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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby anchor QUITTING » Sat Mar 31, 2012 2:13 am

@critics:
Thank you all so much for the critique. <3
Let me explain a few things:
• The whipping was a memory. It was a past punishment.
• I don't intend for Hurricane to be published, so I know it's a lot like Hunger Games.
• You will find out things like what a Cleansing
Is later.
• Well, in the first chapter, it's character introductions, so naturally it's boring.
• The part about so-and-so got _______ amount of Cleansings, that was intended. I have a planned plotline, and that detail WILL be imprtant.
see ya sweet peas <3
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby TrebleMaker » Sat Mar 31, 2012 2:19 am

Tangy Watermelons wrote:
@critics:
Thank you all so much for the critique. <3
Let me explain a few things:
• The whipping was a memory. It was a past punishment.
• I don't intend for Hurricane to be published, so I know it's a lot like Hunger Games.
• You will find out things like what a Cleansing
Is later.
• Well, in the first chapter, it's character introductions, so naturally it's boring.
• The part about so-and-so got _______ amount of Cleansings, that was intended. I have a planned plotline, and that detail WILL be imprtant.


I am in no way trying to sound rude or mean or anything, so don't take it that way, and feel free to totally reject/ignore what I'm about to say;
Don't you normally want the first chapter to be interesting? Other wise people may start reading it, get bored with it, and never go back and finish?
Just a thought of my part. . . :3
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby anchor QUITTING » Sat Mar 31, 2012 2:47 am

Well, for me, a big issue is making my action really fast. One after another after another. And my stories always start with something really intense, and I never explain anything. So my strategy was take it nice and slow at first, then get really intense and full of action.
see ya sweet peas <3
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby nutella ♥ » Sat Mar 31, 2012 3:31 am

@Tangy-Watermelons
I seeee....
Your story is pretty cool though, if you gave a bit more detail it would be better.
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NOTHING IS IMPOSSIBLE.
Somebody left the gate open
You know we got lost on the way
Come save us a runaway train
Goin' insane
How do we
How do we not
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How do we how do we
How do we not
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How do we how do we oh

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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby Into the Sky » Sat Mar 31, 2012 10:52 am

Hey guys, I wanna know: What's the best way to start a novel?
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby Hoof » Sat Mar 31, 2012 10:57 am

Into the Sky wrote:Hey guys, I wanna know: What's the best way to start a novel?


Well... I'd start by putting some words on a page, then try rearranging them to make a sentence or two. XDD
















But seriously, I'd think of a plot and a few characters before you start.
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby placidcoast » Sat Mar 31, 2012 11:07 am

Note to everyone: I wont be on much for a while, school is really harsh this semester! <3 <3 <3
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby Into the Sky » Sat Mar 31, 2012 11:36 am

Hoof wrote:
Into the Sky wrote:Hey guys, I wanna know: What's the best way to start a novel?


Well... I'd start by putting some words on a page, then try rearranging them to make a sentence or two. XDD
















But seriously, I'd think of a plot and a few characters before you start.


Good ideas, but when you have the plot and ideas ready...how do you really start a novel? I'm having some trouble writing my first part because there is so many ways you could start it.
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby Hoof » Sat Mar 31, 2012 11:38 am

Just start with whatever scene pops into your head (as long as it should be relevent) and write it. I usually rewrite my first scene three or four times before I publish a story.
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Re: Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

Postby Pangolin » Sat Mar 31, 2012 11:45 am

Into the Sky wrote:Good ideas, but when you have the plot and ideas ready...how do you really start a novel? I'm having some trouble writing my first part because there is so many ways you could start it.


Do you want a few examples on how I've started some of my stuff? Maybe that can help you start your own novel.
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