a warrior cat story, no title...yet

[chintz]

lol

[tyger.]

Hey. I write Warrior Cats stories, too! How`s this:

Lionpaw padded slowly over to where his mentor, Iceblaze, was waiting with his sister, Poppypaw. "Come on, slowcoach!" laughed Poppypaw as she bounded up to her brother and jumped on him.
"Geroff!" Lionpaw shook her off and went over to where Iceblaze was waiting. The grey warrior gave his snow-white chest a lick as he studied the two apprentices. Lionpaw was an already powerful golden-brown tabby tom, but Iceblaze worried about the fact that he already considered himself a warrior. The young cat never joined in the other apprentices games, while his pretty brown tabby sister, Poppypaw,was the complete opposite! She was fast, but not as strong as Lionpaw. She never looked down on cats and was already an accomplished hunter, while her brother was almost completely focused on fighting. Iceblaze shook himself, then got to his paws.
"Come on, you two. It`s time for the Gathering." Poppypaw jumped up and ran ahead, calling out a challenge to her brother for a race. Lionpaw got up and went after her. But his muscles weighed him down and the much smaller, lighter Poppypaw ran round him as he tried to beat her. Iceblaze hurried up. He could see that Lionpaw was taking this much too seriously. If he wasnt careful, the next time the two of them were together, Lionpaw would attack Poppypaw- and looking at Lionpaw`s huge paws and shoulders, he could tell who the winner of this battle would be. Poppypaw, however, seemed unaware of the threat as she continued to tease Lionpaw. Iceblaze jumped between the two.
"Let`s go." he mewed quietly, padding on ahed with Lionpaw glaring at Poppypaw as she bounded along in front.

They got to the Gathering.

Hows this??

[chintz]

I suggest make a thread for that cause thats good

['.~VoidRunner~.']

Please, continue.

[.oOFrøstBittenOo.]

I like it! Some advice- Try to use capitals, and make a new paragrph everytime someone new speaks, and then say whos speaking. It will be alittle easier to tell whos talking, and ALOT easiaer to read. :3 But other then that, love it! Please contunue.

-Frostbitten (Otherwise known as Honeymist)

[tyger.]

Thanks! I`ll continue to work on it. Please check again- I`ve updated the story

ps thanks for all the advice.