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Child of the Holocaust

Postby KariSohma22 » Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:33 pm

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I Am A Child of The Holocaust

I am from the house in my small village,

from booming propaganda and posters.

I am from the small cottage that smells like fresh bread.

I am from the trees of the forest,

the smell of rain in the air.

I am from the weddings and big smiles,

from my mother and my father and my grandmother.

I am from the twiddling of fingers and the whistling of old tunes.

From not running into the Nazis,

who are like hungry bears,

and to always pray before dinner.

I am from Jews, the passovers with my family and the hiding of the bread.

I am from Poland,

bread and cheese filling me up.

From the day the Nazis stormed in and scooped our family up,

the crying of my brother,

and the silence of my parents.

I am from the old oak cabinet,

filled with pictures of the family that the Nazis could not find,

and the Star of David,

reminding me of the hope I once had.

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I wrote this poem for school, since we're putting on a play about the Holocaust, and our poems are going to be displayed as part of the play. Please comment! I worked very hard on this.
Last edited by KariSohma22 on Sat Feb 18, 2012 5:30 am, edited 3 times in total.
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When you try your best but you don't succeed
When you get what you want but not what you need
When you feel so tired but you can't sleep
Stuck in reverse

And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?

Lights will guide you home
And ignite your bones
And I will try to fix you

And high up above or down below
When you're too in love to let it go
But if you never try you'll never know
Just what you're worth
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby KariSohma22 » Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:42 pm

I know this is a complicated subject, but please comment! It would make me happy!
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When you try your best but you don't succeed
When you get what you want but not what you need
When you feel so tired but you can't sleep
Stuck in reverse

And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?

Lights will guide you home
And ignite your bones
And I will try to fix you

And high up above or down below
When you're too in love to let it go
But if you never try you'll never know
Just what you're worth
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby KariSohma22 » Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:57 pm

Bump!
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When you try your best but you don't succeed
When you get what you want but not what you need
When you feel so tired but you can't sleep
Stuck in reverse

And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?

Lights will guide you home
And ignite your bones
And I will try to fix you

And high up above or down below
When you're too in love to let it go
But if you never try you'll never know
Just what you're worth
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby KariSohma22 » Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:27 pm

Bump!
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When you try your best but you don't succeed
When you get what you want but not what you need
When you feel so tired but you can't sleep
Stuck in reverse

And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?

Lights will guide you home
And ignite your bones
And I will try to fix you

And high up above or down below
When you're too in love to let it go
But if you never try you'll never know
Just what you're worth
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby The Awesome Meerkat » Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:28 pm

Beautiful work. I like how you built the person's identity and then went into a description of the suffering, so the audience can sympathize with the character even more than they already have. I especially liked the "Star of David" part at the end, although the "old oak cabinet" part was a little vague, because it added a touch of hope to the dark setting of the poem.
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby KariSohma22 » Fri Feb 17, 2012 2:31 pm

Thanks! The template of the poem said 'where your family portraits are', so I chose a cabinet, to show that they were hiding them from the Nazis.
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When you try your best but you don't succeed
When you get what you want but not what you need
When you feel so tired but you can't sleep
Stuck in reverse

And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?

Lights will guide you home
And ignite your bones
And I will try to fix you

And high up above or down below
When you're too in love to let it go
But if you never try you'll never know
Just what you're worth
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby KariSohma22 » Sat Feb 18, 2012 5:23 am

Bump!
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When you try your best but you don't succeed
When you get what you want but not what you need
When you feel so tired but you can't sleep
Stuck in reverse

And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?

Lights will guide you home
And ignite your bones
And I will try to fix you

And high up above or down below
When you're too in love to let it go
But if you never try you'll never know
Just what you're worth
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby KariSohma22 » Sat Feb 18, 2012 10:06 am

Bump!
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When you try your best but you don't succeed
When you get what you want but not what you need
When you feel so tired but you can't sleep
Stuck in reverse

And the tears come streaming down your face
When you lose something you can't replace
When you love someone but it goes to waste
Could it be worse?

Lights will guide you home
And ignite your bones
And I will try to fix you

And high up above or down below
When you're too in love to let it go
But if you never try you'll never know
Just what you're worth
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Re: Child of the Holocaust

Postby Charias » Sat Feb 18, 2012 10:40 am

Beautiful poem... It's so hard to think about all of the innocent people killed during the holocaust...
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