Should I keep writing this?

[Stargoon]

Currently, I'm not too sure of my writing anymore, so I wanted to share this so far.

All I have is the prologue, and even that isn't even close to completed yet. Haven't spell-checked either. x3

Imperfections
A Pokemon Fanfic

-PROLOGUE-

A breeze blew across the waters, waves lapping the shore of New Island. Inside the Laboratory a commotion was stirring. Three men in white labcoats were standing in front of an egg incubator, one frantically writing down the happenings the other two reading off data. The egg in the incubator was stirring. One of the men reading data stopped and hollered, "Dr. Joy! Please, come quickly!"
"Coming, coming, what is it?" came the voice, a woman appearing through a doorway, light pink hair held up by a few bobby pins, carrying a clipboard.
"The egg!" One of the other men hollered. Dr. Joy let out a yelp of exitement and dashed over, high heels clicking across the tile floor furiously.
The egg, bright yellow with a black zigzag across the bottom, cracked suddenly, blue sparks flew around in the container. The scientists closest jumped backwards and watched as the egg jaggedly broke open. A yellow paw poked out and waved around, covered in goo, then disappeared again. In a sudden burst the egg split into shards, more small blue sparks flying. Laying in the incubator was a baby Pichu, eyes closed, panting.
Dr. Joy rushed forward and opened the door to be greeted by a hungry wail from the Pichu. She laughed softly and lifted it out. "Strong little guy, that's for sure." Gently she handed him to one of the men. "Clean him up and someone get me a bottle of milk to feed him. You, follow him and keep taking notes!" Quickly the men dispersed, Dr. Joy wiped her hands quickly on the lab coat and sat down in front of one of the many computer terminals.

Date: November 18, 2011
User: Doctor Amanda Joycelyn

5:36 am - The forst of the eggs has hatched! After two years of breeding we may finally have the genetically perfect Pokemon we've been trying for. The Pokemon is a Pichu, appearing to be male, and so far very strong,as, he let out a mighty wail as soon as I opened the incubator. For now, we will let him mature in the lab before we expose him to other Pichu.

The two men that went with the Pichu re-entered the room. Dr. Joy stood up and turned around. The one who was writing put down the pad of paper, filled with notes, and searced in a drawer for another pad of paper to write on. The other man handed Dr. Joy the Pichu, clean, damp, and wrapped in a warm towel. The Pichu let out a few more grumbles and squeals until the third man returned with a small bottle of milk. Dr. Joy held the bottle of warmed Pikachu milk up to the Pichu's mouth, it began to suckle greedily.
Finally getting a good look at the Pichu, Dr. Joy took mental notes of his appearance. He was a paler yellow than most Pichu, but his cheek pouches a darker red than even a normal Pikachu's. His left ear was spiked, and was colored black in a star shape. She lifted the bottle up away from the Pichu for a few moments to give it breating room. Suddenly it yawned wide and tucked further into the towel. Smiling she handed the Pichu back to the same man who had washed him off, "Here, take him to the nursery room. Little guy needs a nap." The man nodded and took him, smiling, and walked out of the room again.
"Should I go with to take notes, Doctor?"
"No need. It's almost 6 in the morning, Kirk." she put her hand on his shoulder, "Go home."
Kirk nodded in return and took his labcoat off, hanging it on a hook before heading out for the 3 hour boat ride ahead of him back to Fuchsia City.

[Stargoon]

This is based roughly on the Pokemon movie, Mewtwo Strikes Back. The whole thing is Nurse Joy went back to the lab on New Island and tried to create perfect Pokemon, but instead of "growing" them she was breeding them.

Just thought I'd add that, and give this a Bump.

[Stargoon]

Bump?

[Stargoon]

Please comment? I really really want to know if this is good.

[Summer_Storm]

it seems okay. it could use some extra details to draw a better picture in the readers head. I personally don't know how far you're going to be able to get into it as I don't know pokemon very well but if you have some decent plot twists and scenes planned I think it could go somewhere.

[Stargoon]

I have plenty of plot twists, and I still haven't presented the other two scientists, as, they will be important.

As for the rest of the plot I have planned - *River Song voice* Spoilers.

[Summer_Storm]

Ohh! exciting! Then keep it up!