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The little things (Looking for critiques!)

Postby 7zebey » Sun Feb 26, 2012 3:26 pm

It's the little things that make you fall in love with a person.

It's the way she'll start humming when she's bored.

It's the way she never makes excuses.

It's the way she's always smiling.

It's the way she tries to cheer you up, even if she has to go out of her way to do it.

It's the way she refuses to laugh at bad jokes.

It's the way she'll smirk and roll her eyes instead, and call you an idiot.

It's the way she accidentally tones you out, then gets all flustered and apologizes when she realizes.

It's the way she squeals like a little kid when it snows.

It's the way she'll call you a wimp when you take the bus instead of walking home.

It's the way she knows what you're talking about when you talk about video games.

It's the way she'll kiss you on the cheek and say "Sucks for you." when you complain about homework.

It's the way she says "Love you." every Friday night after shoving a muffin in your mouth.

Yes, it's the little things that make you fall in the love with a person.

And it's those little things that make you stick around.
The lantern glows
In a flickering gold
And the wolves onyx eyes
Grow slowly more bold

"Come to me, child,
Come keep me warm"
"Come now child,
Aren't you here to perform?"

But as you stand still
In the very same place
A shocking scowl
Comes over her face

And her fair onyx eyes
Grow a shade much too cold
And they seem to tell stories
That should have never been told

She screams and she howls
And seethes with rage
And what seemed to be young
Is now showing age


So be quick now child
Do not stay
For instinct has told you
To run away.



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