 27, 2012 11:20 pm

You're welcome! ^-^

~Kara
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I'm wasted, losing time
I'm a foolish, fragile spine
I want all that is not mine
I want him but we're not right

In the darkness I will meet my creators
And they will all agree, that I'm a suffocator

I should go now quietly
For my bones have found a place
To lie down and sleep
Where all my layers can become reeds
All my limbs can become trees
All my children can become me
What a' mess I leave
To follow

In the darkness I will meet my creators
They will all agree, I'm a suffocator
Suffocator
Oh, no

I'm sorry if I smothered you
I sometimes wish I'd stayed inside
My mother
Never' to come out
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