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read it is about wolves

Postby Deadbeat.bones » Tue Feb 21, 2012 10:42 am

Wolves of Horace Mann middle school

Wolves running simultaneously the pads of their paws hurting, a white wolf is in front with a black wolf behind and a dark grey and a light grey wolf with the oldest wolf in the middle. All together they make the state of Colorado’s wolf population. The pack is known as the red moon pack but they are no ordinary pack.




Chapter 1

Our first day of 8th grade. I was walking through the hall of the school the smell of hair spray and Aux roaming around with the air. Every one around me acted like I was the odd ball but I was not the only one who was odd, my friends were too.
My first friend is Camden or Camie for short, she is a very small girl compared to me she has brown eyes and blonde hair; witch is not her true hair color. Her true hair color is the color of old dirt. Gloria, she is our school’s librarian is small and elderly and in 1 year is retiring. She has white curly hair that can stand on its own blue eyes, she pretty much read books her whole life and loves them. I call her special and she calls me skinny girl.
There is another person I am friends with her name is Desere she is what she likes to call her self a white Mexican, she had dark brown hair and likes DOMO. She has brown eyes that look black and she is funny. She also says that I have idiotitus a disease for idiots.
My name is Shannkara, I have sun bleached brunette hair and hazel eyes and dwarf all of my friends. And we all have something in common, and it is that we all love or like wolves.
Our first day back did not go well for we did nothing but review the rules and how we should act. The second day back and we did the same only for voice levels in the hallway and other parts of the school then at 11:30 we went to lunch and got everyone to gather around except for Gloria. I was talking to Camie while we waited for Desere to come.
I was facing Camie “I hate how my mom treats me and bosses me around it makes me feel like a piece of sh*t!” i had to yell so she could hear me
Camie answered “that is because she is your mom!” I could barely hear her over the 100 8th grader screaming trying to make them selves herd of the yelling of others. I looked at her “I know, but still I-“I was cut off by the bell to go inside. I guess I could use the saying “saved by the bell”. I walked to my locker Camie following me.
“I wonder where Amara is.” I said trying to get my combo rite. Camie shrugged. Amara is one of our friends she has depression and some times stays home when it is really bad.Three and a half hours earlier we went to go get lunch.
Three and a half hours earlier we went to go get lunch. We’d had all finished our lunches by 15 minuets after 11:30 and went to the field to race and stretch our muscles. Desere, Camie and I raced twenty meters and then stopped out of breath, then the bell rang every eighth grade student ran to get to their next class in time but us three did not go, oh no because we had a secret that no one knew only the four of us did.
chapter 2
We were on top of the gym roof over the basketball court, tails whipping the air there standing was a white wolf with bright yellow eyes and a long tail behind it was a black wolf with blue eyes and an original wolf tail, behind the black wolf, with a husky looking grey wolf with brown eyes and original wolf tail waving around, with a grey wolf with green eyes. Making sure that everyone went in side and no one was out side they jumped down. Kira the white wolf, shadow the black wolf, snow the husky wolf,and domo the grey wolf They ran through the field and to the sidewalk to Cheyenne Mountain. They passed cars that honked their horns and people who scream like they have never seen them before. One boy about 2 years old steppes out in front of the white wolf Kira and goes to pet it. He holds his hand out and she rubes her big white head in his palm and licks it and then runs to catch up with the others She manages to lead them again.
“Shadow
my thoughts flow to her mind
“Yes”
she sent her thought to me
“Make sure that snow can make it at the speed of running”
my words went to her. i flicked my tail to her and she ran to the back with snow cars still making noises and shouting at us. Then we came to a corner and a man was waiting there for us. I yelled at the pack to stop through thought and they ceased to run and came to a canter. I looked at the man in front of me with a net and barred my teeth at him and he sprang back afraid he was going to get bit. He sounded surprised when he said,
“Whoa you are some big dogs. “
He said backing away to get to his truck truck to get a pole with a wire at the end of it. Looking over his shoulder to make sure we were still there then closed the door and came to us slowly. He leaned the pole to me to try his luck I lunged at him making him move back a few steps. I swished my tail to signal that the pack should go ahead of me Out of the corner of my eye I saw shadow flick her ear and the pack moved on with out me. I looked back at the man holding the pole, he was scruffy looking with a hat that said pound, and his truck said Colorado Springs humane society. I looked back at him the turned my head to the cars they were looking at me and the man in front of me. I looked back at the man and sprinted as fast as I could away from him and to catch up with the pack of four and lead them. I saw shadow and ran faster to get into the lead , my lungs burning with every breath I pulled in. I managed to make it back in front looking back to make sure that the pound guy was not following us when I saw nothing but cars I looked back in front of me.
“Snow, how are you doing?”
I sent the thought to her
I set my tail low.
“I am doing well”
she replied to me as we keep running.
“OK we are about a mile from Cheyenne Mountain and keep an eye out for anyone who might hurt us, ok?”
I sent the thought to the pack
“Ok”
they all said together. They were moving their ears around to see if they could catch a sound of the truck. I panted tired and sore. I slowed to a trot we made it to the mountain around seven falls. I found a creek and laid in it looking at shadow.
“Hey shadow even though I am alpha and you are beta do you want to play?”
I looked at her and moved my tail.
“Not rite now I am tired from the run up here and sleepy,”
she looked at me as she sent the thought to me.
“Ok”
I sent back to her.
I shifted to my human forum and my human name Shannkara and watched the rest of the pack follow me “How are you all doing?”
They all said back to me in choirs “good”
“Good” I looked around.
I walked to Mrs. Clevers “are you ok?”
She looked at me “ya I am fine “
“Camie can you keep an eye on Mrs. Clevers?”
She came up to me “yes I will, I will do what ever it takes”
“Thank you” I turn around to see a hill and shifted forms and scouted ahead. Then half way up something moved in the water. I slowed down and looked towards the creek. It was a full grown black bear and her cubs. They were learning how to fish. I watched, interested at what they were doing. I turned around to the bottom of the hill
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Re: this is a book i am curently writeing

