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The Cats Of Hutan ( Chapter two up! Comments please?)

Postby . ME » Mon Feb 06, 2012 11:30 pm

Before I start the story, I am going to tell of how this story's characters 'ways' and a little about the story.

THE CLANS

There are two clans; Separuh Clan and Sampingan Clan. They divided the Hutan Forest into two territories after ' The Great Battle '.

THE GREAT BATTLE

The great battle took place at the Moutain Stone; A white-grassed place with a giant stone in the middle of it. The clans used to roam wherever, until this great battle. They fought and fought, until the stone split into two. Then each clan took a piece of the stone and put it in the middle of there camp. As soon as the battle ended, they split the forest into different territories.

RANKS

The clans have ranks. Here are the ranks:
Fighters
Fighters fight in the battles, but if the battle is very bad, hunters and other ranks will join the battle.
Hunters
Hunters hunt the food for there clans, and do not fight unless the battle is very bad. They cannot become leader or deputy.
Healer
Healers heal there clan-mates, and will never ever fight no matter what. They cannot become leader or deputy.
Spies
Spies sneak into the other clan's territory and quietly watch and listen, then report the news to the leader. They cannot become leader or deputy.
Stealers
Stealers go into the other clan's territory and try to steal the other half of the rock, and risk there lives. They cannot become leader or deputy.
Leader
The leader leads the clan and orders them on what to do. They always have the word 'moon' at the end of there name.
Deputy
The deputy sends out patrols and tells the clan what to do when the leader is gone, and also become leader when the present leader dies.
Nursers
Nursers have kits and are almost always have kits, and if not are pregnant. They can quit this rank any time they would like, or keep it as there rank.
Warriors
Warriors do almost all; Spy, Steal, Fight, and hunt. Not a lot are given this rank.
Trainees
Trainees train to be what they are going to be when they get older; They are not kits, but not adults or teens either. When they become adults, they become what they trained for. They cannot train to be leader or deputy. Always have the word path at the end of there name.
Loners and Rogues
Loners and rogues do not last long in this territory, for the clan cats will kill any cat in there territory on sight, unless it is in there clan.
Kits
Kit is short for kitten. They are the lowest rank, and they grow to a trainee when they become a few months older. Always have the word tiny at the end of there name.
Elders
Elders dont do much; They sit and tell stories of there past. They do not fight, or hunt, just go for walks or stay in camp. They are brought there own food, and cannot become leader.


THE CATS

The cats in this story are about 5 inches taller than the average cat, and have a bit longer claws. They can range from the regular cat colors, such as brown, grey, black, etc. NOT blue, purple, pink, etc.

HOW IT STARTED

Well, the clans have now been here for centuries. But it all started when cats decided to move into a forest. They fought with each other over territory, food, and beliefs. They started a giant battle with each other, but a two wise elders settled it down before it got too bad. Thats when they decided to split into clans.

THE ENDLESS PATH

The Endless Path is were the cats go when they die; They live up in the stars as ghosts, and send omens and prophecies to the living clans; Mostly leaders, but sometimes other ranks.

NAMES

Though this is not based of erin hunter's warrior series, the cats do have weird names, like Silverwing. But...They most of the time dont use the same ending words. For example, in erin hunter's books, a cat would have a name something like...Blackpool. But in this book, a cat would have a name like Blackember, or Blackwood.

TRUCE

There is a truce, every half moon, both clans go to a island and chat. They cannot fight, or that cat will get killed.


WARNING:
This story is NOT based of the warrior series written by erin hunter. It is my own writing piece I have wrote by myself. Please dont steal this idea! It is my original work! Not yours! And please, please really dont steal it.....I worked hard to get this idea!

STORY DESCRIPTION:
Well, I dont really know what to say.....Its about cats in clans....Uh...I dont think I can describe it more xD

GLOSSARY:
Smoothpelts = Humans
Roarers = Cars
Dark Paths = Streets/Roads
Smoothpelt Place = Small Town
Nest = Houses for humans
Nesties = Cats who live with humans
Passes = Months

INSULTS:
Rabbit head ( Stupid )
Mouse Face ( Ugly )
Fox Breathe ( Smelly )


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PROPHECY: None yet
SEASON: Winter

Chapter one:

" Maplepath! Hurry up! " Goldenbeak whispered. " Sorry, But I dont wanna get caught! " Maplepath hissed quietly. Her mentor, Goldeanbeak, was already up a tree. Maplepath scurried up a tree and watched Separuh Clan's camp from above. She watched a dilute tortie cat walk up to Separuh Clan's leader, Mistmoon. She perked up her ears and listened to what the dilute tortie said. She heard the words, " Mistmoon, Coonbear and Poppyfluff have died ". Good news for Sampingan Clan She thought. Then she smiled, happy that she was going to be one of the only warriors in a few passes. " Maplepath! Listen! " Goldenbeak hissed. Then the words shouted out from below, " Spies! Quick, Get em! ". " Goldenbeak, You rabbit head! " Maplepath shouted. Maplepath quickly jumped to another tree, then another, and much more trees until she was back in her own territory. She quickly got out of the trees and ran along side Goldenbeak back to camp. " Silvermoon! Silvermoon! " Maplepath cried. Silvermoon ran out. " What?! " He said. " Two cats in Separuh Clan have died. " Goldenbeak said. Silvermoon nodded. " They nearly killed us because Goldenbeak screamed liked a eagle! " Maplepath hissed, turning to her mentor. Then, the deputy, Twinkleflick, padded in camp with his apprentice, Spiderpath and looked at Silvermoon. " I need to see what Twinkleflick and Spiderpath have to report to me " Silvermoon said as he bounded over to Twinkleflick. Maplepath and Goldenbeak followed him. Twinkleflick looked somewhat afraid. " Many cats from Separuh Clan are coming to attack! We were marking borders and we saw them rushing in. " Spiderpath shrieked. Just then, many cats poured into camp, reeking of Separuh Clan.
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Re: The Cats Of Hutan ( Chapter one up! )

Postby . ME » Tue Feb 07, 2012 9:19 am

Chapter two:

Maplepath gasped and wrinkled up her nose at the smell. A giant tom jumped onto her swiftly and had managed to scratch her forehead right before she squeezed out of his grip. Since she was smaller than the tom, she ran under the toms belly and raked it as she ran forward. Then she tumbled back, and hit his legs, making him trip. She bit into his hind leg hard, making him bleed and yowl. She quickly let out a yowl as another tom jumped onto her back. She fell onto the ground, and the cat had her pinned. She bit his front paw and then ran out of his grip. She crouched behind him, then pounced onto him and bit off the tip of his ear. As she jumped off, she bit as hard as she could into his tail and nearly ripped it right off. " Leave now! " She hissed into his ear. He nodded and ran scared. She chuckled; A fighter afraid of a trainee! But then, a trainee fell out of a tree. Maplepath jumped onto the cat and bit into the apprentice's neck; Not hard enough to kill her, though. The she-cat tried to wriggle out of Maplepath's grip, but her attempt failed. " I suppose your gonna kill me now " She hissed. Maplepath thought. It said any cat from another clan should be killed on sight; But it did not feel right to kill to Maplepath. " No, Im not. It is wrong. " Maplepath said as she got off the smaller trainee. The trainee smiled. " Im Maplepath. " Maplepath said. " Im Silverpath, Nice to meet you, Maplepath. But I should run, or my clan will punish me for talking to you. " Silverpath said. Then she ran off. I vow I will stop this killing law! Maplepath thought.


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