~Into the Caves~ (cat story)

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~Into the Caves~ (cat story)

Postby ✖HESTIA » Thu Feb 16, 2012 10:59 am

This is my first story on CS so please constructive critisize is needed.


Characters- Loners:
Basil- she is a blue-gray she-cat with dark blue eyes.
Bane- he is a muscular deep brown tom with silver eyes.
Sky- she is a light gray she-cat with black stripes.
Ice- he is a white tom with ice blue eyes and black patches of fur.
Kittypets:
Jazzy- tortoiseshell she-cat with amber eyes.
Cia-light ginger she-cat with green eyes.
Cree- black kittypet with hazel eyes.
(More characters to come)
Bane and Sky are siblings.
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Re: ~Into the Caves~ (cat story)

Postby ✖HESTIA » Thu Feb 16, 2012 11:12 am

Prolouge

A dark brown tom stepped out in a clearing, he looked around cautiously. A bush shook across the clearing, the toms head whipped around to stare at the bush. "Who goes there?" Asks the tom suspiciously. A light gray tabby she-cat stepped out of the bush gracefully. The tom relaxed. "What are you doing here Sky?"He asked the she-cat. Sky smiled "I wanted to see where you go everynight Bane."She said, then she looked down. "The others worry about you. I worry about you."She said looking into Bane's eyes. Bane's smile disappeared. "Don't worry about me Sky, go back to the other's I'll be fine."He said softly. Sky nodded and disappeared into the forest. Bane disappeared back into the underbrush.
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Re: ~Into the Caves~ (cat story)

Postby ✖HESTIA » Wed Feb 29, 2012 9:44 am

Critique is welcome!!!
Chapter one
Bane opened his eyes, he looked around to see his companions sleeping forms around him. One cat was awake, Basil, he looked at the she-cat's form in the dim light. The she-cat turned around and saw Bane. She smiled and padded over to Bane, she nuzzled him affectionately. Bane purred and nuzzled her back. "You finally woke up furball"she said. Bane grinned "were you waiting for me to wake up this whole time?"He asked her. Basil shook her head and layed down. "We should leave early tomorrow"said Bane thoughtfully. Basil nodded, they both layed their heads down and drifted off to sleep...


Yeah. A pretty short chapter.
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