Postby Deadbeat.bones » Tue Feb 21, 2012 11:08 am

i will edit every time i write more om mw (micro soft word) plz comment :D or tips i am open to any suggestions
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby House Stark » Tue Feb 21, 2012 11:56 am

personally, think it could use finer dicton... take petty words, such as 'walk', and change it to something more; such as 'stride' or 'amble'
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby Deadbeat.bones » Tue Feb 21, 2012 11:59 am

ok i will try to change it :) thank you your comment is very much appreciated
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby 1Way-1Day-1D » Tue Feb 21, 2012 12:42 pm

that is really good Wolf!
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby Deadbeat.bones » Tue Feb 21, 2012 12:43 pm

thank you i am working on ch2 now
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby 1Way-1Day-1D » Tue Feb 21, 2012 12:45 pm

cant wait to read!
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“Oh it's the bingo playing wizard
I love you guys so much, but not as much as my bird and my bingo!”
― Louis Tomlinson

“I love the big red bus!”
― Louis Tomlinson

“It doesn't matter how much you flirt the whole day, at night you'll always end up thinking about the one you truly love”
― Zayn Malik

“I'm the kind of boy that can fall in love with any girl because I love with the heart, not the eyes.”
― Niall Horan

“Life is funny. Things change, people change, but you will always be you, so stay true to yourself and never sacrifice who you are for anyone.”
― Zayn Malik

“Liam, shut up. I'm trying to do an interview”
― Niall Horan

“Stop the traffic...let 'em through...”
― Louis Tomlinson

“I'd rather be called a boy and play with paper airplanes than be called a man and play with a girl's heart.”
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“There comes a day when you realise turning the page is the best feeling in the world, because you realise there's so much more to the book than the page you were stuck on.”
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby Deadbeat.bones » Tue Feb 21, 2012 12:47 pm

thank you try to post it soon
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby isthisoptional » Tue Feb 21, 2012 1:36 pm

Where did you get the Name Horace Mann Middle School?
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Re: book i am currently writeing about wolves

Postby Deadbeat.bones » Tue Feb 21, 2012 1:39 pm

i go to school there
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